@Legacy;: Ah, thanks a lot! That really means a lot to me, you know? It tells me I've improved a lot since the original draft of this fic. ^^
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@Legacy;: Ah, thanks a lot! That really means a lot to me, you know? It tells me I've improved a lot since the original draft of this fic. ^^
Great job!
Here you are--one review of Episode 1, at least (but will add in Episodes 2 and 3 on request)
First, as a fellow Mario fan, I have long wondered what it would have been like if Luigi went on an adventure all his own (the story he tells in Paper Mario 2 could itself be a game) That said, you do very well capturing the camaraderie between the Bros., Peach, and Yoshi (another "aw" moment was the reference to Super Mario World: Yoshi's Island)
I also loved Peach's (presumably many) ways to escape the castle--and I was very curious to know if Toad was freaking out about Peach being gone.
Overall, I'm intrigued as to how this heartwarming scene is going to be shattered once Bowser shows up (and if Bowser Jr. makes an appearance)
Ah, thanks a bunch, LT. :)
The early chapters of this fic are pretty old, so I was hoping they wouldn't be that bad compared to what I've written more recently. lol
And I think you'll be pleased with how chapter 2 plays out. ;)