Thread: Melody

Here is my fic all replies welcome!


Prologue




“Bye Ash,” a soft female voice exclaimed as she waved her long slender tan arms in the cool sea breeze.


“See ya Melody! Maybe we will meet up someday!” he waved back at her. He watched her slowly faint into the island as the boat rose the waves into the far distance.


A small clear tear drop fell from her eye as she watched him fade away into the ocean. The tear then fell onto her silky smooth blue dress as it swayed in the breeze. She then closed her eyes and thought about the time she had with him, Misty, and Tracy. Her sister Carol came up behind her and placed her warm hand on her shoulder. Melody looked back and seen her sister smiling. She then wiped the tear from her eye and turned around causing her sisters hand to fall back to Carol’s side.


“Do you miss him already? It was just…I don’t know. I know all of what just happened wasn’t supposed to happen but you have to let him go. You’re not supposed to like the trainer that comes her, it’s a tradition and not to be a dating game.” She said calmly to her depressed sister as the sun shined bright on them.


“I guess so, but I really want to get to know him better. You get what I am saying? There is just something about him and I want to find out what it is,” she sighed sadly as she pulled back her smooth, silky like brown hair which was blowing in the wind.


“I don’t know what to say really. But whatever you feel, I know you will make the right decision. You’re a smart girl, don’t mess up things and you should let it him go maybe. But it’s your choice I guess, I am only your sister and I bet mom would say do whatever your heart tells you to do. Now come on, let’s go get something for dinner,” she smiled as she went over and hugged her sister tight.



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The moon shined brightly over the clear dark tropical sky. Melody entered the small wooden hut and walked across the thick haw like floor. With the moon light from the outside peering in from the door, she walked over to the far side and grabbed a small box of matches. She used one and moved it over a lantern. Soon a glow of bright light filled the almost dark room. She walked over and sat on her blue flowered sheets and fell back.


“I wonder what Ash is doing right now,” she began to think; “I bet he is on another journey and doing something really exciting right now. I wonder if he does like Misty or maybe he just likes her as a friend…I hope.”


She slowly closed her eyes as she fell asleep with her mind racing with thoughts and feelings about Ash. Should she go and find him? Should she go and tell him how she feels? Or would calling him be better? But the only number she knew of was his home from his mother.


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“Ash!” Melody screamed with a passion. She ran towards him in the multi colored field of flowers. Sparkles of light spun around as she locked her arms around his body as she gripped on to his blue vest.


She took in a deep breathe and smelled him as she continued to hold him tightly. But soon her arms fell into her stomach as she fell back in the flowers. Ash was gone. As she fell, she didn’t stop. Soon everything was black and she continued to fall down a deep black vortex. Her faced turned pale and her lips quivered with fright.


“What’s going on? Where am I? What happened to Ash? SOMEBODY HELP ME!” she shouted in her mind. Her lips wouldn’t move. A strange force held them shut as she struggled to move them but they wouldn’t budge. She continued falling until her body smacked onto the black white floor.


She stood up and noticed everything was white. All she could see was an endless area of white. She called out help but all she heard was an echo, she knew she must be confined. She began to walk around the white room and soon walked into a wall. She fell back and soon she went through the floor.


Then a burst of colors surrounded her again and the faces of the ones she loved, cared, for, and befriended were all staring at her with a look of hate and misunderstanding in their eyes.


“WHAT IS GOING ON?!” she cried out but nothing she did was helping. Tears fell from her sad eyes and onto her blue dress. But with every drop on it, it turned a pale green. She quick wiped her eyes with confusion.



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“AH!” she screamed as her head flung up from her soft bed. She looked around and noticed the flame in her lantern was out and it was sunny in her room. She moved her head and noticed it was morning.


She moved off her bed and onto the floor. She looked under her bed and found the empty black nap sack. She grabbed it and tossed it onto her bed. She then walked on her knees over to her straw like dresser and grabbed her small pink cell phone, three pokeballs but only one of them contained a pokemon, her brush, and her wallet which had plenty of money. She shoved it all into the nap sack and then picked it up.


She then got back on her feet and walked over to her light brown wooden dresser and put the nap sack. She opened up the drawers and grabbed some cloths and then shoved them into the sack. She closed the drawers, tightened the top of the bag. She quickly undressed herself and slipped on a dark blue tank top and a pair of tight blue jeans. She slid on a pair of small blue tinted sun glasses and then pulled her long brown hair and tied it into a pony tail.


“Let’s go,” she said to herself. She then walked out of the room after writing a note to her sister who would be coming soon to check on her little sister.



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Dear Carol,


I decided to go and find him to tell him what I feel. I know this is stupid but I know deep inside there is something about him, really. Last night I had a strange dream and I don’t know what it meant but I am ignoring it. I do believe in fate and I feel this is meant to be. I brought my phone and I promise to call you when I get the chance. I plan on taking the boat out of here to Valencia Island. Just trust me; I know what I am doing. I love you and you’re the best. I hope you understand.


Love,
Melody


A tear rolled down Carol’s eye as she knew she wouldn’t be seeing her little sister for a while. She quickly wiped a way the tear and dropped the paper. She ran out the door and down the bumpy dirt path past all the tropical trees. She stopped and looked to see the boat at least half a mile away from shore. She knew sister was gone now.


She fell knee first onto the ground and put her hands over her face and began to cry. She knew her sister was too young to go out on her own but inside she knew she had to let her go eventually. She was mature for a fifteen year old and she could take care of herself. But her mouth was what Carol worried about the most. It always got her in trouble with the locals.



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The sun shined bright on Melody as she leaned against the cold white bar as she watched her home for years faint away into the ocean. Sprinkles of water splashed up and fell onto her gentle face. She knew she was doing the right thing and that everything would turn out for the good.

It's an interesting idea, but the writing needs some ironing. For instance...

She moved off her bed and onto the floor. She looked under her bed and found the empty black nap sack. She grabbed it and tossed it onto her bed. She then walked on her knees over to her straw like dresser and grabbed her small pink cell phone, three pokeballs but only one of them contained a pokemon, her brush, and her wallet which had plenty of money. She shoved it all into the nap sack and then picked it up.

Read it aloud and see how stilted it sounds. Every sentence in that paragraph starts with "She [verbed]", and it just doesn't work. But I do like the idea of Melody going out on a journey of her own...

Don't worry. I'm sure that Melody will be fine. But I do know that Melody will be delighted if see run into Ash again.