You had one of those introductions that made me want to stop reading and close the page… but as I kept reading, I see that I was wrong. You introduced two characters in the first paragraph, but did not describe what they look like. It would be nice to know what this princess looked like since she was ‘the fairest of them all’. The intro also shows us that the king is looking for a Pokémon to give his daughter for her eighteenth birthday.
It’s a story for a Pokémon in the easiest section so I expect a simple plot. Basically a king (what is his kingdom’s name?) wants to give his daughter, the princess, the best Pokémon for her eighteenth birthday so he sends knights out. Then the Weedle they find eats the princess. Pretty straight forward and basic plot so I have no problems with this. I can see how Weedle could eat the princess since it and Kakuna are really alien Pokémon.
Didn’t see any much problem here.
Your story pretty much lacked detail. Like I said in the ‘Intro’ section, it would have been nice to see what the princess/king/anything in this story looked like. You could have also described what their kingdom looked like or what it was even called for that matter xD.
Weedle's face went ULTRA red because he was angry.
Here you can tell us how red it got, as an example of what you can do and how to make your story more descriptive which will make it a better read.
Yeah, you pass here. You should have went for two Weedle and gave me one
Yeah, Weedle captured. You really lacked in description and the plot was simple (which is expected I guess), but that wasn’t enough to fail you.