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    Is it just me or have people been starting new fanfics a lot more recently? I feel like if I spend more than 3 days between chapters I end up on the second page and the first page seems to be filled with fics that I've never heard of before and usually, don't hear of again afterwards... Well, doesn't matter, I'll be back to the front page soon enough.

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    OH NO THE WORLD'S BIGGEST CORPORATION IS BEING ATTACKED BY TERRORISTS! HELP!

    Blue: Hell no! I've got a childish grudge!

    ^That's what was running though my head when I read this, not that it's bad- it just made me LOL.
    Ahahahaha, didn't actually think of this myself but it is SO true. Brilliant!

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    Literally read ALL of this today :L, I think its great seeing it all from Blue's side, and how his actions have effects on how Red goes through the game. Also, Red is such a douche :D.
    As you may or may not have seen me say before, people like you never cease to amaze me. No matter how good it was, I could never read something this large in one day, so the fact that you consider my fanfic good enough to do something like that is a huuuuge compliment, so thank you very much.

    Anyway, here's the next chapter!

    Chapter 49

    Blue thought carefully about what Pokémon to open with and he decided it would be best to start with one of his many Pokémon that were weak to Red’s Pikachu, he had lost too many times because he had left them until last, since Charmeleon’s evolution, three fifths of Blue’s team were now weak to that damned rat. In fact, the only two who weren’t weak were Alakazam and Exeggcute, and Exeggcute was nothing to brag about. Blue wondered if he should have evolved Exeggcute before battling Red, but decided that in the long run it would still be better if he waited. Of course, being better in the long run still meant it was worse now, the only one of Blue’s Pokémon who stood a realistic chance against Pikachu was Alakazam and Blue didn’t want to waste that chance, so he opened with Gyarados. Red observed Blue’s choice of Pokémon and his hand darted to his own belt, where five Poké Balls rested – assuming he hadn’t dropped anyone from his team, his team was the same as last time they encountered, possibly with an evolution or two – Ivysaur, Pikachu, Primeape, Eevee and Growlithe.

    However it quickly became obvious that Red must have dropped one of them from his team, instead of one of the five candidates that Blue remembered from their last battle, Red sent out the huge Pokémon which had been blocking the road out of Vermilion. Blue looked up in awe at the gargantuan creature, Snorlax. Red smiled as he looked at Blue’s face.

    “I take it you’ve run into this bad boy before then?” taunted Red, clearly extremely proud of himself for his capture, “They say only the best Trainers in the world can capture a Snorlax!”

    This comment, predictably, made Blue furious – he had never heard anyone say that only the best Trainers in the world can capture a Snorlax, but he had no evidence to suggest that Red’s claim was a lie. The only way he could make Red look stupid for making that claim was by annihilating his Snorlax.

    “Gyarados!” shouted Blue, “Start by using Bite!”
    “Eat it, Snorlax!” commanded Red, pointing at Gyarados.

    Blue couldn’t believe his ears, was Red so ruthless that he was willing to have his Pokémon devour another live Pokémon? It seemed horrific. Gyarados too appeared horrified by the command and was too scared to attack as a result. The huge beast leant towards Gyarados and began swinging his arms at it ferociously, but fortunately it could not reach.

    “Keep trying, Snorlax!” encouraged Red, “I know you can do it!”

    Snorlax turned to its Trainer and nodded to indicate its infallible determination and will. Snorlax continued to lean forwards, getting ever closer to Gyarados. Gyarados finally managed to work up the courage to dive forwards and Bite Snorlax, but the huge creature seemed completely unaffected by the attack. Eventually, Snorlax was leaning so far forwards that it could no longer support its own gigantic weight and it toppled forwards, crushing Gyarados. Red smiled. So that was his plan all along.

    “Rest,” ordered Red callously.

    Snorlax immediately obeyed and fell asleep. Blue wasn’t sure how long Gyarados would be able to survive trapped underneath that horrifically large monster and was horrified to find that he couldn’t even withdraw his Pokémon – Snorlax was in the way!

    “Let it out!” screamed Blue, determined that he should not have one of his Pokémon die like Maxwell did.
    “Not until I can be certain it’s been KO’d,” replied Red with a sick smile.

    Blue couldn’t believe how ruthless his rival had become, he had changed a lot from the little boy who used to annoy Blue because he was too much of a goody goody, in fact, he seemed like an entirely different person. Blue wondered if Oak would still favour Red if he knew how horrible he had become, if he knew that Blue wasn’t the one misbehaving any more, that Red was the real bully. Blue remembered his youth for a moment, Oak had always been telling Blue off for picking on Red, he wondered if his grandfather would have stood up for him if it had been the other way round, for some reason he doubted it. He wondered if Oak would snap at Red for trying to kill one of Blue’s Pokémon or for intentionally antagonising one of his own, but he doubted it, Blue refused to admit that there might be a rational reason behind Oak’s favouritism of Red, there was no way he could face the possibility that it was as a result of his own actions, there was no one to blame but Red, that was just one of the truths of the universe. Red’s attempted murder of Gyarados was testimony to this.

    “Wake up Snorlax!” shouted Red, “Roll over, that’s enough!”

    Blue looked to the giant beast, doubting that it would react to this, you can’t command a Pokémon to wake up and expect it to. Blue wasn’t wrong, Snorlax continued to lie on top of Gyarados mercilessly, fast asleep. Red sighed and removed something from his bag, it looked like a yellow pipe of some kind with a Poké Ball on the end of it. Red started playing it like a flute and Snorlax began to stir. Blue assumed it was some kind of variation of an Awakening or a Chesto Berry, but then Red returned it to his bag, as if he intended to use it again.

    “What was that, Red?” enquired Blue.
    “A Poké Flute,” replied Red nonchalantly.

    Blue didn’t ask for any further information, he simply nodded so he didn’t look stupid. Snorlax then rolled over on to its back and Blue ran over to Gyarados’ flattened body to check if his Pokémon was alright. Blue checked Gyarados’ pulse and was able to confirm that the Pokémon was alive, although in desperate need of a healing. Blue returned Gyarados to its Poké Ball and began to think carefully about what Pokémon to use next, Pidgeot would probably be a good choice, but in the end he settled with Alakazam.

    Blue sent Alakazam out and Red immediately ordered Snorlax to attack in the same manner that it had before. The massive, lazy Pokémon obediently fell forwards in an attempt to flatten Alakazam, as it had done with Gyarados, but Alakazam was too quick for it and Teleported out of the way.

    “Psychic!” ordered Blue.

    Blue saw an expression of pain flash across Red’s face, it was obvious he wanted Snorlax to dodge it, but it was even more obvious that a Pokémon that huge and immobile didn’t stand a chance at dodging anything. Snorlax was hit head on by the Psychic attack and was then hit by an onslaught of more attacks from Alakazam. Snorlax made some attempts to fight back, but Alakazam was simply too fast, it just Teleported out of the way when there was even the slightest chance of it being hit. It wasn’t long before Snorlax was KO’d. Red returned Snorlax to its Poké Ball.

    “It doesn’t matter,” snapped Red, “It took out one of yours and we have the same number. That means I’m ahead! I’m still going to win!”

    Blue just laughed, he revelled in any insecurity displayed by his rival. Red sneered and grabbed another Poké Ball from his belt, Blue wondered if this was another new addition to the team, but it turned out not to be, Red sent out a familiar face – Eevee. Blue stared down his rival as Alakazam stared down the tormented, mistreated face of Red’s Eevee. This time was going to be different.

    Blue's Team: Charizard, Pidgeot, Exeggcute, Alakazam, Gyarados
    Blue’s Box: Metapod, Beedrill, Meowth, Bellsprout
    Blue's Pokédex: 22 Caught, 77 Seen
    Blue’s Badges: 5


    Tune in next time for the semi-centennial chapter special!
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    Wow,I don't know what it was about that chapter,but it didn't really have the same feel as the other Red battles.But it's okay,because it seems to be better ;D

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    Quote Originally Posted by Gastly's Mama View Post

    As you may or may not have seen me say before, people like you never cease to amaze me. No matter how good it was, I could never read something this large in one day, so the fact that you consider my fanfic good enough to do something like that is a huuuuge compliment, so thank you very much.
    I'm a speed-reader. I tested myself, and while reading a Harry Potter-sized book I read about 100 pages per hour.

    Red has become evil. I wonder if he chose to join Team Rocket after beating the Grunt at Nugget Bridge. I hope that Blue wins this one, even though I know that he won't (or if he does, Red will get that Lapras form the Scientist in the room, and beat Blue's last Pokemon.) The battle style does seem different, but in a good way. I can't wait for the next chapter!
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    This was a great chapter! Red is certainly different from what I'd expected, and I'm anxious to see which member was dropped. I bet it was Primeape.
    The path of a pseudo-champion.

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    Really good, and I agree, it does seem different.
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    Thanks for the comments, guys, not posting a new chapter today, just dropping by to say that I've got something special planned for the landmark semi-centennial chapter! I hope you like it, it'll be out soon, so stay tuned!
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    EAT IT!

    Red is awesome. I love the character that you have given him, I've never met anyone that has considered that Red might be a douche.

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    When is the next chapter?

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    I wonder how you're gonna do the scene when Oak tells Blue he needs to care for his Pokemon better. Right now it seems he needs to say that to Red lol

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    Wow... Blue. More stupid decisions that are gonna hurt you.

    Wow... Red. More of a jerk than originally thought.

    Am I correct in assuming you're aiming for a team akin to his Mt. Silver team?

    Evil Figment (7:59:44 PM): Ryuu, however shakily you started, I've got to hand it to you that you earned my respect the hard way.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ryuutakesh! View Post
    Am I correct in assuming you're aiming for a team akin to his Mt. Silver team?
    Yes, that's correct. Mt. Silver team for Red, Viridian Gym team for Blue. That is the ones from GSC, I still don't know anything about HGSS and intend to keep it that way until 26th March (UK release date)

    Anyway, it's time for the LANDMARK 50TH CHAPTER SPECIAL

    I've done something new with this chapter, not sure what you guys will think of it, I apologise if you hate it, but hopefully you will love it. Either way I'm probably never going to do it again so it doesn't really matter.

    Chapter 50

    As Red sent out Eevee, he felt disgusted with himself, that Pokémon hated him – and why? Red knew the reason Eevee hated him was because he had been needlessly cruel to it, it was entirely his own doing, there was no one else to blame, he tried to blame Blue, but he just couldn’t. Red thought over what he had done to Eevee, he had intentionally starved it, beaten it, made his other Pokémon attack it, sometimes even having them gang up on it, he’d shown his other Pokémon affection in front of Eevee while totally ignoring Eevee, but worst of all was his coldness. Eevee had been a young Pokémon when Red got it, innocent with a look of hope in its eyes, but he had turned it into a beast – and why? Just so it could use Frustration, he could have taught it Return instead, but he chose Frustration because it was easier to make a Pokémon hate you than love you. The reason he had done this? To beat his rival. He hated Blue, he hated Blue more than words could describe, Blue had always antagonised him and he had always done it for doing things that Red considered the right thing. Red knew Blue hated Oak showing affection to Red and that was why he tried to flaunt his relationship with Oak in Blue’s face as much as possible, Blue made him feel horrible and he wanted to make Blue feel just as bad. One thing Red knew about Blue was that he was a prideful boy, every time he lost, he would beat himself up inside and Red loved the idea that he could be the one making Blue beat himself up inside. A little smile emerged on Red’s face as he thought about how he must have made Blue feel after their last few battles, but then he looked to Eevee – it wasn’t worth this, he had to start treating Eevee better, from now on, he wasn’t going to use Frustration ever again.

    “Eevee!” yelled Red, “Bite!”

    Eevee looked uncertain for a second, it appeared to be expecting to be ordered to use Frustration, like Red always ordered it to. A look of fear flashed across Blue’s face, he knew that Bite was a deadly attack to use against Alakazam.

    “I said ‘Bite’!” shouted Red again, trying not to lose his temper with Eevee, “Come on, Eevee, I know you can do it!”

    Red saw a glimmer of hope in Eevee’s eyes and the Pokémon leapt forwards towards Alakazam and clamped its jaws on the Psi Pokémon as hard as it could.

    “Psychic!” retorted Blue, “Blast that rat away!”

    In spite of Blue’s confidence, Red could tell that Alakazam had been severely injured, its weakness to the Dark type made it an easy target to Bite. Alakazam’s Psychic did cause a lot of damage too though, Eevee was blasted backwards from the sheer force of the attack and not only its body but its confidence was clearly severely injured.

    “Get up, Eevee!” encouraged Red, “It’s not over yet!”
    “Ha!” snapped Blue in return, “That little thing is only useful when it’s angry, you’ve abused it too much!”

    Red knew it was true, it’d be a long time before Eevee was much use other than using Frustration, but he had to make sure that changed. He still had the TM for Return in his bag and he vowed that as soon as this battle was over he’d teach Eevee Return and completely remove Frustration from his poor Pokémon’s repertoire.

    “Bite!” commanded Red once again.

    Again, Eevee dived forwards and managed to land a successful Bite attack on Alakazam before receiving any kind of retaliation. Red could see the damage this attack was doing to Alakazam and he knew that one more Bite would be enough, but he wasn’t sure if Eevee could withstand another Psychic from Alakazam and it was a bit too much to hope that Eevee would be able to hit Alakazam with another Bite before it was able to strike back.

    “Psychic!” yelled Blue, keeping it short and sweet.

    Alakazam immediately obeyed at hit Eevee with another Psychic blast, at least as powerful as the first, hitting Eevee across the room and leaving it in a ball at Red’s feet. Red knelt down to his Pokémon, but it wasn’t moving.

    “Come on, Eevee,” urged Red, placing his hands on his Pokémon’s side, “You can do it.”
    “Give up!” shouted Blue, “It’s 2-1 to me, now let’s see your next Pokémon!”

    Just then Eevee began to twitch, it looked Red in the eye as if it knew he had had a change of heart. That look told Red that Eevee was willing to fight for a Trainer that was willing to care for it. Eevee struggled to its feet.

    “Bite!” ordered Red, pointing towards Alakazam.

    Eevee struggled to its feet, dashed towards Alakazam and hit it with one final Bite before collapsing with the effort. Fortunately, the attack caused Alakazam to fall to the floor at the same time.

    “I make that 2-2 actually,” retorted Red with a smile.

    Blue grumbled unintelligibly and grabbed another Poké Ball from his belt. Red thought about what Pokémon he should use next – his remaining Pokémon were Arcanine, Venusaur and Pikachu. Blue had the same number of Pokémon as he had last time they’d battled, so there was a good chance he had the same Pokémon, which meant his remaining Pokémon were Charmeleon, Pidgeotto and Exeggcute, or their evolved forms. Seeing as Red had managed to evolve his starter and their starters evolved at around the same time before, Red presumed that Blue had a Charizard by now, which was excellent news. Pikachu was definitely Red’s strongest Pokémon and a type advantage against most of Blue’s team, including his starter, was brilliant. Red decided that he should save Pikachu for last, just in case Blue decided to go for Exeggcute before Pidgeotto or Charizard, so he sent out Arcanine instead. Unfortunately, instead of sending out Exeggcute, Blue sent out Charizard, so it looked like Red was going to be fighting Fire with Fire.

    Blue's Team: Charizard, Pidgeot, Exeggcute, Alakazam, Gyarados
    Blue’s Box: Metapod, Beedrill, Meowth, Bellsprout
    Blue's Pokédex: 22 Caught, 77 Seen
    Blue’s Badges: 5

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    Feel the regret you evil sonova nice lady who cooks rather splendidly.

    Great chapter btw, now that Red's gonna stop using Frustration, I can't wait until he gets Espeon.

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    I like the idea of showing things from Red's perspective, but the chapter could be longer. I do think that Eevee started to become friendlier a little too quickly, but like Red said, it's a fairly young (and naive) Pokemon.
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    I liked this chapter, it's great Red will stop using Eevee as a tool, like Blue does with his Pokemon. I can't wait to see Blue's expression when he loses.

    Great Job!
    The path of a pseudo-champion.

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    STOP MAKING ME SYMPATHIZE WITH DA BAD GUY!

    Okay, I jest. No, this was interesting, finally seeing what Red was really thinking. I suppose this would be an interesting psychological study. Two boys who consistently try to one up each other and blame the other for their misfortunes. And in doing so lose track of the main goal.

    When Red learns to care for Eevee, I hope it will be a good chapter.

    Evil Figment (7:59:44 PM): Ryuu, however shakily you started, I've got to hand it to you that you earned my respect the hard way.

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