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I read the other version just before you started this... I was waiting for this moment and let me say, awesome job! I love the emotion and detail in this story! (though it sucks to have a good idea of what is going to happen...) Its flow is magnificent with the way of words! All I can say is, you've done a great job! Now, I'll be waiting for chapter two! :expect:
Thanks Sea Princess. Rest assured, there will be a lot of big differences in this version, and a lot of what you found out in the old version is different now. For the better I think. :cheers:Quote:
Originally Posted by Sea Princess627
Anyways, thanks for commenting!
Wow. I've wanted to read this for awhile now, but I didn't like the idea of sorting through 1000 pages. It is marvelous so far! I loved every bit so far! Keep it up!!!!
In the very first post I include a table of contents so that it's easy to skip from chapter to chapter, but at any rate, I'm grateful that people are reading. Thanks!Quote:
Originally Posted by TeamGalacticMercury
I really think the new version will be better. Anyways, I plan on being on a pretty tough writing schedule and having new chapters come out every Sunday night.
I know I said that before, but I'm going to try to really stick by that this time.
And one last thing, (I've said this before but) I really appreciate anyone who reads my work. And I would be really glad if you could comment and let me know of anything you like, don't like, or think could be better. I love to hear criticism.
I LOVED chapter 1! Once again I like the detail, and I just love Misty anyway so I thought it was very awesome!
I assume that the same basic plot is being kept? Chapter 1 makes me almost feel sad that I gave tickets to her sisters to go on a cruise and then declared the gym in danger of closing. Oh, well.
Oh, and about ages, I'm several millennium younger than Dialga, and look what I did to him!
There will be A LOT of changes to the plot :) I won't say specifically what will be changed, but I will say that those who have read the previous version will find this version very new and exciting! I hope.Quote:
Originally Posted by Primal Darkrai
Anyways, thanks for rading, Darkrai!
Chapter 1 is my favorite. I'm so excited to see what changes there will be.Quote:
Originally Posted by Primal Darkrai
Truthfully, it's been so long since I've read the beginning of ASL, that I'm just treating this version as a whole new story. I'm lovin it! Can't wait for the next cahpter leg.
Hey, cool to see this story coming back in new and improved fashion. I really enjoy the way you really paint a picture of what is happening. I can def visualize Misty's depression in the first chap.
The prolog was really scary, and it makes me hate the bad guy right off the bat.
Brilliant chapters, I liked all the great descriptions. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Wow. Loving it so far. Will keep reading. :D
One of the best stories that I've ever read so far. Keep at it!
Hey thanks! I appeciate everyone who's reading. Any suggestions to make the story better?
So far it's awesome. I would just say to be careful about characters. Don't make Ash too perfect, like he is in the anime.Quote:
Originally Posted by Legacy
A good lead character should have flaws, uniqueness, and stuff. He shouldn't be the perfect superhero like he often is in the show.
This is why I really love the first chapter with Misty. You make her personality so deep. She has actual tragedy and depression in her life, and you do a beautiful job of describing it.
Nope. chapter 1 was amazing. Personally, the only thing that would've made it better is if Ash popped out of the screen and said "I LOVE YOU MISTY!!!!" lolQuote:
Originally Posted by Legacy