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    Hello, my lovlies, and welcome to

    If you've seen the musical, you'll know the story. And as you can tell, Misty is Elphaba, Dawn is Galinda/Glinda (I'm calling her Dalinda at first) and Ash is Fiyero. I don't own Pokemon or Wicked
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    In the land of Oz, a crowd of people were literally dancing and singing for joy.

    "Good neeeews!!!!
    She's deaaaad!!
    The Witch Of The West is dead!!
    The Wickedest Witch there ever was,
    the enemy of all of ther in Oz
    is deaaaad!!!!
    Good neeews!!
    Good neeeeeeeeews!!!!"


    Just then a man cried "Looook!!! It's Dawn!!" A bubble had appeared, and from it had imerged a beautiful young woman with long, shiny navy-blue hair, and navy-blue eyes. She was holding a super-large wand in one hand, and was waving with the other.

    "Fellow Ozians," She said in a high, clear voice.

    "Let us be glad.
    Let us be grateful.
    Let us rejoiceify that goodness could subdue
    the Wicked workings of
    You-Know-Who!
    Isn't it nice to know
    that Good will conquer Evil?
    The truth be all belive'll by and by
    outlive a lie
    for you and-"


    A man cut her off, singing

    "No-One Mourns The Wicked!"


    A woman added

    "No-one cries 'they won't return!'"

    "No-one lays a lily on their grave!"


    The crowd sang together. Then, many people sang their own parts

    "The good man scorns the wicked!"

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    Absolutely love the Broadway version of Wicked. Just throwing that out there.

    This is going to be interesting, I'm not going to lie. I'm curious to see how you plan to make Misty/Elphaba green, first of all, or some other physical thing that makes everyone hate her and is symbolically tied into the Emerald City (Pallet Town? xD) and wickedness in general. Plus, you call Dawn "Dawn", instead of "Dalinda," like you promised, and you reference Oz. Not always a bad thing though.

    Now to the bulk of what I'm addressing. First, I really wish that you didn't just put the lyrics in there and nothing else. While "No One Mourns the Wicked" is one of my favorite songs in the musical, it's just not the same when you type it out in lyrical format. Since we can't hear what's going on, you may as well just have people speaking. That's up to you, though.

    No matter what, though, you should add some description. Sure, it's a prologue/first chapter and those are usually supposed to be mysterious (not to mention the mood of the play), but a bit of description never hurts. Sure, Dawn/Dalinda just appeared. What do we know about her? She had shiny navy hair and eyes. Is she holding a wand? A Pokeball? A secret book imparted to her by her presumably dead friend, which is a small detail that practically no one notices at this stage? (in which case, you simply hide it by barraging the reader with countless other details so that s(he) eventually forgets about it until the book becomes key again...) We don't know, because you haven't told us. You can rarely have too much detail, so it's safe to say that describing everything, from how the singing people feel (although that is somewhat implied in their dialogue) to the iridescent bubbles that form as Dawn/Dalinda glides down from the skies. Go overboard, if you want, because you usually can't go wrong. Usually.

    Sure, I think I know what's going to happen (unless you do a super epic plot twist), but I don't really care.

    And just as a side note, if Misty does end up being green, it'll clash magnificently with her orange hair. :D

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    I'm sorry, I had to get off before I finsihed.
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    …And so-on and soforth. “Are people born Wicked?” Dawn asked. “Or do they have Wickedness thrust upon them?” She went on to tell them about The Witch’s parents, and her birth, speaking with vehemence and conviction. Later on a man called out, “Dawn! Is it true that you were her friend?!” The Good Witch smiled. “Well, it depends on what you mean by friend. I did know her. That is, our paths did cross. At school….”
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    Dalinda Jenness of the Upper Uplands had just arrived at Shiz University along with a huge amount of luggage. A few minutes later, a new girl burst through the door. Instantly, all eyes, which had ‘till then been on Dalinda –which pleased her- went to the newcomer. She was beautiful. Suprisingly so; with long orange hair and forest-green eyes. But everyone stared because the girl’s skin was green. (Only a few shades lighter than her eyes)

    “What is it? Do I have something stuck in my teeth?” She asked with sarcasm. “Oh, alright, let’s get this over with.” She dropped her suitcase. “No, I am not seasick. I have always been this color. I did not chew grass as a child.” A man came in, pushing another girl in a wheelchair –also very pretty, with light brown hair and baby-blue eyes- and the green one continued. “This is my younger sister, May, as you can see she is a perfectly normal color.”

    “Mistara!” The man hissed, grabbing her by the arm. “Stop making a spectacle of yourself!!” As Mistara rolled her eyes, the man knelt next to May’s chair with a box. “My precious little girl. A parting gift.” May looked embarrassed. “Father-“

    Out of the box, May lifted a pair of…… “Jeweled shoes!!” May gasped. May and Mistara’s father chuckled. He stood up, and said “Mistara……..” -The box shut loudly- “Take care of your sister.” He left. “Misty………” May began guiltily. “What could he get me?” Her sister replied. “I clash with everything.” Just then, an elderly woman swept in, proclaiming “Students, students!! I am Madame Agatha, Headmistress of Shiz University!” She saw May and gasped.

    “You must be the Governor’s daughter! Miss Maynabelle, is it?” May nodded shyly. Madame Agatha looked pleased. “What a tragically beautiful face you have! And who is-ah…” Misty didn’t seem at all upset. “I’m the other daughter, Mistara. I’m beautifully tragic.” Madame Agatha looked disturbed. “Yes, well I’m sure you’re very bright.”

    “Bright?” Repeated Dalinda, who was standing nearby. “She’s flosferecent!!” Everyone but the Headmistress and the sisters laughed.
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    I own nada. R&R!!!
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    Not bad. Not really my thing but it's good.

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    I love this idea! You guys are always coming up with really cool ideas and creative angles! I love it.

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    I own nothing but the idea to combine Pokemon and Wicked.
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    Madame Agatha looked at Misty, then at her list. “Well, Miss, you aren’t on the list for room assignments. Oh, we’ll find somewhere to put you; no need to worry.” Dalinda, who had tuned them out, muttered to a group to students “Ya know, I don’t think she even read my Sorcery essay!” Iris yelped “That’s so unfair!” An unusually tall Munchkin with green hair and eyes named Drew said, with the air of someone desperate to please “You should say something!!”

    Just then, Madame Agatha asked loudly “Who would like to room with Miss Mistara?” Dalinda, oblivious to the question, raised her hand. “Ah, thank you, dear! How very good of you!” The blunette looked confused. “What?” Madame Agatha was now the oblivious one, as she went one “Miss Mistara, you can share with this young lady.” Now Dalinda understood; and she quickly tried to change it. “Oh, Madame Agatha, I don’t think you understand! I’m Dalinda Jenness.”

    When the Headmistress just looked at her blankly, the high-society girl added “Of the Upper Uplands?” In a tone that added get a clue! Just then, Misty said “But Madame, how will I look after May?” Madame Agatha smiled. “Well, the Governor made his concern for your sister’s well-being quite clear. Miss Maynabelle will be staying in my quarters with me, so I can assist her.” She began to push May off, despite Misty’s protests. Then Misty yelled “LET HER GO!!” Everyone within five feet of May’s wheelchair was knocked away, and it spun back into Misty’s hands.

    “How did you do that?!” Madame Agatha asked breathlessly at the same time that an angry Dalinda demanded “How did she do that?!” May looked both embarrassed and livid as she hissed “Misty, you promised things would be different here!” The Headmistress gasped. “You mean this has happened before?” Misty blushed. Or at least it looked like she did, since her cheeks turned a darker shade of green than the rest of her. “Something just comes over me. Something I can’t explain or control. But I’ll really try to. I’m sorry, Ma’am.”

    “What?! Never apologize for talent!” Madame Agatha said. “Talent?” Misty repeated incredulously. The Headmistress smiled. “You simply must consider a career in Sorcery! I shall teach you and no other students!” Dalinda gave an outraged gasp that no-one noticed.

    Madame Agatha kept talking “Many years I have waited for a gift like yours to appear. Why, I predict The Wizard could make you his Magic Grand Vizier!!” Misty looked surprised. “Wait. The Wizard?” She checked. Madame Agatha chuckled, and put her arm around the green girl.

    “My dear, my dear! I’ll write at once to The Wizard. Tell him of you in advance. With a talent like yours, dear, there is a defin-ish if you work as you should, you’ll be making good.” Dalinda began to protest “Madame Agatha-“ Madame Agatha cut her off “Not now, Miss Dalinda, dear.”

    With that, she left. Dalinda, used to always being adored and slavered over by all she met, looked dazed. “Something strange just happened. I didn’t get my way! I need to lie down!” She left.
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    Wow, it didn't look nearly this long in Word! The Reply button needs love!
    Last edited by Elphie; 10th August 2010 at 10:14 AM.
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    =3 This is awesome. So so so so awesome.
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    Thinkies! I can't wait till Ashy-Boy makes an appearance.
    I don't care about IVs or EVs, or natures or anything. I catch my Pokemon the way they are, and I love them like that.

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    Disclaimer: I'm not that girl.......

    Anyhoo, Ash finally makes an appearance!! So Why are you still here? READ!!!!!!!!
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    About a week later, Misty was talking with Professor Rowan, a Goat who taught History. The Professor habitually called Dalinda “Dawn”, a source of grief for the bluenette, source of merriment for the green-skinned redhead. “Animals should be seen and not heard.” Misty muttered to herself, as if she could make the nasty message someone had written on Professor Rowan’s blackboard disappear.
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    A chariot was rolling up to Shiz. “Here we are, Sir.” A young man announced. “Already?” A groggy voice asked from inside the open-top ride. “Yes, Your Highness.” There was no response. “LOOK OUT!!” Someone yelled. The driver yanked the carriage to a stop. The almost-victim stood up and glared at the passenger. “Your driver almost ran me over, and you’re sleeping?!”

    The young man-who couldn’t see anything because he was wearing a sleepmask- spoke in a matter-of-fact tone “Of course. It’s daytime.” He raised the mask and very nearly shouted in surprise.

    The girl he nearly killed was green. And she did not seem to be happy. Or even know who he was, which was a shock to him. “Who’re you?” He managed to ask. “Mistara Waterflower.” The green girl said coldly. “Misty.”

    Misty had to admit, the boy was good-looking. Permanently tan skin, very messy black hair, and chocolate brown eyes. He also had a killer smile. If he didn’t seem extremely arrogant/shallow, and much too good-looking for someone like her, she might have found him truly attractive. He gave her the grin that had obviously got him many girls.

    “Nice to meet you, Misty. I’m Prince Ashton Ketchum; but you can call me Ash.” “Where the hell are you Prince of?” Misty hadn’t meant to say that. She blushed. Ash didn’t look upset by her rude question. “I………don’t really know.” He admitted. Misty suddenly walked away. As she went, Ash thought he heard her mutter “Something Wicked this way comes.”

    Before he could wonder what she meant, another pretty girl walked up to him, and asked flirtatiously “Were you looking for something? Or someone?” Ash personally found Misty both more attractive and engaging that this new girl, but pretended otherwise. “Uh, yeah. History class?” A green-eyed, grassheaded boy showed up next to the blue-haired girl. “It’s that way.” He said coldly. “But it just ended!”

    The girl piped up. “I’m Dalinda, by the way. Dalinda Jenness of the Upper Uplands. You’re Prince Ashton Ketchum, right?” Finally, somebody knows who I am!! Ash thought. “Yep. That’s me. So what’cha do around here for fun?” Dalinda looked puzzled. “Not much.” Ash gave a huge grin.

    “Well, it seems that the task of corrupting my fellow students once again falls to me. Fortunately, I’m up for the task.” Then he started singing:

    The trouble with schools is,
    they always try to teach the wrong lessons.
    Believe me,
    I’ve been kicked out of enough of them to know.
    They want you to become less callow, less
    Shallow.
    But I say, why invite stress in?
    Stop studying strife.
    And learn to life
    ‘the unexamined li-ife’…”


    He went on explaining his motto of “Dancing Through Life” to the others. They joined his song, the idea of a party exciting them. “So!” Ash said, jumping off the courtyard table he’d been standing on, and landing in front of Dalinda. “What’s the most swankified place in town?” “That would be the Ozdust Ballroom.” She replied, sounding eager to please. “Sounds perfect!” He told the students about his plan to have a party there. “M-Miss Dalinda?” Drew asked. “I hope you’ll save at least one dance for me. I’ll be right there, waiting, all night.”

    “Oh! That’s so kind.” Dalinda said. “But ya know what would be even kinder?” Before Drew could say ‘suckered’, he was unwillingly asking May to the party, and Dalinda was invited by Ash.
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    YAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    R&R!!
    Last edited by Elphie; 13th August 2010 at 08:58 AM.
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    Good chapter!
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    This is so awesome.
    Prince Ash lol :)

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    I like this i dea but i was wondering, have you read the book. Although this is obviously based predominantly on the musical, there are subtle references to the text that i can see.

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    Yes I've read the book, but what refrences do you mean, becaue I didn't put them there intenionally.
    I don't care about IVs or EVs, or natures or anything. I catch my Pokemon the way they are, and I love them like that.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Elphaba View Post
    Misty blushed. Or at least it looked like she did, since her cheeks turned a darker shade of green than the rest of her.
    thats the only thing that really stuck out to me. other than that i guess its just that your regurgitating the play (or at least a version of the play) back in writing form.

    I actually wanted to ask you, which did you like better, the play or the book?

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