Oh my gosh another great chapter. I liked how you described Ash in his room in the first paragraph. Keep up the good work!
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Oh my gosh another great chapter. I liked how you described Ash in his room in the first paragraph. Keep up the good work!
Awesome battle very detailed and imaginative! The ending made me :O
ash got shot? Did he take the coin or not??!
What a cliffhanger! Great job!
Great job Legacy! I've been waiting for this chapter for like a week ; - ; Lol, I'm eagerly anticipating the next chapter.
Great chapter again Leg! I like how determined Ash was and I'm glad he beat that jerk! But, wish he wouldn't have gotten hurt! :(
Oh no! ASH!!! UGG...I'm dizzy now. Nice chap!
Decent...
I love it. It's beast!
Poor Ash. Did Zak shoot him, or TR?
Ash got shot?! Oh no! Zak is a sore ass loser.
Question is...did he or didn't he take the coin. if yes, the coin will save him.
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOKNHJOGUYFTYFGHFBHVIOEFGE Cliffhanger! :banghead::banghead::banghead:
LOL, anyway I couldn't help but notice 2 leftovers from ASL...
1) "Silas threw his second pokéball onto the field and Hippowdon, a large, hippo-like creature with brown-skin and a big, black snout appeared. Brown sand trickled out of the large ports located on the ground-type’s dark-grey back and muzzle."
2) "'Laaaaaaaaaaaax!' the pokémon roared as it flew remarkably fast towards Hippowdon, despite its considerable mass. The attack ended with Snorlax doing a belly flop right on top of Silas’ Hippowdon, who grunted in pain and collapsed under the added weight."
You might want to fix that :lol:
Moving on, another great chapter my friend. Looking forward to reading the next one. DAMN IT ASH, DON'T YOU DARE DIE ON US NOW!!!
OK, I did my best, and I read the Prologue and the first chapter, but I swear I can't stand the anime, and I also admit that I just finished the first chapter out of guilt.
I'm sorry, Legacy, but I won't be reading your fanfic. I certainly did it to properly thank you for reading mine, but this is asking too much. I can't stand the anime, I repeat; I can't stand Ash Ketchum, and I can barely stand his Pikachu, and many others.
Again, I'm sorry. I'm certain your story is awesome, but it's just not for me...
No worries Kayi! I appreciate you giving my fic a chance even though you dislike the anime. :)Quote:
Originally Posted by Kayi Rowling
Be sure to check out some of the other fics on the forum. There are tons that focus on non-anime/original characters that are awesome in the Writers Workshop!
Thanks for not taking it personally. I'll be seeing you elsewhere sometime, I guess :ksmile:Quote:
Originally Posted by Legacy
Oh no, no problem :) I totally understand that the anime-verse is not everyone's cup of tea.Quote:
Originally Posted by Kayi Rowling
I just love the anime, but I wanted to see it set in a more adult atmosphere with more complex plot ideas... so I wrote my fic. Anyways, thanks again for reading everyone!
And to those who liked it enough to nominate me for some of the awards, thanks a million!