All right, I've caught up on your update now. As not to beat a dead horse and repeat earlier reader comments, I'll simply agree with the previous members in that it was a good update. Some small grammar mistakes, yes, but everyone has been known to do it. Your take on his family did seem a bit ... off, though. It didn't scream "pity me", but it was pretty close. The main problem was that you seemed to be telling, not showing, the dysfunctional side of his family.