This Is my first story. I am hoping to obtain a caterpie. I am not much of a writer, at least, in terms of fiction, so I am not sure whether I want too much criticism. Anyway, here is my story; it is just under 3300 characters long.
“Whaa! There are bug Pokémon everywhere! Where in this forest am I any way? Maybe I should start from the beginning. My name is Thomas, and I am ten years old. I left Pallet Town about a week ago, with my new friend, Charmander. When we got to Viridian City, the first thing we did was sign up for the Pokémon League. Anyway, everyone knows you can’t win a gym battle with just one Pokémon. We decided to go into to the Viridian Forest. Just one problem: I can’t stand bug Pokémon.”
“When Charmander and I first entered the forest, we were challenged by a bug catcher named Bryan. Here, I’ll recount that battle.”
“Finally! A trainer! Hey, I’m looking for a Pokémon battle. Why don’t you show me what your Pokémon can do? Oh, my name’s Bryan, by the way. Now, my Pokémon will be Caterpie. This one’s at level ten. I don’t plan on letting it evolve until I test it against a trainer.”
“My Pokémon will be Charmander. It’s also at level ten. I trained it against my friend Samantha’s Squirtle. It will be a good matchup against that Caterpie of yours.”
“We’ll see about that.”
“We sent out our Pokémon, and having not seen a Caterpie before, I pulled out my Pokedex, my knees shaking.”
“Caterpie, a worm Pokémon. It can release a terrible odor from it’s antenna for protection. It has a ferocious appetite, and therefore it can often be seen dining on leaves even bigger than itself.”
“I remember that Fire Pokémon have an advantage over Bug Pokémon, so I’ll let you go first, Bryan.” To tell the truth, half the reason I choose Charmander was because it has an advantage over Bug Pokémon. The other half is that I think it would be awesome to fly around on a Charizard. But I’m getting beside my point.
“Alright, Caterpie, show that Charmander your Super-sticky string shot. Trust me, this Caterpie’s string shot is the stickiest in the entire forest.”
“Charmander, use ember to melt the silk! Now, try that combo we’ve been working on. Use Ember on your hand, followed by scratch attack!”
That left Caterpie unable to battle! Anyway, I thanked the trainer for a fun match, and Charmander and I went off into the woods. We faced several trainers and I meet a coordinator teaching her Pokémon about teamwork in combinations. She was using a Butterfree, a Pidgeotto, and a Wartortle. I stopped to watch, and then I headed on. I think I even saw a Pikachu!
It was starting to get late, and the bug Pokémon were getting active. I was running, panicking even and don’t remember much about that portion. I saw a lot of bug Pokémon, and each time I saw one I made a left or a right turn. That’s how I ended up where I am. Hey, telling that story helped me think a little. I received this map from someone shortly before entering. “Charmander, come out and light the way! We’re not far from the exit! Alright, it should be just a couple more turns. Wait, something doesn’t feel right… it’s a whole army of bug Pokémon, and they don’t look too happy! Charmander, help me, please!”
Charmander’s ember attack was awesome! It took care of the all those bug Pokémon! Wait, what’s this? There is one Caterpie left! Uh-oh, Charmander is too tired to battle this one. Hey, I have this one spare Poke ball! This is my last chance to catch a Pokémon in the Viridian Forest. I throw it and as it starts to rock I wait…