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    @erwincelmo; Looks good. I can't find any loopholes in the SU. Just want to point out though, this is not an accept.

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    I have several problems with it.
    1: This is pretty much putting Salamence wings on a Blaziken. There is very little human left.
    2: The personality is contradictory. I don't see how someone can be mysterious, ill-tempered, and perpetually happy all at once.
    3: Flaw A is easily avoidable as most battles will take place on the ground.
    4: Flaw B is illogical. I'd imagine most people would get violent under this RP's context.

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    2. He isn't perpetually happy, just mostly positive. And enigmatism doesn't affect it at all.
    4. You misunderstand. It means that he gets violent easily like Salamence.

    Other two, I didn't notice, but 1 is obvious now and I feel rather embarrassed.

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    Someone who's mostly positive doesn't get angry easily. Also, this guy displays too much emotion to be enigmatic.

    If anger is a flaw, then so is Helen's superiority complex. Which it isn't.

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    Here to make the situation easier to tell what's wrong:

    Quote Originally Posted by erwincelmo View Post

    Appearance after merge: Blaziken's body and head, Salamence's claws with Blaziken's Arms and hands also with Salamence's wings and he has Blaziken's legs.Blaziken's head, but with a more human-like structure.
    Exactly what does the bold mean, and as Arc pointed out it's practically a blaziken with salamence claws and wings

    Personality: He is always happy, but if he is tired he will be moody and maybe angry from time to time, He is usually always positive.He has a phobia about ghosts in graveyards and he also is very easily scared this is also a trigger to annoy him and make him angry.He is the mysterious type, but once you know him he is very chatty and very bubbly.
    Bold 1) Being tired makes a person irritable regardless if they're usually happy
    Bold 2) Phobia=fear, fear=him being angry? Fear should=run away/avoid/scream like a baby
    NOTE: Usually happy, except when tired or scared-several merges=part ghost or full ghost, merges don't get much rest do the being hunted, so he's always angry in other words.
    Bold 3) Knowing someone's fears and how they'll act in certain situations=mysterious?
    History: He remembers nothing except that he was in the hospital and he saw his parents being covered away in a different room.
    What does covered away mean?

    Flaw A : He cannot use Blaziken's Power whilst flying in the air.

    Flaw B : If he gets angry he will get violent.
    A) What does this do to attacks that both can learn such as flamethrower
    B) Most people do

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    I'm discussing PMs with him to fix the issues.

    And Helen is just horrible.

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    That's the Arceus DNA talking.

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    Arceus is truly perfect. Therefore perfectly humble, too.

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    Arceus isn't perfect. Take M12 for example.

    If someone is given that much power, they will be invariably swayed to take advantage of it and abuse it.

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    No one is perfect, except me

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    If you judged something as morally ambiguous or a threat, doesn't mean you're judgmental.

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    Please, cease being vague.

    Anyways, this isn't about Helen.

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    I have updated my SU.
    http://bmgf.bulbagarden.net/images/signaturepics/sigpic61578_11.gif

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    Still not a fan of it. The way the appearance is worded suggests that he used to be a Blaziken, rather than a human.

    Also, Flaw A is basically the old Flaw B, just with a different trigger. A rampage isn't exactly a hinderance when it only happens after injury.

    Oh, and personality is a little off. He basically changes emotion once a day, at maximum.
    Happiness isn't a personality trait. It's an emotion.

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    Quote Originally Posted by erwincelmo View Post
    Appearance after merge: His torso is more human-like rather than purely Blaziken's torso and Blaziken's head, but with a more human-like structure, Salamence's claws with Blaziken's Arms and his hands are human-like with Salamence's wings on his back and he has Blaziken's legs.His human hair instead of Blaziken's mane, and he has a human-like feet also He is 5.9ft tall.
    What does Human like mean? Blaziken has a pretty human like body type.

    Personality: He is commonly happy, but if he is tired he will be moody and maybe angry from time to time, He is usually always positive.He has a phobia about ghosts in graveyards and he also is very easily scared by other humans this is also a trigger to annoy him and make him angry.He is the mysterious type, but once you know him he is very chatty and very bubbly.He has very few friends; they are quite close to him because they know him well enough.
    All you did was add another sentence to his personality, not edit it.

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