Just caught up with this and I have to say, it is still very good.
Please don't use any kind of formatting to separate the dreams/memories from the reality because I quite like the way they blend into one. The confusion really helps draw you into the story.
Like before though, I spotted a couple of pieces of tense confusion, I think there were three over chapters 3-5 but I only quoted 2 because I forgot the first one.
"doesn't" is present tense. It should be past tense - "didn't".Prinplup had a hard time keeping up with Noah, due to Noah having longer legs, and had to resort to running behind Noah, and he only hoped that Noah doesn’t start running, in which case Prinplup would fall behind and be forgotten about.
Same problem here. "has" should be "had" and "will" should be "would".Noah’s mother has proven many times that her advices always help, and every prediction she made came true. To Noah, she was flawless, the perfect mother. Her mother’s intuition couldn’t be wrong, and if she instructed Noah to go back, then he will