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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (CHAPTER 11 POSTED)

    Thanks, Flame Battler! If you've read Rival's Story, you'll know where that comes from. I have to give credit for that idea to Gastly's Mama.

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (CHAPTER 11 POSTED)

    Quote Originally Posted by Lugion View Post
    Thanks, Flame Battler! If you've read Rival's Story, you'll know where that comes from. I have to give credit for that idea to Gastly's Mama.
    I was thinking about that! Couldn't help wondering, I got deja vu for a sec. Ahh, it's a great idea of Gama's.

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (CHAPTER 11 POSTED)

    Joseph huh? he seems like a nice guy and I bet he's the champion, I'm just guessing here XD

    Anyways, quite a lot of Isshu Pokemon introduced right?

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (CHAPTER 11 POSTED)

    Yes, actually. He has a normal name, dresses normally... Guess what type he uses! :P

    But just the two so far. Just Wargle and Zoroark.

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (CHAPTER 11 POSTED)

    That's why I guessed he was the champion both Wargle and Tauros are normal types.

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (CHAPTER 11 POSTED)

    Action packed chapter! I liked it. Joseph seems like a total B.A.

    Can't wait until the next chapter!

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (CHAPTER 11 POSTED)

    Thanks, RG! You sure didn't have to wait long!

    Chapter 12: Prepare to Set Sail!
    Steven's eyes fluttered open in the gentle sunlight streaming into the room from the window. Oldale Town's Pokémon Center, like any Center across the world, possessed a hostel on its second floor. However, because of Oldale Town's small size, the hostel was likewise tiny compared to that in Petalburg.

    He stretched his arms and rose from the mattress, which creaked slightly under his shifting weight.

    “Baltoy,” came a soft, somewhat irritated whisper. Steven looked over to his left to see Baltoy rising upward on top of Metang. Baltoy looked annoyed.

    “Me-tang!” Metang greeted, grinning widely and feigning obliviousness to its unwilling counterpart.

    “Metang, put Baltoy down,” Steven said.

    “Me?” Metang asked, continuing to pretend that it was unaware of Baltoy's presence.

    Steven leaned his head forward at an angle, giving Metang a look that prompted it to lower itself back to the floor, and allow Baltoy to disembark.

    “Bal!” Baltoy said, slapping Metang across the face with one of its long, slender arms.

    “Tang!” Metang laughed, only annoying Baltoy further.

    “Stop it, you two,” Steven said. “You'll wake everybody up.”

    “Too late!” Wallace called from across the room. He was dusting the air conditioning vents energetically. “You've slept in!”

    Steven reached down into his backpack from his bed, and fished out his watch. “10:13”.

    “What? Already? We've got to get going soon, if you're going to get to Mauville and I'm going to get back to Petalburg,” Steven said. He jumped out of bed, quickly showered and dressed, and then went down for breakfast.

    A nurse with long, curly blue hair was washing dishes behind the food counter. She had arrived overnight by a Tropius dispatched by the Pokémon League to fill in while Nurse Felicity was in Team Millennium's captivity.

    Steven bypassed the last remaining plate and grabbed a bowl, which he filled with cereal and drowned in milk. From one of the tables, Joseph beckoned to him. Steven took a seat adjacent to him, across from Joy. Next to Joy sat Christina, and at the end of the table next to Steven, Wallace had taken his seat.

    “Now that we're all here, we can discuss Team Millennium. It's obvious that they are very dangerous. I want you three to be very careful. Do not engage them unless there is no alternative,” Joseph said. “You guys might not be children anymore, but you're too young to be taking on men ruthless enough to shoot helpless old men, and I believe that's exactly what Set would've done had you not broken out, Steven.”

    “But what about my mom? Am I supposed to just stand by and let them do whatever they want with her?” Joy said.

    “The Pokémon League will handle the situation. I and the other Gym Leaders received orders earlier this morning by messenger Swellow to investigate and arrest suspected members. The incident yesterday sent a clear message to the League that these guys aren't just some idiots running around in cloaks and weird hats,” Christina said, clenching a gloved hand. “But we can't let the regular trainers get involved. We fear they may just end up as collateral damage.”

    “So you think we won't be able to stand up against them?” Steven said, unbelieving. “That's something my father would say!”

    “It's not that. We just don't want anybody possibly being hurt. It is the duty of the Pokémon League to ensure the protection of all trainers within each League's domain. Our secondary function is to test trainers and bestow badges on those who prove themselves worthy. But protection comes first,” Christina said.

    “The Elite Four are searching for Isis and Set right now. Whether there are any more leaders in Team Millennium is yet to be seen, but we'll find them,” Joseph said.

    “We won't just give up,” Steven said. “As long as there's evil in Hoenn, I'll be there to fight it.”

    “I as well,” Wallace declared.

    “Me, too,” Joy agreed.

    “I appreciate your enthusiasm and determination. That will see you through at Ever Grande City, I know it, Steven. But the fact is, the Gym Leaders and Elite Four aren't out to kill you. For all we know, these people are an entirely different story. We know how to handle dangerous trainers,” Joseph insisted. “The fact that you have the courage to stand up to these people is admirable, but you have to leave this to us.”

    “I can't,” Steven said.

    “Then I have to alert your father that you're here,” Christina said.

    “What?! You can't do that!” Steven said. “I'll be grounded for years! Joseph, tell her. Tell her how I held off Set!”

    Joseph shook his head. “Better grounded than dead.”

    “I can't believe this! I can't go back now! I've come so far!” Steven protested. “I have to get to Dewford Town to challenge Silva!”

    “Dewford? I know someone who can get you there. But you have to promise to avoid Team Millennium at all costs,” Joseph said.

    “I can't just let them get away with harming those Pokémon in the Petalburg Woods. I can't let them get away with kidnapping Joy's mother and attacking Littleroot Town!” Steven said.

    “Then I won't tell you. You'll be stuck here,” Joseph said.

    “Wallace can take me, anyway,” Steven countered.

    “Wallace's escort to Mauville is one of his mentor Juan's Pokémon. It won't obey him,” Joseph said.

    “Well, I can fly on Metang!”

    “Metang can't carry you that far,” Joseph said. “Not until it's a Metagross.”

    “Then I'll evolve Metang! I'll train it until it evolves!” Steven said.

    “That will take months. With any luck, we'll have Team Millennium in jail by then,” Christina said.

    “Oh...” Steven said, defeated.

    “Now do you promise not to interfere with this battle?” Joseph asked.

    “Yeah...” Steven said half-heartedly.

    “Okay. I can take you as far as the Route 104 coast. Past that, you'll be sailing with a friend of mine,” Joseph said. “I'd fly you there myself, but I have to get back to Ever Grande to report to the League Administrator.”

    Steven nodded. “Okay.”

    Joseph straightened himself in his chair. “Then we should get moving. Joy, you stay here in Oldale. I'll tell you if I hear anything about your mother.”

    Joy nodded, apparently feeling as defeated as Steven. “Okay...”

    “Wallace, you go straight to Mauville once you get across to Route 110. Take the lower route of Cycling Road. It's slower, but Team Millennium might be watching the upper route,” Joseph instructed.

    Wallace nodded. “Right.”

    “If you feel like you're being watched or followed, leave the path and Surf the rest of the way. Wattson will be waiting for you to take you the rest of the way to Verdanturf.”

    “Okay. I'll head back to Petalburg, but I'll leave one of my Gym Trainers here to keep an eye on the town,” Christina said, standing up from her chair. She pushed the seat back under the table, shook hands with Joseph, Steven, and Wallace, and patted Joy on the shoulder.

    “We'll find your mother soon. I promise,” she said. After everyone had said their good-byes, she turned and left the Pokémon Center.

    “I guess we should be leaving, too,” Joseph said, standing up as well.

    Steven looked down at his bowl of cereal, which had barely been touched. He didn't feel like eating. He just wanted to hurry up and get to Dewford. He stood and took his half-full bowl to the substitute nurse, who emptied it into a garbage disposal and began scrubbing it clean. He quickly ran upstairs to gather his backpack and Pokémon, who followed him down into the main lobby.

    Joy had taken her position behind the main counter next to the healing machine and Joseph and Wallace were waiting in the lobby.

    “Ready to go?” Joseph asked.

    “Yeah,” Steven said. He waved good-bye to Joy, who returned the gesture, and then followed the two others outside.

    “Steven, keep your Metang inside its Poké Ball,” Joseph instructed as the glass double-doors shut behind them. “It could attract unwanted attention.”

    Steven nodded and returned Metang. Joseph led them north around the Pokémon Center, past several houses, and onto Route 103.

    Several ledges thwarted any straight-forward path, but this side of the route was relatively short. A group of Zigzagoon watched curiously from the safety of the thick trees. A flock of Wingull soared high above. A small inlet of the ocean slapped against the shore serenely.

    The water welled up at one spot near the shore, and a large light blue Pokémon resembling a seahorse broke through the otherwise crystalline surface.

    “There's your ride, Wallace,” Joseph said, leading Steven and Wallace through a patch of waist-high grass toward the shore.

    “Yeah. That's my master's Kingdra,” Wallace said, sounding almost reluctant. He turned and faced Steven, and held out his hand. Steven shook it firmly and placed his other hand on Wallace's shoulder. Wallace returned the gesture.

    “I guess this is good-bye,” Steven said.

    Wallace sighed. “Yeah...”

    “See you around?” Steven asked.

    “You know it,” Wallace said. “And when you arrive in Sootopolis to take on my master, I'll be there to watch.”

    “I'm holding you to that,” Steven said.

    “All right, Wallace. Time to go,” Joseph said. He glanced around himself, seeming almost nervous.

    “Okay,” Wallace said. He turned and stepped to the edge of the waterline, and Kingdra pushed itself closer with its tail. Wallace climbed onto the Kingdra's shoulders, wrapping his arms around its backward-swept horns.

    He twisted around, keeping his right hand's grip and waving with his left. “Bye!” Kingdra began moving steadily forward through the water, toward the opposite bank some distance away.

    Steven waved back. “Bye!”

    Wallace continued on for a while before Steven finally turned to Joseph.

    “Ready to go?” Joseph asked.

    Steven nodded. “Yeah.”

    “All right then. Come on out, Dodrio!” Joseph said, tossing a Poké Ball to the ground, releasing a tall, thin Pokémon with two thin yellow bird-legs, three red feathers for a tail, three round heads covered in fluffy brown feathers and adorned with a black v-shaped crests and thin yellow beaks, long, slender, light-brown necks, and a round body also covered in brown feathers.

    Joseph swung one leg up and over Dodrio's back, and reached for Steven, who he pulled up in front of him. Steven, holding Baltoy in front of him, craned his neck and asked, “Why aren't we flying on Wargle? Wouldn't that be faster?”

    Joseph chuckled. “Oh, we're flying, all right. But Wargle, being such an exotic Pokémon, might attract attention like your Metang. I decided we'd use something you can find in Hoenn.” He cleared his throat.

    “Hold on to Baltoy, Steven! All right, Dodrio, let's use Fly! To Captain Briney's house!”

    Steven's eyes widened with fright at the idea of sailing through the air on a flightless bird. How exactly could Dodrio fly, again? Steven's thoughts were interrupted as Dodrio's knees bent and then extended with the Pokémon's full might. The forest, the grass, the water, the ground... everything fell away beneath them. Steven and Baltoy both screamed.

    Steven held tightly to Dodrio's middle neck and Baltoy. His hair waved violently in the wind, and he saw the earth moving beneath him. Dodrio's shadow moved west over dense forest. To the south, Steven could see the entirety of Route 102. It was oddly peaceful, so high in the air. The trees beneath passed as if they were a herd of Torterra given the speed of a Sceptile. Now Petalburg City was passing to the south. Steven could just make out Christina returning to the city. Ahead, Steven spotted the cottage.

    Dodrio began to lose altitude. The ground rushed up to meet them. Dodrio landed nimbly and surely in front of the cottage. Joseph leapt comfortably from his mount, and helped a shaky-legged Steven, carrying Baltoy in his arms, to the ground. Steven collapsed to his knees, heart pulsing rapidly and hyperventilating.

    Joseph rapped on the door with his knuckles. Moments later, a middle-aged man with balding gray hair answered the door, a white-feathered Wingull on his shoulder.

    “Captain?” Joseph said.

    “Joseph!” the jolly old man said. “Come in, come in! How are you? Oh, and who's your friend there?”

    “His name's Steven, and he's taking the Gym Challenge. I'd stay for a while, but I have official league business to attend to,” Joseph said. Briney's eyes widened knowingly and he nodded his head.

    “I need you to take him to Dewford. I'd do it, but like I said, business.”

    Briney nodded. He turned back into the house. “STERN! WE'RE LEAVING!”

    Joseph remounted Dodrio and fired back off into the sky.

    A boy who looked a few years older than Steven appeared next to Captain Briney and the two left the house, Briney locking the door behind him.

    Steven felt Briney's hand on his shoulder. “Some people never get used to flying on a Dodrio,” he said, and then laughed heartily. “Come on, lad, we're setting sail.”

    Steven nodded, and clambered unsteadily back to his feet. The energetic Briney had already boarded his shiny new boat, the same Steven had seen a few days before while rushing Baltoy to the Pokémon Center in Petalburg City. Baltoy spun dizzily when Steven set him back on the ground.

    The young Stern immediately followed Briney, who beckoned to Steven. “Let's get going! Set sail for Dewford Town!” he bellowed excitedly.

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    And that's a wrap! That's the end of the second arc. To put it in perspective, Stainless Steel is now over 50 pages long! I can hardly believe how popular it's become in the two months since I began writing it! Please, feel free to leave a post detailing how you liked the chapter.

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (Updated with CHAPTER 12)

    Well, it was excellent! Steven is new to the game, but I honestly doubt he'll make good on the promise to not get involved. WHat I love is that I don't have to say anything about about grammar when reviewing your story! Not a problem!
    I enjoyed your description of Dodrio flying, that's been a mystery to me too.
    Overall, exceptional.

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (Updated with CHAPTER 12)

    Thanks, haha. The most common explanation for Dodrio using Fly is that Fly can actually translate to "Sky Jump", and, well, it just fell into place.

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (Updated with CHAPTER 12)

    Nice chapter. Good development between Steven and Wallace.

    And was Wallace doing chores back at the Pokemon Center?

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (Updated with CHAPTER 12)

    Quote Originally Posted by RaccoonGoon View Post
    Nice chapter. Good development between Steven and Wallace.

    And was Wallace doing chores back at the Pokemon Center?
    Thanks.

    No, Wallace was just being his prim and proper self. XD

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (Updated with CHAPTER 12)

    Nice chapter. The intense parts are over and now its back to peaceful gym battling. Am I to expect a continuous change of pace throught the entire story? If so, then goody. lol

    Also, I really liked how you described the flight with Dodrio. I could clearly imagine it.

    Also, I like how you use high literary words in place of regular dull ones for certain sentences. Like Steven "drowning" his cereal in milk, or the waves "slapping" onto the shore. It makes for some very nice imagery sometimes (I should use that technique more often).
    I am an unabashed Gen III fan.

    My fic: Adventures in Hoenn Read it if you'd like. I could use some criticism. Chapters tend to be a bit long, though...

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (Updated with CHAPTER 12)

    Thanks, Staulmaster! You can definitely expect a fluctuating pace for the rest of the story.

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (Updated with CHAPTER 12)

    It seemed more like a break chapter though it seems Steven is finally start off traveling alone now that Wallace is gone, and it was good to see Briney and Stern, though I thought he'll have a brown beard or something.

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    Default Re: Stainless Steel: Steven Stone's Adventures in Hoenn (Updated with CHAPTER 12)

    Things are gonna slow down for a little bit. You'll see a little bit of Team Millennium soon, but they won't appear with quite such presence for a while.

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