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    Suspence! Thrills! Chills! Spills! Fights! Romance! All in this chapter of New Beginnings!

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    Thanks, I got a new banner by the way

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    Quote Originally Posted by Seed/Geass Warrior View Post
    Yeah I should've come up with something better, I guess I'll edit that part out and just replace it with a normal wall as for the ultimate attacks I guess I didn't know they were equivalent to the Hyper Beam I always found the Hyper Beam weaker compared to them.
    Actually, Frenzy Plant, Blast Burn, Hydro Cannon, and Hyper Beam all have the same power level of 150. It only seems weaker because Hyper Beam, being a Normal Type move, is not super effective against any type.

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    And there was war in heaven. Michael and his angels fought against the dragon, and the dragon and his angels fought back. But he was not strong enough, and they lost their place in heaven. The great dragon was hurled down―that ancient serpent called the devil, or Satan, who leads the world astray. He was hurled to the earth, and his angels with him.
    Revelation 12:7-9

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    Oh that explains it well what's done it's done I guess

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    What about Giga Impact? It's the Physical version of Hyper Beam. I believe it also has a Attack strength of 150.

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    There will still be the fact that Alexa could just use Hyper Beam after the failed Giga Impact, so I just managed to think of an excuse.

    Also as a lot of you know I'm known for always having two three fics, well since I really can't handle it I'll just do this fic till it's done.

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    “Thunder!”

    “Sludge Bomb!”

    Pikachu kept sprinting towards Toxicroak with only one thing in mind; it’s trainer’s orders, after seven months of travelling with Ashian it got used to the way it battled, and a battle like this just sparked its emotions up. Pikachu saw how Toxicroak was preparing itself to fire the big ball of purple liquid, which would surely poison it if it made contact.

    Pikachu jumped up at the right moment, since Toxicroak was already firing the attack, it couldn’t stop itself and toppled over sending the ball crashing with the floor. Pikachu ended up on the other side and fired the jolt of thunder towards Toxicroak. The frog like Pokémon was hit directly by the attack as he fell to it’s knees.

    “Amazing, Ashian’s Pikachu predicted the when Toxicroak was going to fir its attack, and it did it without the help of its trainer,” Lucas smiled as he stared at the battle, but then remembered that Janine was also going for a full on attack against his brother.

    Janine threw a kick at Ashian, the eleven year old barely dodged it but as soon as he did Janine’s other leg hit him on the ribs. “Damn it,” Ashian grunted as he turned around and started running, but he crashed with a wall. “Okay who put that there!?” he yelled as he got up.

    “You were watching the battle, so you know that you have to watch where you go.” Janine grin, she took out a few ninja stars and threw them towards Ashian. Ashian managed to jump out of the way of the three ninja stars and landed about a meter away.

    “Hah, I thought you’ll have better aiming.” Ashian pointed at Janine and grinned after turning around. He gasped, the stars were stuck on the wall, the thing was that they weren’t even stars they were pokéballs attached to the stars. “Ninja star pokéballs?”

    “They’re my specialty, containing the best of this gym,” Janine spread her arms wide as the pokéballs popped open, three Pokémon came out. The first one was a Muk; it was actually bigger than a normal Muk since it covered twice the gap between Ashian and Janine, which made Ashian jump again so that Muk couldn’t reach him. The other was a Venomoth, which was already flying over them, trying not to get too far from its trainer, and last but not least a Drapion; which was glaring at Ashian.

    “No fair, you’re using three Pokémon!” Ashian yelled alarmed as Pikachu ran back to him, Toxicroak got up and regroup with Muk, Drapion and Venomoth.

    “I never said you couldn’t use more than one Pokémon.” Janine grinned as he raised her finger. “Muk use, Sludge Bomb!” Muk fired a barrage of brown balls, for some reason it was different than Toxicroak’s but if it was a Sludge Bomb, then it should be dodge.

    “Gligar, I choose you,” Ashian sent Gligar out, the Pokémon grabbed him and his Pikachu as the three flew out of Muk’s range. Drapion jumped over Muk and then after landing on the other side it fired a powerful Hyper Beam towards Gligar and the others. Gligar didn’t have time to dodge it and it fell down, throwing its trainer and Pikachu with it.

    “Ashian!” Janine took her sword out and slashed, Pikachu used an Iron Tail so that it could protect its trainer. “Venomoth, use Stun Spore.” Venomoth flew over Pikachu and started sending yellow spores down, the rat Pokémon couldn’t stop itself from smelling it and got paralyzed.

    “Pikachu.” Ashian turned back around after seeing his Pokémon get paralyzed.

    “Pi….kha” Pikachu grunted as it turned to Ashian.

    “All right buddy thanks.” Ashian turned to Gligar. “Let’s make a run for it.” Ashian started running and Gligar flew the other way. *Thank you Pikachu* Ashian thought as tears came out of his eyes.

    “Man, Gligar, be careful.” Ashian said taking out his brand new Pokécell out, this time it was equipped with a Pokédex feature so he didn’t have tow sorry about buying a new one, it also came with a communicator which allowed him to communicate and give commands to his Pokémon by using a special set of microchips that he puts in his Pokémon’s ears.

    “All right, try to keep away from her Pokémon if you see them…”Ashian couldn’t keep running, he looked down to see the sludge he was stepping and was stuck on. “Oh crap,” he grunted trying to get out, then noticed what it really was.

    Muk took form and made Ashian drop back to the floor. It opened its mouth and dove down to attack Ashian. “Go Loudred, Sound Beam!” Ashian threw his pokéball; Loudred came out and fired a giant beam composed of piercing air and an ear piercing noise. Muk didn’t take calmly to this, it’s body was practically destroyed into millions of sludge pieces.

    Loudred stomped on the floor and howled loudly. “Good job Loudred, that’ll teach it a few lessons.” Ashian nodded, but then noticed that Muk was regenerating by putting the pieces back together. “Damn it, I forgot, Muk can regenerate, it can only be knocked out directly.” Ashian face palmed; how could he have forgotten that something that’s composed of sludge can’t really be destroyed by being separated into pieces.

    “Muk, prepare to suffer, Loudred, go for a Double Edge!” Loudred started running as it gathered energy, it crashed against Muk and pushed it back. *There’s gotta be a wall somewhere* just when he said that, Muk was stopped by one of the invisible walls.

    “Now Loudred, use Ice Beam!” Loudred roared and fired a strong icy blue beam towards Muk, the beam started to freeze all the walls that were around, till it finally made contact with Muk and started freezing it over. “Okay then, let’s take it out. “Use Sound Punch!” Loudred’s fist was surrounded by air and waves of sound as it punched the block of ice and broke it; Muk came out and just stayed there on the floor like if it was melted water.

    “Take that you sludgy son of a bitch,” Ashian turned to look at the defeated Muk and flipped him off. “Now, let’s hurry Loudred,” Ashian and Loudred turned around and started running again; with Muk out of business they only had to beat three more Pokémon, he just hoped his Pokémon could hold on, in fact he wondered if he could hold up.

    “This stinks, I can see what’s happening, but I can’t help him out, if only I had a way to help.” Lucas clenched his fist, his brother was fighting head on against a ninja gymleader and he couldn’t do anything to help him out.

    Ashian kept running and crashing with walls till the point he started getting tired of just running for no reason. “This is too, exhausting, everywhere I go there’s a wall, I can’t find the way.” He kept looking around. Suddenly his eyes started to close as his head started to feel lighter. “Damn it.” He whispered looking at what he had in his hand, Sleep Spore.

    Ashian looked up, Venomoth was flying over them, looking at it he felt like if he was being watched by a vulture, a vulture that was waiting for them to fall sleep so that it could go to Janine and let her finish them off. “We can’t lose, Gligar….” Ashian toppled over.

    Loudred fired a Hyper Voice that woke him up his trance and startled Venomoth. The moth Pokémon charged down towards Loudred and started sending strong currents of wind down at the purple bear. Loudred stood its ground as it covered its trainer. It fired a strong beam of orange energy towards Venomoth and managed to make it stop its attack.

    “See what you get you bug.” Ashian laughed, then he gulped after seeing someone was pointing a sword towards him, who else but Janine. “Oh, hi,” he laughed nervously and started sweating, since he knew Janine would probably cut him with the sword a bit.

    “Don’t get cocky.” She whispered, Loudred turned to face its trainer but Toxicroak came running and hit it with a Poison Jab. And just when it thought it was free, Drapion managed to come from the other side and hit it on the back with another Poison Jab.

    Loudred toppled over to its side, after receiving two Poison Jab attacks on both sides it could barely breathe. “Loudred!” Ashian yelled.

    “I have to admit, I was a little surprised when I noticed you defeated Muk, but once I saw Venomoth flying over you, I knew where you were.” Janine raised the sword. “Any last words before you lose, I won’t kill you, but I will have some fun.

    “Yeah, suck it.” Ashian did the most stupid thing he has ever done in battle, stepped on someone’s foot, even Janine felt that and let him go instantly. “I don’t hit girls, but this is a last resort thing.” Ashian spun around as he kicked Janine on the face. “Sorry.” He nodded and returned Loudred then started running.

    Still he crashed, and crashed and crashed, it was like he couldn’t even find a way to go anymore. “There has to be away, if I could only know where the walls are.” He decided to start walking, discovering that just running around wouldn’t help him keep his energy. “I know it’s useless, Pikachu you there?” Ashian activated Pikachu’s communicator.

    “Pika…” Ashian heard the whispered of Pikachu and started running, trying to find where the voice came from.

    “Pikachu where are you!” he yelled, not caring that Janine could probably know where he was if he yelled too loud, but he just wanted to help Pikachu.

    He finally came to stop and saw his friend laying on the floor all battered up. “Pikachu, are you okay?” Ashian asked kneeling down to see how Pikachu was. The little mouse looked at him and got up. “Don’t…” Pikachu stopped him though.

    He got up and looked around, then it clenched its fist, Ashian knew what it was saying, it wanted to keep fighting till the end, to fight till Janine gave up.

    “I know, but, we still have to find Gligar and Janine has three Pokémon left.” Ashian said sadly as he looked around, now that he noticed the walls weren’t really invisible they were just showing illusion to make it seem like you had more space.

    “Gligar, can you copy me?” Ashian asked in the communicator a few seconds later he got an answer from Gligar. “Awesome, stay where you are.” Ashian grabbed Pikachu and put it in his arms as he started running to find Gligar.

    “He is actually holding up this long,” Lucas grinned with an impressed look as he stared at the still fighting Ashian, to think his little brother was trying his best to fight head on against one of the strongest gymleaders in the region; it actually gave him hope about what the future prepared for him. “Good luck little bro.”

    “He’ll win, “Lucas looked over at the door, Evelyn was there. “I know it,” she smiled.

    Lucas just looked at her and then back at the battle. “Yeah you’re right.”

    “So let’s cheer him on!” she yelled the n cupped her hand on her cheeks. “Come on Ashian, just focus and you’ll win easily!” she screamed with all the air in her lungs.



    “Gligar, are you okay.” Ashian ran towards the scratched Gligar, it was holding its right arm over its left arm, which looked like it was bleeding a bit after being hit with a lot of slashing attacks; probably from Drapion. “This has gone too far,” Ashian clenched his fist. “We have to find Janine and finish this.”

    “Did you call my name?” Ashian turned around, Janine and her three Pokémon were already moving towards them. “You can’t beat me Ashian, without knowing your way through this labyrinth.” She chuckled and pointed her finger at Ashian. “Go Drapion!”

    Drapion charged towards Ashian and his Pokémon, now that he looked at it, Janine had three Pokémon; two of them were powerhouses while he had two Pokémon that were too small for comfort. “Retreat damn it retreat!” Ashian yelled and turned around; but after seeing Pikachu and Gligar charging back at Drapion he looked back at his companions. Gligar’s claws started glowing a shining white as it crossed it to make an X. The X-Scizzor was fired from Gligar’s claws.

    Drapion put its arms together and stood its ground, it couldn’t see when Gligar dove down for an Arial Ace and was hit by that instead. Drapion was dragged around the floor, but it got up and ran towards Gligar holding its claw up as it used its own Arial Ace on the scorpion Pokémon.

    On the other side Pikachu and Toxicroak were battling it out again. Pikachu jumped over Toxicroak and once it was high enough it twirled around, its glowing tail was countered by Toxicroak’s Poison Jab. “Pika pi,” Pikachu grunted. I broke out of the attack and fired a strong jolt of lightning; Toxicroak fired a ball of mud that exploded after colliding with the lightning.

    “Toxicroak, use Close Combat!” Toxicroak started punching and kicking Pikachu; the bad thing is that every time Pikachu tried to hit it back Toxicroak dodged it, as if its ability and speed had increased too.

    “Pikachu, Volt Tackle!” Pikachu started running towards Toxicroak, it surrounded itself with yellow electricity. It jumped up and crashed itself against Toxicroak and made it topple over. “We have it right where we want it,” Ashian grinned.

    “Drapion, Toxicroak, use Hyper Beam!” both Toxicroak and Drapion took a few seconds to charge and then fired an orange beam of energy, both attack combined as they headed towards their target.

    “Gligar, stop it,” Ashian commanded; Gligar flew towards the beam as it created its own Hyper Beam in between its claws. It couldn’t hold it, even after using its own Hyper Beam as a shield it wasn’t enough to block the two Hyper Beam that were combined and eventually got overpowered by it.

    Gligar fell to the floor right in front of its trainer, trying its best not to lose consciousness. Drapion’s claw started glowing in a clear purple but Pikachu got in between Gligar. The female Gligar looked at Pikachu with a looked that obviously showed her disgust at how Pikachu was trying to protect it.

    “At least your Pokémon are loyal with each other,” Janine nodded. Drapion changed from Poison Jab to a Slash as it slashed Pikachu’s body; but the little rat Pokémon still wouldn’t budge, even with the blood running down its body.

    “Pikachu,” Ashian looked down after seeing how his Pokémon were willing to protect each other. “Okay then,” he ran over to help them and got in front of both Pokémon. “If you want to finish Gligar off you’ll have to finish all of us off.” He said after spreading his arms wide.

    That’s when he heard Evelyn’s cheering; he turned to the direction of the cheer and saw his friend and older brother cheering for him. He smiled warmly and turned to look down at Gligar. “Gligar, can you stand up?” Ashian asked, Gligar struggled a bit but then gave him a ‘do you even have to ask?’ look.

    “Then, let’s fight!” Gligar didn’t needed to hear anything else as it dove towards Drapion and Toxicroak, it started glowing in mid air as its body grew and was enveloped by a shining light, once it came out of the light it had evolved into a Gliscor. “Awesome, Gliscor, Arial Ace!” Gliscor started to gather wind; Drapion pushed Toxicroak aside, not thinking straight since it would make more damage to it than Toxicroak. It was hit by the strong flying move and bounced of the floor.

    “Drapion get up now!” Janine yelled; Ashian could notice that she was worried now; any move could turn the tables on her. Drapion got up, its tail started glowing white, and it ran towards Gliscor as it prepared to hit it. Gliscor’s own tail started to glow; both tails crashed against each other and sent friction as both Pokémon kept pushing each other.

    “Night Slash!” Gliscor raised its claw, it started glowing silver, it threw it back and then slashed Drapion, and since Drapion was still focusing on the Iron Tail it couldn’t defend itself against it.

    Gliscor flew up then it dove down, putting its claws together as it prepared for a physical X-Scizzor. Drapion started running; it raised its razor shaped claw and prepared for an Arial Ace. The Pokémon crossed each other and ended up on the other side. Drapion fell first and laid there like a dead bug. But just when Ashian was about to celebrate, Gliscor fell too.

    “Good job Gliscor,” Ashian grabbed Gliscor’s pokéball and returned it, he looked over at Janine she was returning her own Pokémon. “You still go two left,” he focused on Venomoth, for some reason it was just flying there, like if it was waiting for something. “Pikachu!”

    “Venomoth, use Solar Beam now!” Janine slashed the air with her sword, Venomoth flew back a little, as if it were about to blow a gust of wind out of its mouth. It fired a glowing beam of energy that headed straight for Pikachu. Pikachu gritted its teeth; Ashian wouldn’t be able to order a command, and even if he could Pikachu wouldn’t have time to fulfill it. That’s when it knew that for that situation it was alone. Pikachu jumped up high as it looked down on Venomoth. “No way,” she gasped.

    “Thunder!” Pikachu fired a jolt of electricity that hit Venomoth and finally ended it. “The fly is dead,” he said remembering how flies are attracted to those electric lamps. “Good job Pikachu.” He gave the little rat a thumb up.

    “You know it’s actually funny,” Ashian smirked while scratching his nose in a mockingly matter. “When I came into the battle I started with Pikachu, and you had Toxicroak, now both of us have only one Pokémon left and it’s the same two Pokémon.” Ashian chuckled, after seeing that Janine wasn’t taking kindly to his joke he decided to take things seriously. “Thunder Bolt!”

    “Dodge it and use Mud Bomb!” Toxicroak moved aside and then it fired a giant ball of mud from between its hands.

    “Pikachu, jump over it,” Pikachu gasped for breath as it jumped over the Mud Bomb.

    “This is the part of the match, where one hit could turn the tide of the whole battle.” Janine raised her hand up, Toxicroak ran towards Pikachu preparing to do another Poison Jab on it.

    “Quick Attack to dodge.” Pikachu ran at full speed, it gathered energy behind it but instead of tackling Toxicroak it ran under its legs. “See ya,” Ashian jumped over Toxicroak by putting his arms on his shoulders and then kept running.

    “Don’t worry Toxicroak, he still doesn’t know where the walls are,” Janine nodded after seeing her Toxicroak’s worried look.

    ***
    “Ashian,” Alexa whispered, she opened her eyes and discovered that she was in a hospital room, there was a window by her right which had the light of the setting sun coming from it. There was a TV on the far left corner of the room, which was turned on to the latest news; Henry was watching it.

    “Oh, you woke up,” Henry got up from his chair and walked over to Alexa. “The nurse said you were pretty close, if I hadn’t brought you here as fast as I did you probably wouldn’t have made it,” Henry smiled as he looked at Alexa; she wasn’t so happy though since she was still looking unemotionally at space.

    “How did the battle go, did Ashian win?” Alexa asked pushing herself up from the bed, but Henry stopped her since she was still wounded.

    “I don’t know, we left him while he was staring his battle, but Lucas is there to help him out.” Henry answered, Alexa nodded and had a look that showed she had something to say to him.

    “Ashian, the walls, they make a small shadow when they’re hit by the light.” Alexa said grabbing Henry by the jacket. “I just hope that Ashian figures it out.”

    “He wills, I’m sure, I hope so but let’s remember he’s Ashian.” Henry smiled. “I’m sure in a few minutes we’ll see him coming back with two Soul Badges.” He laughed ruffling the back of his head.

    “Yeah,” Alexa nodded as she looked away. “Henry, you know that I…”

    “Like Ashian, I know,” Henry nodded. “Just tell him,” he encouraged knowing that Alexa was too insecure to tell Ashian.

    “Yeah, I will.” She nodded while clenching her fist in confidence.

    ***
    “That’s it,” Ashian smiled confidently as he stared at the hall of invisible walls, he could see them, when the lights hit the wall it showed a small shadow on the floor. “I found you out Janine!” Ashian yelled.

    “Okay then, now we can fight seriously, go Poison Jab!” Toxicroak did another Poison Jab; Pikachu jumped up and reflected it with an Iron Tail. It spun again and fired a Thunder Bolt that managed to hurt Toxicroak.

    “Thunder!” Ashian yelled, Pikachu didn’t move though. “Damn it, you’re too tired to fire another Thunder,” Ashian gritted his teeth; he finally had a chance to beat Janine and now Pikachu didn’t have enough energy left.

    “Let’s finish this with one more shot, Toxicroak one last Poison Jab!” Toxicroak’s knife like finger started glowing in a deep purple, it ran towards Pikachu holding it up and prepared to deliver the final blow.

    “I don’t think so.” Ashian turned to his left and started running; this caused Toxicroak to fall off. He ran across, now that he knew where to go he finally ended up behind Janine and Toxicroak. “Let’s go!” he and Pikachu started running, Pikachu surrounded itself with electricity as it turned into a giant ball of lightning. “Hah!!” Ashian yelled, holding his fist up.

    “Volt Tackle and fist combination!” Pikachu crashed with Toxicroak and sent it flying towards a wall, it bounced off and fell. Ashian; who knew that he had to do it cause of the badge punched Janine on her left cheek and threw her off her feet.

    Both of the panted as they stopped and looked down on their defeated opponents. “We made it Pikachu, we made it!” he screamed, it was practically heard through the whole gym, Pikachu yelled together with him; finally after what seemed like an endless battle in a labyrinth they were done, they won.

    Ashian’s eyes lost color as he started falling; Evelyn and Lucas were already there and managed to catch him in time. “You did it bro,” Lucas grinned as he looked at his younger brother.

    “Yeah bro,” Ashian chuckled and the two facepalmed.

    “Good job Ashian, you made it,” Evelyn nodded as she put his head on her shoulder. Ashian’s eyes started to close though.

    “So…tired…”he whispered as he fell sleep on her shoulder.

    “You deserve a rest,” she nodded with a gentle smile.

    Janine got up all of a sudden, she was shaking her head to make sure there wasn’t any damage then took out two heart shaped purple badges. “My job here is done uh Lucas?” she asked.

    “Yeah, thanks for bringing him back to his feet Janine, I’ll take those.” Lucas nodded as he grabbed the Soul Badges. Evelyn barely know what was going on but she didn’t care much. Now Ashian was done with his battle and now that she was there the two could resume their friendship and maybe get to something more than that in the future.

    ***
    “There he comes, are you gonna tell him?” Henry asked as they saw someone entering, they couldn’t make out who it was but whoever it was was wearing a backpack just like Ashian’s which was the only thing they could make out.

    “Yeah, three, two one…Ashian you’re back!” she ran over to the door as it opened, she crashed with Evelyn and the two fell to the floor, apparently Evelyn was carrying Ashian since he fell over her. Alexa patted her head and glared. “Evelyn,”

    “Oh, hey Alexa,” Evelyn said rather clueless as the two of them stared at each other.

    “Oh damn, I hate cliffhangers,” Henry frowned and then sighed.

    END OF CHAPTER 44
    END OF ARC

    NEXT CHAPTER: SEE HER, PICK HER, KISS HER
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    Default Re: Pokemon New Generation: New Beginnings ( PG-14) (Action, Drama, Comedy, Romance)

    Hey pretty nice chapter. I think he use run-on sentences a bit much tho and there a few other grammar things, but overall not bad.

    I like your desribing of the battles.

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    Default Re: Pokemon New Generation: New Beginnings ( PG-14) (Action, Drama, Comedy, Romance)

    Good chapter, just think you should proofread it before posting. A few grammar mistakes and typos.

    Also, when you end a quote with a comma, you should only do so if the next sentence is describing the quote. For example, you often do this:

    “Oh damn, I hate cliffhangers,” Henry frowned and then sighed.

    In this case, "OH damn, I hate cliffhangers," should end in a period because "Henry frowned" doesn't describe the quote. Henry frowning is a totally different action not related to what he says. Just a suggestion.

    The rest of the fic is pretty good.

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    Okay, thanks for the review

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    Hey pretty fun chapter to read. The grammar and english stuff has already been said, but i agree with blondie. proofread your work or have someone do it for you, because your story is good...just needs a little touch-ups.

    Anyways, great work. keep it up.

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    Default Re: Pokemon New Generation: New Beginnings ( PG-14) (Action, Drama, Comedy, Romance)

    Hey sorry Hero, haven't gotten a chance to review lately. But the chapter was pretty good.

    I especially like how you handle battles. Myself, I'm no good at writing battles. But you do it in a way that is both descriptive AND concise.

    Anyways, I agree with PKGAL and Blondie about the proofreading. There are a few grammar mistakes, but it's all good...we all make them, especially me. So yeah, can't wait to keep reading, mate.

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    “Girls, do you really have to act this way?” Ashian asked with a nervous look as he looked at Alexa and Evelyn; the two of them were right next to him both of them pulling on one of his arms. Ashian had a bandage around his forehead, after the battle with Janine he had to get a lot of medical care, but what hurt him the most was that both of his arms were bandaged and that’s where both Evelyn and Alexa were pulling.

    “But, you said I could travel with you right?” Evelyn asked with a fake smile to try and make Alexa jealous.

    “Yeah, but I didn’t say you could break my arms, why are you doing the same thing though Alexa?” Alexa flinched as she let go; ever since she told Henry about her feelings for Ashian she’s just been more focus on that than on anything else, even if she did want to tell him Ashian was practically clueless of the matter.

    “It’s just, um, the sun is better on this side don’t you think, so I wanted you to get some more sunlight.” Alexa nodded fast as she moved away towards Lucas. “But if you don’t want to, then my bad sorry,” she said really fast and then looked down at the floor in embarrassment.

    “You’re blowing this.” Lucas chuckled, just seeing the two girls fight was enough to make his day. He looked back at Ashian and Evelyn. “There’s a difference, Evelyn actually told Ashian she liked him, you’re still trying to keep him in the dark.”

    “I can’t just tell him, I mean, what would I do after that?” she asked as she looked back, for some reason she couldn’t keep herself calm every time she saw Evelyn she just felt infuriated; Evelyn gave them so much crap back in Vermilion and now Ashian is treating her like they’ve known each other for years.

    “I think I have an idea,” Lucas said while rubbing his chin in a thinking motion. “Hey Henry, give me that map for a moment.” Lucas walked over to Henry and grabbed the map he was carrying in his hands.

    “What is it?” Henry asked trying to get a scoop at what Lucas was looking at. He was pointing at a small Sea Prot named Luvdisc Port. “Luvdisc Port?”

    “Yeah, it’s a port that takes ships straight to Cinnabar, and it’s famous for its breed of Luvdisc,” Lucas nodded as he showed Ashian, Evelyn and Alexa the map. “As some of you may know Luvdisc are known as the love Pokémon, people say that whoever has a school of Luvdisc go past them will end up together forever.”

    “What are you talking about Lucas, I mean why would we care about that?” Alexa laughed nervously, with a little anger deep inside her since she didn’t want Lucas to mess with her business.

    “I would love to go,” Evelyn cheered as she tried to pressure Ashian into going. “Come on, and then we can make it official.”

    “What?” Ashian asked; they all stared at him for a few seconds before toppling over. “No really what?”

    “You’re such a doofus!” Lucas, Alexa and Henry yelled in unison, Ashian just raised an eyebrow and shrugged.

    “Well, I guess we can take a little breather,” he shrugged again and started walking. “So let’s do it.”

    They all nodded and started following him, Alexa had a little doubt, and if Lucas was right then maybe she still had a chance to get Ashian to like her. “Okay, I’ll do it, I’ll make sure he knows.” She nodded in confidence and started following them.

    ***
    Ashian gasped as he stared at the port in awe, it was Luvdisc obsessed, and there were a lot of stores all next to each other, but the weird thing is that all the foods they sold were in the shape of Luvdisc; Luvdisc burger, Luvdisc shape chocolate on top of ice cream and practically anything.

    “This place is cool,” Evelyn started running down the port; she started motioning the others to follow. “Come on guys, I’m hungry!” she yelled, cupping her hands next to her mouth.

    “Well, at least we know she’s happy,” Lucas laughed in confusion; Alexa looked over at the clothing stores that were stationed at the port.

    “What is it Lex?” Ashian asked as he saw what she was staring at a sparkling green dress it shone with the lights above it and of course the sunlight it got from outside. “It’s beautiful you gonna buy it?” he asked.

    “No, why would I, it’s not like I have any need for it.” Alexa lowered her hat so that Ashian wouldn’t see her blushing.

    “Anyways, let’s go, I’ll buy.” He said pointing at the ice cream shop. “Evelyn, Lucas and Henry went off to see when the ships are leaving so we have some time.” He shrugged and started walking.

    Alexa smiled, it was her chance the two of them eating ice cream with no one to interrupt for who knows how many minutes; it was the chance she was waiting for. She followed him, trying not to lose sight since a lot of people were starting to gather it was easy for them to lose sight of each other.

    “Hey Ashian,” she grabbed his hand to stop him. ‘Um…you see….” She looked at his questioning face, even though she had the chance she didn’t even know how to approach it, her body started to feel warmer as her face blushed. Ashian put his hand on her forehead.

    “You’re hot, are you getting sick or something?” he asked looking at her red face. Alexa screamed and punched him on the right cheek which made him fall off. “Did anyone saw the number on that truck?” he asked while his eyes were spinning.

    “I’m sorry Ashian, are you okay!” she yelled as she went to help Ashian up. “I’m okay, sorry for doing that it was just my reflexes I guess.” She nodded while the two started walking to the ice cream shop.

    ***
    “Here are your ice creams,” the waiter walked over to their desk as he laid the two ice cream bowls down. Ashian stared at his vanilla ice cream, even though it was a plain flavor he ordered it with a lot chocolate chips and chocolate syrup, plus a chocolate shaped Luvdisc cookie on top of it. He looked down, the desk was transparent so you could see through it.

    “This looks awesome!” Ashian yelled, he grabbed a spoon and started chugging the ice cream down. “And it’s good too, why aren’t you eating yours Lex?” he asked looking towards Alexa strawberry ice cream, her ice creams was simpler than his the only thing she had was the cookie and a few pieces of strawberry inside the ice cream.

    “Oh, right, sorry I was just thinking.” Alexa laughed nervously as she started eating her ice cream; there he was right in front of her, doing his usual devouring which he tries calling eating.

    “You’ve been acting a little weird lately Lex,” Ashian looked at her, he had ice cream all over his mouth, Alexa giggled; she grabbed a napkin and walked over to him. She started wiping the ice cream off.

    “Seriously, you need to clean yourself up.” She smiled; Ashian couldn’t help but blush after she was done. Alexa finally noticed what she was doing she stared at the napkin and then blushed too. “Um….” She ran back to her seat and started eating again. “So I guess you must be happy that Evelyn is treating you like a little stuff animal,” Alexa frowned now that she thought about it, her good mood was starting to disappear with every thought of Evelyn.

    “It’s not like I like it, okay maybe I do like it a bit, but I keep telling her to stop doing it,” Ashian put his cub of ice cream away after he was done eating it; Ashian leaned on his chair as he looked up at the roof. “I mean, I want to be the best, so I can’t have any distractions and well, this is pretty distracting.”

    Alexa smiled after seeing how confident Ashian was and how dedicated. “You know, I’ve always liked that about you, you’re confident and dedicated to your goals, not a lot of people are like that.” Alexa looked over at him, she sighed and got up. “We should go find the others.”

    “Yeah, you’re right,” Ashian said as he got up and started walking right next to Alexa.

    “Ashian!” they looked ahead, Evelyn was running towards them; she jumped and pulled Ashian into a hug. “Guess what we found, an underwater view,” she didn’t even explain what it was about or why she wanted to take him there; instead she just started pulling him across the port.

    “But, could you at least tell me why we’re going?” Ashian asked trying not to topple over while running. Looking ahead he could see a small flight of stairs that led to a small cave, people were coming in and out, mostly couples. “Again, why are we going in there?” he sweatdropped as they walked down.

    “Stop complaining for once and see for yourself,” she grinned innocently as she stopped, they were right in front of a transparent glass, they were right under the sea and you could see all the water Pokémon that were swimming around.

    “Wow, look at all those Pokémon, Wailmer, Seel, Mantine,” Ashian had a big grin on his face as he stared at every single water Pokémon that was swimming around.

    “That’s not what I got you here for,” she pointed at the school of Luvdisc that were swimming right in front of them, Evelyn tightened her grip on Ashian’s arm. “Remember what Lucas said, if a school of Luvdisc swims in front of a couple, they say they’ll be together forever,” she giggled. Ashian facepalmed himself; at first it was great that Evelyn was giving him so much attention but it went from sweet to totally crazy.

    “Evelyn, don’t you think you’re acting a bit too, oh I don’t know, totally whacked!” Ashian yelled getting himself out of Evelyn’s grasp.

    “But I thought you’ll like this,” she had a confused grin on her face as she put her finger closed to her mouth in questioning.

    “It’s because you’re acting like a freaking psychopath!” Alexa yelled, she was grasping for breath after following Ashian and Evelyn all around the port.

    “Well I like him silly, why do you care anyways?” she got a mischievous grin on her face. Alexa fumed after what Evelyn said, she walked over to her and held her fist up. “Ooh, I’m so scared.”

    “Wanna fight, get your pokéball out,” Alexa took out one of her six pokéballs.

    “With pleasure.” Evelyn chuckled, Ashian was both nervous and confuse, considering Evelyn was grinning while Alexa was glaring.

    ***

    Evelyn and Alexa were standing on different sides of the sidewalk, both of them holding a pokéball at hand. “I hope you’re ready to lose this one, go Luxio!” Alexa threw her pokéball and once it popped open her Luxio came out.

    “In that case, I’ll use this, I choose you Ambipom!” Evelyn sent her Ambipom out; it started jumping around before assuming its own battle stand. Alexa looked around, Ambipom are originally fast; so she needed a place where to corner it.

    “Man, you got two girls fighting for you Ashian,” Henry looked over at the two girls before turning to the now nervous Ashian.

    “No they’re not, well at least I know Alexa isn’t…hopefully,” Ashian sighed in desperation, he felt like an idiot since everyone was staring.

    “I know bro, but just sit and enjoy.” Lucas patted Ashian’s shoulder as he raised his hand. “Ready, set, battle!” he threw his hand down and both Luxio and Ambipom sprinted towards each other.

    “Now Luxio, use Sparks!” Luxio surrounded itself with blue electricity as it jumped up, it spun around like a wheel as it crashed against Ambipom. Ambipom took its chance to grab Luxio with its two hands, which trapped it in its hold. “I feel for that,” Alexa clenched her fist after seeing how Ambipom countered her move.

    “Ambipom, use Focus Punch!” Ambipom raised one of its arms, it glowed in a bluish white as it punched Luxio on the gut, Luxio toppled over, and it got up but as soon as it looked up Ambipom hit it with a barrage of golden stars. “A little gift from Swift.”

    “Alexa’s losing the upper hand in this battle, if she doesn’t think of something soon she might lose.” Lucas looked at the battle scratching his chin in a thinking pose.

    “All right Luxio, you’re close enough use Iron Tail!” Luxio spun around; its tail glowed in a metallic white as it crashed its tail against Ambipom’s ribs.

    “Ambipom use Dig!” Evelyn yelled throwing her hand up in the air. Ambipom started digging the ground, it got deeper and deeper down till Luxio wasn’t able to see it. “Now!”

    “I don’t think so, Luxio jumped and use Thunder!” Luxio jumped up in time; which made Ambipom miss its attack, Ambipom came out of the hole only to land right next to it. Luxio growled as it fired a jolt of thunder, Ambipom screamed in pain while the electricity coursed around it.

    “Ambipom, use Double Team!” Evelyn yelled, Ambipom started sending tornado like current, after a few spins they turned into exact clones of it. “Scatter,” the Ambipom clones started to run around each other, till the point where no one knew who the real Ambipom out.

    “Thunderbolt Luxio,” Luxio kept firing lightning all around the clones, Ambipom managed to jumped from most of them; which made it hard since Alexa only managed to finish three of the clones.

    Evelyn just kept ordering random attacks that didn’t even hit Luxio; which really got Alexa confused; if she wasn’t taking it seriously then why fight at all. “Are you making fun of me, why are you fighting?” Alexa asked as she glared towards Evelyn, Evelyn just looked at her with an innocent smile.

    “What’s her plan, none of her attacks hit Luxio?” Henry asked as he followed the battle with his eyes trying to figure out what Evelyn was trying to do.

    “She is the daughter of a Pokémon Master, so she should have an ace under her sleeve,” Lucas grinned seriously as he stared at the smiling Evelyn. “And I think that’s what she’s doing right now.”

    “It’s time, Ambipom use Last Resort!” Evelyn threw her fist forward, both of Ambipom’s hands started glowing white as it charged towards Luxio. It thrusts its right fist; Luxio countered it with an Iron Tail so that the attack wouldn’t hit.

    “Now Luxio, use Spark, full energy!” Alexa yelled, Luxio spun in the end as it surrounded itself with electricity. It tackled Ambipom after it threw its left fist as the two started to push each other out. *I have to do it, if I ever want a chance with Ashian* Alexa thought thinking back at the first time the two meet in Orange City just after she had taken both Ashian and Henry to the hospital after finding them injured. “I’m not losing against anyone!”

    Luxio roared as it duck, it finished its tackle on Ambipom and made it lose its balance. Ambipom fell to the floor once its eyes opened up they were spinning in defeat.

    “Ambipom!” Evelyn yelled alarmed as she ran over to Ambipom and returned it. “Good job buddy,” she nodded as she put the pokéball back. “I guess you won again.”

    Alexa returned her Luxio as she looked at Evelyn. “Yeah,” she said with a serious tone.

    Evelyn walked over to her till she was right in front of her right ear. “I guess it won’t be easy to get Ashian now would it,” she whispered with a grin.

    “What do you want, really?” Alexa whispered back as the two kept their glares on each other.

    “I really can’t tell you that can I, but it’s in Cinnabar, so you’ll see.” She grinned and then turned back to Lucas, Henry and Ashian. “Well, let’s get going!” she got her smile back; Alexa’s glare never left her face.

    *Guess I’ll have my hands full too* she thought.

    ***

    “Well guys, time to get going,” Ashian looked ahead, the ship was finally departing and he just couldn’t wait to get to Cinnabar. “I’m getting my seventh badge, this is so cool,” he smiled in confidence.

    “Don’t forget,” Lucas walked over to Ashian as he leaned on the metal bars. “The Aura Sword’s in Cinnabar Island, you promised dad remember?” he asked as he turned to look at his little brother.

    “Yeah,” Ashian got a serious look as he stared at the sea. “Once I get that sword, everything will be over,” he nodded softly.

    Evelyn was sitting down on a box pretending to sleep; she opened her left eye for a second to see what Lucas and Ashian were doing. “Yeah Ashian, once you get that sword everything will be over.” She chuckled as she closed her eye again.

    END OF CHAPTER 45
    NEXT CHAPTER: FIERY PASSION
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    Default Re: Pokemon New Generation: New Beginnings ( PG-14) (Action, Drama, Comedy, Romance)

    Awwww, well ain't this a mushy chappie....

    Catfight and Alexa won! Cools.

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    With all the action going on I needed to post a break chapte, thanks for posting by the way.

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