Thread: POKEMON: The Power Inside (Chapter 20 - Route One Rumble!)

This is why the world needs Darkrais. Their control of nightmares should ensure no wet dreams. And you can tell how much Ash trusts the police after all these years. Must be because of everyone's favorite stalking trio.

Originally Posted by Battle Droid

This is why the world needs Darkrais. Their control of nightmares should ensure no wet dreams. And you can tell how much Ash trusts the police after all these years. Must be because of everyone's favorite stalking trio.

Haha, indeed!

Wait wut.

ASH had the dream this time?

Originally Posted by Jabberwocky

Wait wut.

ASH had the dream this time?

No it was still Dawn, as she got woke up by Piplup, right?

Yeah, Dawn still had the dream.

Originally Posted by Legacy

Yeah, Dawn still had the dream.

Good Legacy, then. It'd be totally OOC for it to be Ash.

good chapter Legacy, eagerly awaiting the next one

this chapter got me thinking, could Lexi's missing sister perhaps be the professor from the prologue??? hmmm... but then, who exactly wrote the email?

Originally Posted by Amajishi-san

good chapter Legacy, eagerly awaiting the next one

this chapter got me thinking, could Lexi's missing sister perhaps be the professor from the prologue??? hmmm... but then, who exactly wrote the email?

I thought about the prologue professor too. It has to be her. And this chapter says Lexi got the email weeks ago so it still could have been sent by Kim before she was killed.

This was an awesome chapter! I noticed you toned down the sex dream tho haha! I love this story! Ash's second battle next?

That's some very detailed description in those chapters.

Suddenly a sharp noise interrupts the silence.

Just a small nit to pick - this should be "interrupted". You're using past tense everywhere else, right?

@Prologue:

Aww, poor professor. She was about to get raped, right...? And then she got killed instead. That really sucks >_>

@Chapter 1:

Those are some pretty intricate rules for the tournament. (Meh, I can make those as well. ^_^) Although I'm miffed as to where the other 18 badges would come from. Outside of Japan, maybe?

(Argh. I just looked up "miffed" on a dictionary, and it turns out I've been using it wrongly for the past four years. I always thought it meant "confused". FML >_>)

Oh, so the girl is Misty... pfft. For a few minutes I thought it was Delia. Then I read about two-thirds of the way through (Not up to the part where you actually reveal her name) and then it was obvious.

I'll post another review for the chapters on the next page next. I don't feel like giving you a wall of text.

Woo, I've been waiting for this chapter! The dawn dream is epic and steamy hot!!! Hurry up with the next chapter please....I hope ash wins his next match.

Wow, the details describing ashy taking the attach to the chest were great, I felt for him as he felt pain while dying.

WOW! I got all worked up reading the dawn dream. Wow...that is all I have to say.

And Lexi's story is intriguing as well. Her sister is definitely the professor from the prolog. Sad to know she's looking for someone who is already dead :*(

Um...im 12 and whats a wet dream? No, I kid, I kid.

Questions- did she ruin her "Silky boxers"? And/or her pillow?

No, all kidding aside, great job! Keep on!

Nice chapter legacy! I liked Lexi's story, it really made me feel bad for her! And i thought Dawn's dream was just right, not to graphic, but not too little kid, so yeah, eagerly waiting for chapter 6

Wow....just wow. I'm this is an intresting read. That coin Ash has really intrests me can't wait to learn more about it. But wow Ash coming back to life after that dreadful Hyper Beam was kind of a relief to me. (Ash is my favourite character)

Originally Posted by pikagirl

Wow....just wow. I'm this is an intresting read. That coin Ash has really intrests me can't wait to learn more about it. But wow Ash coming back to life after that dreadful Hyper Beam was kind of a relief to me. (Ash is my favourite character)

Me too! Not as good as misty swooping in to save him but at least he's okay!