Thread: POKEMON: The Power Inside (Chapter 20 - Route One Rumble!)

Oh my gosh another great chapter. I liked how you described Ash in his room in the first paragraph. Keep up the good work!

Awesome battle very detailed and imaginative! The ending made me :O

ash got shot? Did he take the coin or not??!

What a cliffhanger! Great job!

Great job Legacy! I've been waiting for this chapter for like a week ; - ; Lol, I'm eagerly anticipating the next chapter.

Great chapter again Leg! I like how determined Ash was and I'm glad he beat that jerk! But, wish he wouldn't have gotten hurt! :(

Oh no! ASH!!! UGG...I'm dizzy now. Nice chap!

Decent...

I love it. It's beast!

Poor Ash. Did Zak shoot him, or TR?

Ash got shot?! Oh no! Zak is a sore ass loser.

Question is...did he or didn't he take the coin. if yes, the coin will save him.

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOKNHJOGUYFTYFGHFBHVIOEFGE Cliffhanger!

LOL, anyway I couldn't help but notice 2 leftovers from ASL...

1) "Silas threw his second pokéball onto the field and Hippowdon, a large, hippo-like creature with brown-skin and a big, black snout appeared. Brown sand trickled out of the large ports located on the ground-type’s dark-grey back and muzzle."

2) "'Laaaaaaaaaaaax!' the pokémon roared as it flew remarkably fast towards Hippowdon, despite its considerable mass. The attack ended with Snorlax doing a belly flop right on top of Silas’ Hippowdon, who grunted in pain and collapsed under the added weight."

You might want to fix that

Moving on, another great chapter my friend. Looking forward to reading the next one. DAMN IT ASH, DON'T YOU DARE DIE ON US NOW!!!

OK, I did my best, and I read the Prologue and the first chapter, but I swear I can't stand the anime, and I also admit that I just finished the first chapter out of guilt.

I'm sorry, Legacy, but I won't be reading your fanfic. I certainly did it to properly thank you for reading mine, but this is asking too much. I can't stand the anime, I repeat; I can't stand Ash Ketchum, and I can barely stand his Pikachu, and many others.

Again, I'm sorry. I'm certain your story is awesome, but it's just not for me...

Originally Posted by Kayi Rowling

OK, I did my best, and I read the Prologue and the first chapter, but I swear I can't stand the anime, and I also admit that I just finished the first chapter out of guilt.

I'm sorry, Legacy, but I won't be reading your fanfic. I certainly did it to properly thank you for reading mine, but this is asking too much. I can't stand the anime, I repeat; I can't stand Ash Ketchum, and I can barely stand his Pikachu, and many others.

Again, I'm sorry. I'm certain your story is awesome, but it's just not for me...

No worries Kayi! I appreciate you giving my fic a chance even though you dislike the anime. :)

Be sure to check out some of the other fics on the forum. There are tons that focus on non-anime/original characters that are awesome in the Writers Workshop!

Originally Posted by Legacy

No worries Kayi! I appreciate you giving my fic a chance even though you dislike the anime. :)

Be sure to check out some of the other fics on the forum. There are tons that focus on non-anime/original characters that are awesome in the Writers Workshop!

Thanks for not taking it personally. I'll be seeing you elsewhere sometime, I guess

Originally Posted by Kayi Rowling

Thanks for not taking it personally. I'll be seeing you elsewhere sometime, I guess

Oh no, no problem :) I totally understand that the anime-verse is not everyone's cup of tea.

I just love the anime, but I wanted to see it set in a more adult atmosphere with more complex plot ideas... so I wrote my fic. Anyways, thanks again for reading everyone!

And to those who liked it enough to nominate me for some of the awards, thanks a million!