From the sound of it though, mine is a little bit more dark than yours. And to think I was inspired to write it by my English final?
Hmm... Actually, your story is kinda long... ;) I'll post part of it right now, and the rest a little later.
Anybody wanna give me some feedback on The Journey Home or Faith? I know that guy with the Ralts avvie already did. The links are in my siggy bro hams
Microsoft Word considers this a fragment. Opinions please?
Then, just as things began to calm down, three jets of water shot from the river, slamming Luxray into a tree.
'snot a fragment. The "then" is unnecessary-ish, which might be what's setting MSWord off.
Yeah, taking out the then fixed it. Thanks Scourgey!
^Lol'd. Changed the Poliwrath part of the story, so it's for different mons now. Hope for it to be up soon.
You guys should put all those old stories that used to be stickies in the library. I can't remember all their names.
ok, I have an idea for a story, but I need to know something before I start it: do you have to end your story with a capture, as in
- "Bob threw the Pokeball, trapping the weakened Magikarp within. As it rolled on the ground, Bob waited in anticipation to see if all his hard work paid off..."?
or can you have captured the pokemon in the story by the end, kinda like,
- "And with his newly acquired Magikarp, Bob rode off into the sunset to new land and new Pokemon."
That's not strictly true. The "leave the capture uncertain" rule is more there to prevent authors from adding Pokémon to their stats, these days. A lot of the experienced graders completely ignore the rule, and I think there's a slight wish for others to follow suit. 's more an irrelevant formality that shouldn't affect the actual body of the story too much.Quote:
You need to have it end with the uncertainty of capture; whether it's rocking in the Pokeball, being asked to join you on your adventures, or in doubt about whether the Trainer gets to keep the Pokemon if already caught. The last one may not fly with all graders, but personally, if you caught something because it was important to the plot, then your character asked their parents/professor/law enforcement officer if they were allowed to keep it at the end of the story (with the very real possibility of not being able to), I would have no problem with that.
(Every single one of my successful captures has involved an actual capture with no uncertainty. A few of the graders were... EmBreon, Galleon, Phantom Kat, and DarkUmbreon, all of whom are ranked oldies. Not one of them even mentioned it. XD Several of my fics, death = capturing. I just put, "UH. WELL, IF IT'S NOT CAPTURED, HE CAN RESURRECT HIMSELF MIRACULOUSLY. OR SOMETHING.")