I still think you need to work on toning down the main character. Mary Sues get a bad rep because of the tendency for them to be mega-powerful...Originally posted by Mew2Too
Now that I've started reading again, I think it's gotten better. Blackjack Gabbiani might be able to atest to that. She's already read the new first chapter of JTC.
But again, not all Mary Sues are bad! Satoshi Tajiri admits that Ash is supposed to be himself at 10, for instance.
Just watch yourself.