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Wow, thanks for sticking with it and reading it all the way through! I didn't know how accessible this would be, but I tried my hardest to give others here a glimpse of my mind.

Well, I've got to say, then, if you had no aim for a reader to "take something away" (which really should be secondary to telling a good story anyway) that this really is just good writing. I don't...

This is good. I'm curious, though, what am I supposed to take away from the story rather than just what the title suggests? I think this could be a bit more thought-provoking somehow. Not to say...

I think you should leave it in. It makes it... extra special.

Hello, all. I'm the narrator of this short story. I, myself, am a character built by Trouble, but instead of explaining how he built me, I'm going to explain things a little differently. For...

Uh, thank you for not keeping your artistic talent a secret from me!

Episode 6

Power... Strength. My life was just beginning, so I learned this lesson early: they are not the same thing. Thankfully, the lesson I learned, although originally a setback, would...

Oh my!

South Florida is a great place to be this time of year, if I do say so myself. Very temperate weather, just about perfect, lows of 50 and highs of 80.

Time for me to admit.

I'm... pleased to see progress. I was initially upset with this for a variety of reasons, but now I finally see effort on your part, and I'm happy to say so.

Honestly,...

Wow, thanks for all the reviews! I'm blown away by the positive feedback, and super-appreciative of the good criticism. Let me know if this chapter has any more of what you guys are looking for as...

Cute...

Moving on...


Stellar Haze, thank you for contributing with some worthwhile criticisms after... that... I'll definitely work on the battle scenes, but as for describing the human...

Seeing as he has already replied to good criticism with quitter's words...



I figured it would be best if he followed through with SOMETHING. It's very upsetting to see good advice go ignored...

That will be expounded on in the next chapter, so stay tuned. They're actually quite low-leveled, but we'll get to that soon.

Uh wow so much to be said. Apparently sugar-coating things for you to ingest only makes you fatter and more obstinate. So here's the deal plain and simple-like. You are not trying. It's obvious. I'm...

This would be totally and completely awesome. I have never once read any "Ash and co." fic because I'm sick of "Ash and co." but this... this is right on.

On topic: your question: realistic? ...

Hey! It's late for me to notice, but I've been away for a while, apparently you're back too! I don't know if you left for long, but I'm glad to be reading your story again. Well done again. ...

Episode 4

"Snowy, use Powder Snow!"

At that point, that was the loudest I had ever heard Terrance's sister, Angela, yell. In fact, it was the most passionate I had ever seen her about...

Alright, so glad to have some readers interested in my story! I'm back in action from my vacation and ready to roll on with the story...

Episode 3

It's near impossible to explain the feeling...

Thanks for reading, guys! I'll be taking a short break (I know I JUST started) as I'm leaving to go on vacation for a few days. I'll be back for the next episode next week.

Little more background, I want to demonstrate the idea of Pokémon's equal footing with humans in this world, and to show that battling Pokémon is supposed to be something fun and exciting, not...

If your main-main Character isn't in the battle, then it's really the character's choice. Leave it up to the character: is he interested enough in their battles to watch it? Is he a trouble-maker...

Well, a bit of background, (not much at all), Phanpy is my favorite Pokemon, I love writing stories, this is my first attempt at a first person narrative, it will be episodic, each episode may not be...

I mean to ask, what is your aim?

WHY are you writing? What is the purpose? Do you have an answer to that question?

You know, you don't have to say "thank you" and pretend as though you're listening when you're not going to change anything.

Reflect on this: what is your aim here? Do you have one? Care to share...

Brilliant, I've got some ideas already after just a little bit of thought on what you've said... Before I start, though, I feel I'll be all the richer at the beginning to hear a few more suggestions...