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    ah, okay. See I haven't played FRLG in months.

    Evil Figment (7:59:44 PM): Ryuu, however shakily you started, I've got to hand it to you that you earned my respect the hard way.

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    I just finished reading what's been written so far, and I love it! This is an awesome story, and it provides quite a bit of nostalgia, I could practically hear the old gameboy music playing in my head as the story progressed. ^_^

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    Quote Originally Posted by Collin View Post
    I just finished reading what's been written so far, and I love it! This is an awesome story, and it provides quite a bit of nostalgia, I could practically hear the old gameboy music playing in my head as the story progressed. ^_^
    True. My friend says original gameboys have no sound. Seriously.

    Anyway, Another good chapter. The idea of what goes through his head makes blue seem to be a much better person.

    Also, when I heard "493 pokemon", I jsut imagined Blue encountering Arceus.

    I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

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    Thank you again for kind words everyone! lol to Blue and Arceus =P

    This is a fairly uneventful chapter, but it's one that kinda has to happen to maintain consistency with the games.

    Chapter 5

    Blue headed back to his house, so that he could get his map, and also prevent Red from getting one. He swung the door open as hard as he could and yelled at the top of his voice, “Yo Daisy!”
    “Please, Blue!” chided Daisy, “Be careful!”
    Since Blue and Daisy’s parents were long gone and Oak spent all his time in the lab, most of the time forgetting that either of them had ever existed, Daisy did most of the work around the house, and if Blue broke the door again, it would be her who had to call someone in to replace it, and her who had to sit around waiting for said person to arrive. Sure, it would be Oak’s money paying for the new door, but Oak certainly wouldn’t be calling anyone.
    “Sorry, sis!” replied Blue, as quickly as possible, eager to get this apology out of the way, “Is there any chance I could have a Town Map? I’m going on an adventure!”
    “An adventure?” questioned Daisy, “Are you sure that’s safe? You don’t even have any Pokémon!”
    “Sure I do!” shouted Blue in response, grabbing Charmander’s Poké Ball from his waist, “Check him out!”
    Blue then proceeded to send out Charmander, who ran up to Daisy in order to greet her.
    “Hi, little guy,” she said, stroking the Pokémon, she then turned to her brother, “Where did you get this? Did you steal it from grampa?”
    “No!” cried Blue defensively, “He gave it to me! He asked me and Red to catch every Pokémon in the world for him, and he gave us these to start us off! And that’s why I need a Town Map, and also, I need you to not give Red one because I need to beat him!”
    Daisy was silent for a moment, and then her questions changed focus completely, “Why are you so obsessed with beating Red, Blue? He’s a nice boy.”
    Predictably, this angered Blue considerably, “He is not! Everyone loves Red and no one ever pays me any attention! For once I want to beat him, ok? Is that too much to ask? Just give me a Town Map and don’t give one to Red, can you handle that or is that too hard?”
    Daisy huffed, “I can give you a Town Map, but I’m not holding one back from Red, if grampa expects him to go on this crazy journey too then he’s just as entitled to one as you!”
    Daisy walked over to the other side of the room and got a box of Town Maps off the shelf, ‘Why does she have so many anyway?’ thought Blue.
    “Here you are, Blue,” Daisy said politely, handing one Town Map to Blue.
    “Thanks, sis! Smell ya later!” shouted Blue back, snatching the Town Map and swinging the door with all his might on his way out.

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    These are being persistently small... But I still like them. Though, you could've added the part where Red gets his...

    Anyway, when the first gym comes, I expect this to be alot better, not trying to be demanding, though.

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    Haha, fair enough, you think I should add more to each chapter? Because I can easily do that, I tend to write them a few days in advance so I can check for spelling errors etc. The reason I don't post them when I write them is so I don't go too fast for some people resulting in them swearing off the series =P

    But I could very easily do bumper chapters, if that would be better? And I'll make a special effort for the Gym Battles! Although... Brock is frankly quite a shit Gym Leader...

    Anyway, thanks again for the comments. (And on another note this is my landmark 400th post on BMGF)

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    Here is a somewhat longer chapter... enjoy!

    Chapter 6

    Blue knew what his next destination was – Viridian City, where he would challenge his first Gym Leader. Knowing that this guy, Giovanni, specialised in Ground types, Blue thought it would be best to try and catch a Flying type on his way there, it would also add a page to his Pokédex and get him one step closer to beating Red. Blue’s favourite Flying Pokémon was either Fearow or Aerodactyl, unfortunately, the only Flying type available on Route 1 was a lowly Pidgey. Nevertheless, Blue decided not to be picky, after a quick trip to the Mart to buy some Poké Balls and Potions Blue headed back down to Route 1 to catch himself a Pidgey.

    Blue wandered into the long grass with Charmander’s Poké Ball in his hand, grasping it so tightly with anticipation that his knuckles turned white, when suddenly a wild Pidgey burst forth out of the grass and attacked! It took Blue a few moments to pull himself together, he’d never been attacked by a wild Pokémon before, it sure was a frightening experience. After instinctively attempting to bat the Pidgey away with his hands, Blue came to his sense and sent out Charmander.

    “Go!” shouted Blue, “Use Scratch!”
    Fortunately, the Pidgey was so preoccupied with attacking Blue that Charmander was able to take it completely by surprise. The Pidgey turned around in complete bewilderment and began flapping its wings in an attempt to use Gust and cause some damage to its assailant, but as it turned its back to Blue he threw a Poké Ball and sucked the bird in.

    The Poké Ball dropped to the floor, Blue and Charmander watched it intently.
    It was still for a moment, and then it began shaking violently, clearly, the Pidgey was making every possible effort to remove itself from the Ball. Blue didn’t know what to do, so he picked up the Ball and tried to hold it closed with his hands. Of course, the Ball was shaking so violently that it just sprang out of his hands and landed on the ground. Blue began to worry that the Poké Ball might roll out of reach and that even if he did catch the Pidgey, he’d never be able to use it anyway when suddenly the Poké Ball stopped moving.

    There was a second or two of silence and then Blue and Charmander began shouting out in simultaneous jubilation.
    “We did it, Charmander!” yelled Blue, “We got you a buddy! Now let’s go mop the floor with this ‘Giovanni’ guy!”

    Blue eagerly ran into Viridian City with his two Pokémon and after a quick visit to the Pokémon Center stormed to the door of the Gym. Blue grabbed the handle in excitement and pulled with all his might. However, the door did not budge.
    “Forget it, kid,” came a voice.
    Blue turned to see an old man, who had apparently been sitting outside the Gym telling everyone who attempted to get in that they couldn’t.
    “The Gym Leader’s gone,” continued the old man.
    “Gone? Gone where?” demanded Blue furiously.
    “What am I his babysitter? I don’t know!” retorted the old man.
    “What kind of Gym Leader just leaves his Gym?! I’d make a much better Gym Leader than this clown! If anyone wanted to challenge me, I’d always be there!” claimed Blue, more to himself than the man.
    “I can tell from one look at you that you’re never gonna be a Gym Leader, kid,” muttered the old man, “So you might as well forget it.”
    Words about what the old man has achieved in his life came to Blue’s mouth, but he decided not to rise to it, if he was gonna beat Red he didn’t have time to be getting into arguments with crazy, old men.

    That was when it dawned on him – getting Gym Badges was another opportunity to beat Red. In fact, it surprised him that he hadn’t thought of this earlier, as a rookie trainer Red was probably going to go after Gym Badges too. How inadequate would it make Red feel if Blue’s name was engraved under ‘Winning Trainers’ in every Gym that Red visited. It might even begin to make up for the inadequacy that Red had made Blue feel for his entire life up to this point. Not only that, but if he became the League Champ how could Oak not to be proud of him? But that meant he had to become the Champion as quickly as possible, he had no time to waste. Blue knew there was another Gym in Pewter, but it was on the other side of Viridian Forest. Blue knew that Victory Road, which lead on to the Indigo Plateau was on the other side of Route 22, which was even smaller than Route 1, so he figured that while he was in Viridian City, he may as well give it a visit.

    Blue took a short stroll down Route 22, it was a very calm and tranquil Route, but as Blue walked down it, his excitement and youth seemed to give a very different air to the whole area. Blue started to walk to the Pokémon League entrance gate, but then he heard someone entering the Route behind. He turned to see none other than the very person he was here to beat, his sworn rival – Red!

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    Come on! Seriously, somebody give me some feedback? I work really badly without feedback, and I was really getting into this.

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    This is brilliant. You really do a great job of explaining some of the most mundane things in the games and actually make them interesting.

    I also like the fact the blue ISNT always at his gym, and he DOES wind up as a gym leader. Everyone's wrong today I guess.

    Evil Figment (7:59:44 PM): Ryuu, however shakily you started, I've got to hand it to you that you earned my respect the hard way.

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    Not much to say here. Nice.

    *short comment is short.*

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    W0W I am enjoying it very much,keep up the good work!

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    Thank you for the comments, guys! And thank you very much for noticing that , Ryuu, I was very proud of that!

    Also, I'm gonna be away for a week, so I'll post my next chapter then, I know it's been like a month since my last chapter, but I'm gonna try and get back on top of regular chapters again after I go away.

    Chapter 7

    Blue made an about turn and headed towards Red.
    “Hey!” shouted Blue, trying to get his attention, “Red!”
    “Hey Blue,” replied Red, “Is Pokémon League around here somewhere? I wanted to check it out!”
    “You’re going to Pokémon League? Forget it!” challenged Blue, with a feigned sense of shock. Well, the shock wasn’t that feigned, but Blue wasn’t shocked because Red was too weak to consider taking the Pokémon League challenge, or anything like that, it was because he couldn’t believe he and Red were thinking along the same lines. He was nothing like Red, there was no way that Red could have been thinking the exact same thing as him.
    “Yeah,” answered Red defensively, “What’s wrong with that?”
    “You probably don’t have any Badges!” snapped Blue, eager to dismiss Red as quickly as possible.
    “So? I just want to look around, I don’t want to challenge anyone,” sneered Red, he had dropped his usually polite demeanour and become more defensive. So this is what Red was like when grown ups weren’t around – he was just as bad as Blue.
    “The guard won’t let you through!” retorted Blue, grinning, Red didn’t even bother to answer this and instead just looked down, so Blue attempted to change the subject, maybe he could insult Red about how poorly he’s raised his Pokémon so far, “By the way, did your Pokémon get any stronger?”
    “Yeah,” replied Red, he still sounded defensive, but less so, “I’ve caught a new one too, why do you ask?”
    Blue couldn’t believe it! Red caught a new Pokémon too? How could this have happened? Blue’s plan was to always stay one step ahead of Red, he thought that by having two Pokémon he’d be a notch above, but Red had two too!
    He was determined not to let it show how much this shook him, so he quickly came up with an explanation, “I heard Pokémon League has many tough trainers! I have to figure out how to get past them!”
    “Well,” replied Red, with a smirk, “I’d be happy to be your test subject.”
    Blue had not wanted a battle, especially not after learning that Red had two Pokémon, rather than just the one he expected, but he couldn’t back down now. There was no way he was losing to Red.

    Blue figured he should save his best Pokémon for last, so he decided to open with the latest addition to his team – Pidgey. He didn’t know how Pidgey would fare in a battle, the only battle he had ever seen it in had ended with it being captured, so it didn’t exactly have a great success rate. Red smiled as Blue sent out Pidgey and remarked that if Blue was going to start with a new Pokémon, he would too.
    “Go, Rattata!” shouted Red.
    A small, purple mouse like creature came out of Red’s Poké Ball, Blue recognised it and knew that Pidgey was superior, he had spent a lot of time in Oak’s lab over the years and he knew a fair bit about Pokémon, particularly those in and around Pallet and Viridian.
    ‘What can a Pidgey at this level do?’ thought Blue to himself, ‘Anything useful? Well, clearly it can use Gust, but we’ve seen that that’s pretty much useless… Oh! Sand Attack!’
    “Pidgey!” commanded Blue, “Use Sand Attack!”
    “Rattata!” yelled Red, “Tail Whip!”
    Neither of them were attacking directly, he was thinking along the same lines as Red again, maybe they were more alike than he gave credit for.
    Pidgey voluntarily dropped out of the sky and kicked a load of dirt from the floor into Rattata’s eyes, Rattata began flicking its tail around wildly and Pidgey began to get scared – clearly it was unprepared and it let its guard down.
    “Go Rattata!” came Red’s voice, catching both Blue and Pidgey unprepared, “Tackle!”
    Red’s Rattata charged towards Pidgey at a frightening pace for a creature of its size, but it was squinting, it appeared to be unsure exactly where Pidgey was. Sand Attack was a smart move after all.
    “Dodge it, Pidgey!” instructed Blue, “And then use Gust!”
    Following Blue’s orders exactly, Pidgey flew up out of the way and Rattata, unable to see this happen, kept going. Unfortunately for Blue, there was nothing for Rattata to crash into, so it just stopped when it realised it had missed. Pidgey turned and started flapping its wings as hard as it could when Rattata went in for another Tackle. Blue cried out to Pidgey to dodge again, but it was no good, Pidgey wasn’t fast enough. Rattata leapt into the air and knocked Pidgey to the ground.
    “Pidgey! Use Gust again!” shouted Blue, but it was no good, Pidgey had fainted.
    Blue scowled and sent out his trusty Charmander… who still didn’t know any Fire type attacks, what was the point in picking something that was strong against Red’s Pokémon if it didn’t have any attacks of its own Type?
    “Go Charmander!” yelled Blue and threw Charmander’s Poké Ball down to the ground, Charmander burst out and roared threateningly at Rattata, “Use Scratch!”
    Blue wasn’t gonna waste any more time using moves like Sand Attack or Growl – it was time to go in for the kill.
    Red ordered another Tail Whip, but it was no good, as Rattata turned Charmander slashed its side causing it to fall in pain.
    “Don’t give it a chance!” shouted Blue, “Scratch again!”
    As Rattata tried to put a bit of distance between it and Charmander, clearly so it could use Tackle again, Charmander chased it down and used Scratch again – this proved too much, Rattata slumped to the ground – the score was 1-1.
    Red didn’t say anything, he just retreated Rattata to its Poké Ball and sent out Bulbasaur.
    “Hello, old friend,” smirked Blue, “Remember this guy’s claws?”
    Bulbasaur growled at Blue, clearly not appreciating the taunting.
    “Charmander Scratch!” shouted Blue quickly, Charmander immediately obeyed, catching Bulbasaur while he was off guard.
    “Again!” yelled Blue.
    Charmander used Scratch again, as he did so Bulbasaur used Tackle and knocked him back a bit, fortunately it did very little as Bulbasaur was unable to get a satisfactory run up. Charmander scratched Bulbasaur’s face one more time and it proved too much, Bulbasaur too fainted.
    Red returned Bulbasaur to its Poké Ball and looked to the floor, “I guess you win again,” he said, “I might hang around here and check out the Pokémon League… Even if the guard won’t let me through, they might be able to tell me something useful.”
    “You should quit dawdling and get a move on!” retorted Blue, he wasn’t going to miss his chance to antagonise Red, he might never have this chance again.
    “I don’t understand why you won!” shouted Red in anger, “I have just as many Pokémon as you!”
    “What?” replied Blue with a smirk on his face.
    “Why did you have to catch another Pokémon too?” asked Red, “I thought I’d have the edge!”
    “Why do I have two Pokémon?” repeated Blue.
    “Yeah… You’ll probably have more next time we meet, won’t you?” questioned Red, though it was more like a statement, he wasn’t really looking for an answer.
    Blue nodded smugly in response, “You should catch some more too!”
    “Don’t worry,” answered Red, “I will… and next time I’m gonna come out on top!”
    Blue decided not to even bother replying to this, he was in too good a mood, he just walked off back towards Viridian City, leaving Red to stew in his own anger.
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    Ah, Blue is shining in a better light than the game depicts him. I'm liking this a lot so far. I wonder how it's going to go when you reach the battles Red HAS to win. Actually, Professor Oak telling Blue off for not treating his pokemon well... Wow, I wonder how that's going to go. :)

    Keep up the good work.

    Evil Figment (7:59:44 PM): Ryuu, however shakily you started, I've got to hand it to you that you earned my respect the hard way.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ryuu View Post
    Ah, Blue is shining in a better light than the game depicts him. I'm liking this a lot so far. I wonder how it's going to go when you reach the battles Red HAS to win. Actually, Professor Oak telling Blue off for not treating his pokemon well... Wow, I wonder how that's going to go. :)

    Keep up the good work.
    Yeah, that'll make it interesting....

    So,it was very good, though you should double-space between action and speech instead of once.

    Like this. Though, you onlydid that when you switched scenes.

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    Thanks again for the reviews, guys, unfortunately, Ryuutakesh, I foresee you having to wait a long time to see the latter scenario.

    And thanks for the advice, Meme-er, I'll bear that in mind for this chapter and all those following it.

    Chapter 8

    After healing up in the Pokémon Center, Blue thought about his battle with Red, it had been really close. Red got the first point, his Rattata truly bested Blue’s Pidgey.

    “That settles it!” announced Blue to no one in particular, “I’m gonna catch myself a Rattata!”

    There was no sense in debating which was better out of Rattata and Pidgey, if Blue had both then he was guaranteed to have the better one. Blue headed out of Viridian City and into Route 2, where he hoped to catch a Rattata. He headed straight into the long grass and had his hand on Pidgey’s Poké Ball – it needed the training after all. Blue heard a rustling in the grass behind him, he whisked round as fast as possible, but he couldn’t see anything.

    ‘I must have imagined it,’ thought Blue to himself, then he saw something in the corner of his eye, a very, very small Pokémon.
    “Go! Pidgey!” shouted Blue, sending out his Bird Pokémon.
    ‘This isn’t a Rattata,’ pondered Blue, ‘But I’m going to catch in anyway! If I’m gonna complete the Pokédex, I can’t afford to not catch things! If it sucks I can just put it in the PC Box anyway.’

    Blue took a closer look at the creature, it appeared to a Bug type, it had a horn on its head and its body was hairy and segmented, Blue recognised this as a Weedle, if memory served it wasn’t brilliant, but it evolved early and a Beedrill would be pretty effective against low levelled opponents – the ones he’d be expecting to face during this part of his journey.

    “Pidgey! Use Sand Attack!” shouted Blue, this tactic had failed him earlier, but that was against a trainer, someone who knew how to use moves tactically, a wild Pokémon was unlikely to pose as much of a challenge. Not only that, but if he made this thing faint he wouldn’t be able to catch it, it was impossible to find Pokémon in long grass once they’d fainted. The wild Rattata winced at the sand in its eyes, and proceeded to turn to use Tail Whip.

    “Pidgey! Gust!” yelled Blue as soon as Rattata turned, Pidgey responded more quickly than it did before and managed to knock Rattata on its front. Blue thought that this would be a good time to throw a Poké Ball. As Blue threw the Ball, Rattata turned around, and made some attempt to deflect it, but to no avail, Rattata was sucked into the Ball and it hit the ground.
    Learning from his experience with catching Pidgey, Blue decided to put his hands around the Poké Ball in case it rolled away out of control, but didn’t grab it, because that was useless. If anything, this time the Poké Ball was wobbling more violently, but Blue wasn’t worried – he’d been through this with Pidgey and he was confident that he was going to catch Rattata, it was just a matter of waiting for the Ball to stop moving. Then, just as suddenly as it had happened with Pidgey, the Ball stopped moving. Blue picked up the Ball and began to announce his capture of Rattata, only to have a small piece of metal hit him in the face as the Poké Ball exploded, causing Rattata to fire out at a top speed, landing on Pidgey and knocking it to the ground. The wild Rattata took advantage of the confusion to hit Pidgey with a Tackle attack, a Tail Whip and then another Tackle. Finally, Blue came to his sense and commanded Pidgey to hit back with Gust, but unfortunately, it was a case of too little, too late, Rattata struck with another awesome Tackle which sent Pidgey to the floor – Pidgey was out of the battle.
    Blue had not wanted to resort to using Charmander, but he supposed he had to, he reached to his belt and threw out his starter’s Poké Ball.

    Charmander burst out of the Poké Ball and immediately opened with a Scratch attack, taking the wild Rattata completely by surprise. Blue wasn’t about to give this Rattata a chance to strike back, and commanded Charmander to just keep Scratching. After several slashes, Rattata fell on its front – it was about to faint.

    “Charmander!” shouted Blue, “Hold back!”

    Blue couldn’t let Rattata faint – if he did, this would all have been for nothing. Instead, Blue reached into his bag and hurled a Poké Ball at the wild Rattata. This time, rather than trying to avoid the Poké Ball, Rattata simply hit it with a Tackle attack, but this too was useless, Rattata was sucked into the Ball. This time, the Ball wobbled much less violently than with Pidgey or with the first attempt at Rattata. In fact, after a few seconds of wobbling, the Poké Ball stopped.

    Blue cautiously approached, having learnt from his previous experience and slowly picked up the Poké Ball, but this time the Ball did not explode – Rattata was caught!

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