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    Default Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Yellow Rescue Team(PG)

    Info: About a boy named Mathew who was going for his trainer's license and first pokemon. He gets turned into a pokemon magical. Mathew does't remember how or why he turned into a pokemon. He meets his favorite pokemon, a Treecko and together they form a Rescue Team. This story is based on the first versions Red Rescue Team and Blue Rescue Team. Later on I will write a fic on the newer versions. This is a Game Based story.

    Dicaimler: I don't own pokemon or related characters. I do own Mathew though.

    Also even though I'm a girl, I decided for once to write a fic about a male OC.



    Prologue: How Did I Become A Pikachu


    One day, a young boy named Mathew was heading to Professor Oak's lab to become a pokemon trainer. "Today's my tenth birthday, hmm I think maybe I'll get a Bulbasaur or a Squirtle. Too bad I don't live in Hoenn I could get a Treecko. He's my favorite all time pokemon." Mathew thought all about Treecko as he skipped down the road.

    He was almost at the Professor's house when he ran into a Gardevoir that was being beat up by a Ninetales. It's trainer wasn't doing anything to help it at all.

    Just then Ninetales jumped at the Gardevoir's trainer, with intent to kill. "Watch out!" Mathew screamed. There was a bright light, as the trainer's Gardevoir jumped in the way taking the hit. It gave a cry as it died. Mathew hung back and cried. The trainer then just ran away like a coward, not even showing any emotion or regrat that his pokemon was dead.

    The Ninetales was mad,"How dare you run away and leave your pokemon, even if it is dead. For that I will punish you. You shell live as a pokemon until you can change your ways." With that there was a bright light. Mathew was sucked up into it along with the trainer. Then everything went black.

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    "Hello..." said a voice.

    Mathew's vision started becoming clear as he heard the voice again,"Hello, are you alright." As Mathew's vision became clear all the way he saw a Treecko standing over him. But there was something not quite right here, why was this pokemon the same height as him.

    "Looks like you fannially came to. I'm Treecko nice to meet you," said Treecko smiling. Mathew was shocked,"What! You can talk! But your a pokemon, aren't you?" Mathew said, his eyes were like this: :shocked:

    "Soooo, your a pokemon and you can talk. What's your name?" Treecko pointed out.

    "I'm Mathew. But....I'm a human," he told Treecko. Treecko was shocked,"What! Human. Your a human? That's impossible you look like a Pikachu in every way." Mathew went and looked at himself in the lake,"It....it's true! I have become a Pikachu!" Mathew fell over anime style.

    "Hey get a hold of yourself. I believe you." Treecko asured Mathew.

    Just then a Butterfree fell up,"Help! I need help!"

    "What's wrong Betterfree?" Treecko asked." It....it's my baby Caterpie. It fell into gorge and when I tried to go get it out I was attacked by pokemon." Betterfree explained.

    "What! You were attacked!" Treecko panicked. "Yes, and my little baby's too little to climb out on his own," said Butterfree. Treecko turned to Mathew,"We must help this pokemon. What do you think Mathew?"

    Mathew felt sorry for Butterfree so he agreed. Butterfree led them to the place where Caterpie fell in,"He's somewhere in there," she explained,"Ok, don't worry we'll bring Caterpie back safely," Mathew asured her. "Be careful!" Butterfree called out as Mathew and Treecko entered the gorge.


    To be Continued..........
    Last edited by Konekodemon; 6th January 2009 at 04:13 PM.

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    With the exception of the main character being from Pallet, and seeing Gardevoir take the attack, this reads pretty much like every other Mystery Dungeon fic out there.

    Also, the spelling is pretty bad. "Assured", "all right", "finally"...and were you intentionally spelling Matthew with only one t?

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    yes, I thought that was the way it was supposed to be spelled, thanks for the advice, sorry if it sounds to much like the game it's supposed to as this is supposed to be a Special Edition version of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon Red and Blue, not a fan thing, it's supposed to be a book

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    If it's a novelization, it can't be an original story, which is what you say at the beginning.

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    well, I don't understand any of this stuff, I didn't know what to list it as, and I didn't understand the info given on the rules thread, about this being this type of fic and so on

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    The rules are going to be updated soon because frankly most of them are things that no one did and were rather needless. But for now it's good you were looking.

    I'd say "game-based" over anything else though.

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