Because this is the next chapter in the story, the introduction that you've given us is appropriate. It picks up pretty much where the last one left off, and the transition between the two chapters is uninterrupted. I have no complaints here.
I should let you know, however, that I will not be Grading the next chapter of this story, when you go for a Dragonite. Personally, I've never even seen a Merciless level story, let alone seen the Grade for one, so I believe that it would be unfair for me to attempt to Grade something that I have no knowledge of. This means that a Grader that doesn't necessarily know what has gone on in your story thus far will potentially be Grading it.
How can you accommodate for this? I noticed that you've also posted this on your fanfiction.net account, where all of the chapters are available one after another. You should post the next chapter there as normal; however, in this thread, you should give a recap of what has gone on in the story so far for the Grader at the beginning of the next chapter, or add details to the story that would allow the next chapter to stand on its own better. I told you about how to do this in a previous Grade, so simply refer back to that one if you need some assistance on that matter. This chapter in particular doesn't stand well by itself; you'll want to avoid that in particular for a Merciless level capture. Plot:
The plot of this chapter is of relatively the same style as the previous ones, and I had few complaints about those, so I really don't have much to say about this one.
I would like to point out, however, that these past few chapters, while giving glimpses and insights into a struggle larger than the main character of this story, have essentially been the same basic plot in different situations. At the end of every story, Jericho always captures a Pokemon; the building blocks of each chapter have remained as "trainer finds Pokemon, trainer battles Pokemon, trainer captures Pokemon", without too many twists that actually deal with these building blocks being thrown in. I will tell you right now that the more experienced Graders that will Grade this will not pass the next chapter if you do not switch it up some, and make the plot feel original. This holds especially true if you're going for a Dragonite, since the basic plots won't even cut it at the level below Merciless, according to the "All the Pokemon We Don't Hate" thread:
Demanding – 40-55 K is a good range to shoot for when going for captures under this category. Make sure to go over your text more than once, refining grammar and including important description while maintaining a very strong storyline. A run-of-the-mill story like ‘kid wanders into the forest until a Pokémon appears’ has no chance at this level, so get creative!
The last part is good advice: get creative! The story can be anything you want, so don't be afraid to mix it up a little. Your next successful capture may be counting on it. Dialogue:
For the most part, your dialogue was realistic and believable. There is something that I'd like to note here, though.
“Sonny, I asked to see your badge case.”
“That’s it, I am going to get the head inspector. Maybe he can get the truth out of you.”
I can tell that you were working to get the dialects of the people to sound realistic (as shown in the first quote), but at times, they didn't sound realistic because of how you worded their spoken lines. The second quote above uses "I am", just after the interrogator was using stuff like "haven't", "you're", and "don't". If he was as angry about Jericho not telling the truth as I assume you were writing him off as, he wouldn't bother to be punctual and actually recite "I am", instead opting for the easier "I'm".
The wording of the spoken lines, especially without italics or something to emphasize certain words (“But I am telling you the truth!” versus “But I am
telling you the truth!”, for example), made the characters sound robotic at times. This was especially apparent with Nurse Joy; even though her character is generally polite and kind-hearted, the wording of her lines made her sound like she was reading awkwardly off of a script card, or something. The easiest way to make your characters sound realistic is to read your dialogue aloud when you write it, or have a friend role-play the situation where the dialogue comes in with you. If you can't speak like you were having a normal conversation with someone during the "rehearsal", chances are your characters won't be able to, either. Grammar:
There were several typos and small grammatical errors riddled throughout the story. They didn't affect the flow of the plot or this Grade, really, but there were enough to make them noticeable. You'll want to avoid making a lot of these small errors when you write for that Dragonite, since a higher-level capture like that could make the Graders go through the story with a fine-toothed comb, looking for that sort of stuff to point out. The best remedy for these small errors is better proofreading. Even though you may want to get the story out there as soon as possible, if you don't proofread carefully enough, it could cost you when the Grade shows up.
For the most part, your grammar was fine otherwise. Detail and Description:
Most of the details were the same as they have been in my past Grades, so there wasn't much to worry about. I did notice a couple things that struck me, though.
“Up here!” Jericho stared to the skies, and saw a Pidgeotto flying down towards him, and on her back was….
“ALEXIS!” Jericho yelled joyously, and he ran forwards as the pigeon landed.
For Alexis to fly on the back of a Pidgeotto, she'd have to be less than 3'07" tall and weigh no more than about 90 pounds. Unless she's Jericho's age (which, from details in the story, I find hard to believe), this comes off as a bit unrealistic. It gets even weirder when you mention that the Pidgeotto is not only carrying Alexis, but also Jericho. Now, if it had been a Pidgeot, I probably wouldn't have said anything.
This detail brings me to an important part of your story that I felt was necessary to mention. Throughout this story's plot, Jericho never really seems to catch a break. Now naturally, this adds problems that the plot must overcome; however, doing so too often, especially to the main character, deters from their character development, and makes them look like - for lack of a more appropriate phrase - the "butt monkey" of the plot. This is the feeling I'm getting with Jericho lately.
I'll explain why using this story as an example. In the remakes of Gold and Silver, the Johto Police Force is, in fact, depicted as less than competent, so I can understand where you're coming from with the guard and the interrogator hating on Jericho, but giving him situations to escape them and make them look foolish. However, this hearkens back to the storm that occurred last time; generally, common sense would come in here. The guard wouldn't be as focused on his duties thanks to the storm, and he wouldn't immediately snap on anyone trying to pass through the gate; common sense says that he would do a better job at finding out what was going on there before sending Jericho off to jail. What if he was a kid from Pallet Town who got washed out to sea during the storm (which you mentioned was affecting all of Kanto, as well, if I recall), and he ended up in Johto? I mean, Route 21 does connect to Route 27, though it is normally blocked by a barrier of rocks and such. Who's to say that the storm didn't disrupt the barrier?
Also, Jericho was able to escape the station unnoticed when the interrogator went into the back to get the chief, but then there were several members of the police force chasing him. Where'd all those policemen come from, and why weren't they around when he was being interrogated? And why didn't any of their force stay in Mahogany Town following the dispersal of the Rockets, in order to maintain order and nip any further problems in the bud?
What I'm getting at is this: your story's details are, at times, disrupting my willing suspension of disbelief. Jericho's luck can't be so bad that everyone would be out to get him, especially considering the fact that he's just some ten-year-old caught in the crossfire of some major natural disaster. The police were asking him for the truth, but what motive did they have to even interrogate him? Considering the fact that some sort of impending disaster had just struck the entire world the night before, the police would more than likely be focused on restoring order and helping people caught up in the whole thing to get back to where they belong, rather than causing chaos and arresting people for no clear reason. In order to get that Dragonite, you'll want to keep from disrupting the Grader's willing suspension of disbelief, because it makes the story seem ridiculous on the whole.
As it is now, it seems like Jericho is the kinda-sorta-I-don't-want-to-be-the-protagonist, Alexis is an ally, and the rest of the world is out to get him. Defining the roles of each party introduced and showing who the heroes and the villains are is an integral part of the story; however, you have to do it in such a way that the reader isn't facepalming when Jericho suddenly has to fend off several policemen, who are supposed to be trained to catch professional crime bosses and the like, but can't catch a regular old trainer.
*sigh* Let's move on.
“Darn!” Jericho said, and he threw out a Great Ball. It went under water, and Jericho saw Tangela get sucked in. He crossed his fingers and watched as the ball floated back up, wondering about the outcome.
This kind of ignores water physics, since you didn't define how far under the Tangela sunk, and just generalized it. If the Ball is buoyant, it wouldn't go very far under when thrown down there; after all, a fifty-caliber bullet only goes two feet under the water when fired from a gun directly at the surface. I doubt Jericho's throw is faster than a speeding bullet. Battle:
A little short, to be honest. Then again, Sludge Bomb is super effective on Tangela (even if you said it did "little damage"), so it was kind of expected to be that way. For the Dragonite, the battle will have to be longer and much more epic than this one, methinks. Length:
Just enough. Outcome:
Drum roll, please...
[Miscellaneous note: forgive me, but I can't find your stats page. xD If you have one, I would recommend posting a link to it in your signature, so that Graders and other users can see it if they need to. If you don't have one, I would highly recommend posting in this thread
so that you can request a starter and have a stats page; you wouldn't want the four Pokemon you've received from this series to go to waste, would you? ;) ]