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    Table of Contents:

    One: Mandragora
    Two: Poison
    Three: Blackjack
    Four: Venific
    Five: Cerintha
    Six: Abessive
    Seven: Merle
    Eight: Rhombus
    Nine: Vacinium
    Ten: Modality
    Eleven: Penumbric
    Twelve: Jack Frost
    Thirteen: Paradox
    Fourteen: Incubus
    Fifteen: Velvet
    Sixteen: Endymion
    Seventeen: Volition
    Eighteen: Sable
    Ninteen: Adjunct
    Twenty: Comprehension
    Twenty-One: Monoclinous
    Twenty-Two: Specule
    Twenty-Three: Adime
    Twenty-Four: Seep
    Twenty-Five: Wormwood

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    Yet more Sakaki monologue.

    Mandragora

    You were like a mandragora. The only part of you that wasn't poisonous was your brain; but nobody knew that: they just thought all of you was corrupted. It snowed outside, because we were on holiday from lovely Tokiwa City. It wasn't raining no more, and there wasn't anyone outside bitching about the rain, because they were bitching about the snow, and how cold it happened to be.

    Your brain was the only part of your body that was uncorrupted.

    Mandragoric in every single way, but that wasn't even a word; people still applied it too you. An adjectival form of the noun, because it was describing you. Every part of your was corrupted except your fruits, and in so many ways that was true but at the same time wrong. The window was covered in snow, and we were high up in the mountains and people skid past our window.

    Your fruit wasn't poisonous, your mind, but in almost every way the fruits of your labour were corrupted. Than there were the things you created, the most ingenious designs that no one would have guessed that you would have created. We created them together, but no body knew that side of the story. I didn't mind, I suppose, because it was just normal for them to think so.

    Mandragora, they called you. Every time you looked in the mirror when you were naked you could see it. Your body was like the root of the plant, the mandragora, and your head was like the leaves. You had a single white flower, and your fruits were about you. You watched me in the mirror sometimes, and I watched you right back, but then the other times I never watched you, because you never watched me.

    Sometimes… sometimes…

    "You know?" I asked you.

    "What?" you replied.

    "You are the Mandragora…"

    And my voice was yours, and you frowned at me in the mirror.
    Last edited by Jude; 19th February 2003 at 05:02 AM.

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    that was good, but I would take out the second paragraph, it's just plain weird and has nothing to do with the rest of the fic...

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    I tend to agree with Blackjack. It really doesn't bring anything to the fic, so why keep it there? Chances are it will throw readers off...

    The rest of it, though, is quite good (albeit short)
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    <yawns and blinks> I'm awake!

    ...I think. I do, however, agree with both of you. I've removed the most part of that paragraph, but I've left the 'your brain was the only part of your body uncorrupted' or whatever line it is. II can't even remember myself, after doing it just a couple of seconds ago.

    <nods> Yet another foreay into the dark last night... at almost midnight. ^^;;

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    See, now it flows better.

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    Originally posted by Blackjack Gabbiani
    See, now it flows better.
    Thank you. :)

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    Poison

    People sat on the ski lifts, slowly trudging towards the top of the hill, but we didn't. We were sitting in the nice, warm café, and in front of us was a small computer. You were working on it, and the screen was about as large as your hand, and it folded over like a clam. I was watching you, because there were mirrors that reflected the light from the snow and made the café seem nice and homey.

    Nobody sat near us, and people watched us, but more out of curiosity than animosity. One of them was a small child, and he looked like he was about to rush across and ask for your autograph before you silenced his glances with a single stare. I could see it in the mirror, and it made me shiver inside; you looked evil, your eyes flashing, and your lips curled into an almost demonic smile.

    The child hid his face and didn't look at you again, not until we left the café. And then someone had sat down across from us: it was a smallish woman, with blonde hair and a black tulip in the buttonhole of her snowsuit. She was in black, as it seemed normal for her, and her face appeared grave. You quickly saved what you had been working on and looked up, and waited.

    "We’ve got problems," she said.

    "I'm on vacation," you drawled.

    She pouted, almost, and her lips curled up into a smile. "Uncle, don't," she chided, and then she was serious again. "This is bad, you know. A group calling themselves Team Mandragora has captured Musashi and Kojiro… and you know how my darling cousin happens to be when she's caught. It appears that Team Mandragora are renegades from our own group, and they've been setting up on our territory!"

    You weren't happy.

    "What should we do?" Domino asked.

    You took a deep breath. "Call in the elites, I'll be back in Tokiwa tonight."

    She nodded and was gone.
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    Not bad Toge. Not bad. I like the whole introspective view you take on all this; great insight. Only comment I have is to be careful with your phrasing. There were a couple of times where I caught myself saying "What?" and having to re-read. Of course, though, that could just be me. ^^;;;
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    <trills> RR!! And yes, the phrasing is very weird... it's... I wish that English hadn't dropped the dual-pronoun that Old English still has, because that really made a total tonne of sense. Anyway, Sakaki is MPD, so it's even worse, really, because I and You are the same person.

    I think Could've Seen The Rain was worse, however.

    <sweatdrops> <hugs>

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    Great update is all I have to say ^^;;.
    Quote Originally Posted by Mintaka and Hurristat
    He's an evil director / He'll give out infractions / Do something wrong / And he takes direct actions
    Then what'll he do?/ He'll permaban you / You find your name slashed / With a message, 'Adieu'
    Sooooo...watch out!
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    Yeah! Ooh, the plot thickens!

    but you say that Domino's in a snowsuit...wouldn't that hinder her speed and dexterity? Those are her two main strong suits, after all...

    *g* just something small

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    Brother dahling, thank you! <grins>

    Blacky, think Lara Croft in the end of the movie, <smile> only... slightly warmer, and black.

    Another part on the way later on today, ^^

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    .......OH! That's not a snowsuit, a snowsuit is what little kids wear....

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    It appears I am once more mistaken. Any names on what that was? I don't want to cause confusion... next part in the works.

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    Uh...a coat?

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