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    Default Re: Roots [Mature One Shot]

    ^^
    The gift thing? It's a reference to pederasty. (Be warned, extremely sensitive material)

    You know what's creepy? In D/P/Pt, Cynthia gives you a little gift, and then follows you around and showers you with praise. It's almost like she was drawing you closer and closer to her throne room the whole time. That's just as creepy as Oak being sexually attracted to every child in his hometown.

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    No discussions on Archived fanfics are allowed

    2010/08/02: 4th chapter

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    ^^
    Whoah. Angry smiley means business. I'll shut up now.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kayi Rowling View Post
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    sorry, just wanted to know. anyway, this is a good story!

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    Default Re: Roots [Mature One Shot]

    great writing but some parts just made me go WTF

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    Wow, amazing! This idea of yours was beautifully written.

    What I like about your story is your well-written backstory. Many stories, similar in nature, have a hard time giving a backstory that is effectively written and makes you feel that it could be real.

    There was one misspelled word but I can't remember which word that it was...

    Your characters were all very well-written, very realistic. I especially how you kept each characterization as plausible as you could possibly make it. I felt like I was reading a biography or watching a biopic about Oak....

    Your use of the oaks and daisies being his favorite nature feature was very intelligently chosen, using it to make it come back a full circle. This was done in a way such as a published author... Very well done.

    Did it take you a long time to come up with this idea?

    That ending scene was executed in perfect passionate writing.

    Well done,
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    I'm not quite sure whether or not it's allowed but I just wanted to post to thank people for voting Roots Best Dark Fic and Best One Shot, both titles that it missed in the last round of Awards.

    While I'm possibly getting infracted for this post anyway, I thought I may as well reply to a post here.

    Quote Originally Posted by NeoMiniTails View Post
    Wow, amazing! This idea of yours was beautifully written.

    What I like about your story is your well-written backstory. Many stories, similar in nature, have a hard time giving a backstory that is effectively written and makes you feel that it could be real.

    There was one misspelled word but I can't remember which word that it was...

    Your characters were all very well-written, very realistic. I especially how you kept each characterization as plausible as you could possibly make it. I felt like I was reading a biography or watching a biopic about Oak....

    Your use of the oaks and daisies being his favorite nature feature was very intelligently chosen, using it to make it come back a full circle. This was done in a way such as a published author... Very well done.

    Did it take you a long time to come up with this idea?

    That ending scene was executed in perfect passionate writing.

    Well done,
    Neo
    Thank you very much! That's such a nice thing of you to say! If you do notice the spelling mistake, let me know but bear in mind I'm British so it might be a localisation difference.

    The idea kind of developed in my head over time, once the first piece fell into place, the rest kind of tumbled in with it. All in all, I guess it didn't take me that long, but it took me a few attempts to write it how I felt was well.

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    O_O you just completly ruined oak, red, daisy and blue. in a good way... I think..
    on the scale 0-10 this story gets 15 for disturbingness (is that a word?)
    I know you're an awesome writer but just HOW did you come up with this idea?
    I liked the story... I think
    andonce again.. very disturbuing O_O

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    Oh, wow.

    This has to be one of the most interesting yet disturbing stories I've ever read. It's believable, yet I don't quite want to believe it - and I'll never pick up my LeafGreen cartridge and play through it with the same mindset again.

    Maybe I'll just look at my starter, look at Oak and scream, "I'm not a whore!". Hehe.

    Overall, very, very interesting read.


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    Default Re: Roots [Mature One Shot]

    What. The. Fu-

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    You may have just ruined the very beginnings (or roots ;) of my love for Pokemon. Actually, you just destroyed them...


    Very bloody well done! That is a beautifully disturbed story!

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