Never fear Flaze is here!
That was a stupid introduction phrase -w- but anyways, I finally managed to read all two chapters, and I feel bad for taking so long in all honesty xD
Anyways on to the review. As I've said before it's not usual that you see a fic based on Pokemon Special especially a sequel, this fic brought me back simply because my first fic was also a sequel fic but to the anime, but enough about that.
First I'll ask if you're included the FRLG part in the fic? considering no one mentioned Team Rocket's involvement in the Sevvi Island and the attack on Vermilion but I'll let that slide because you told me before that you read the translations as they come out.
I liked the first chapter, I think it was a pretty good introduction to the characters, I disagree with Instrutilus on one thing. I for one thought that the first chapter had a good amount of description while also leaving things for the reader to imagine, it's always good to allow the reader's imagination to take a part in things at times.
The plot is pretty fresh, I liked Lydia because of how naive and silly she is but she's also very likeable and I'm really curious as to why her father doesn't want to let her travel on her own. The thing that shocked me the most about this chapter was Green's personality, I wouldn't expect him to be so caring I guess xD maybe a little bit of a softie cause she's his niece but I never expected him to act so cheerfully, but that's just me.
Aiden was also another shock for me, however I think that the revelation of him being part of Team Rocket was a bit...quick, I mean that we didn't get too many hints about it and it was just mentioned in one go so while I was surprised I was also a bit confused because of how sudden it had been.
I can see a lot of things that'll become important later on, including Aiden and Lydia's feelings, though I had already pretty much guessed that one by myself, don't make her too oblivious to his feelings though.
That's all I have to say so far, it's still at the start so there's not much to comment on regarding the story, like I said before I'll pass on thinking of things that happen in the FRLG and HGSS chapters of the manga cause I know that the former you probably haven't read and the latter is one that even I haven't read xD
Otherwise I think you're doing pretty good for someone that's started out, just make sure to keep it up and become better.