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    So I haven't quite caught up yet, but I thought I'd give you a quick, general review of how I feel about it so far.

    I'm honestly not even just being nice when I say that I've already noticed a pretty big difference in the quality of your writing. Don't get me wrong, the first Academy fic was good, but your style of writing was a little iffy and sketchy in places, particularly at the start. I'm not saying this is perfect, but you've clearly become a much better writer; you've really taken people's advice to heart, and I really respect you for that.

    Character's seem to be more nicely written too, you've taken away some of the generic-ness, and the dialogue flows much more smoothly too.

    I don't think I've read far enough yet to make a real comment about the plot or atmosphere, but so far I like it; it's genuinely enjoyable to read.

    Keep up the good work, I'll try and catch up ASAP!
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    I'm glad you like it so far and yeah I know that the flow seems to have gotten better xD I guess that's mostly cause I've gotten used to the characters more and know how they react to each other. I think what Jinoga said before was right I focused too much on Reggie in the last fic that I didn't have time to work on how the characters reacted to each other.

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    RAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWR

    What can I say, I was glued to my seat with this chapter. It all seemed to flow so well that I imagined it happening in front of me, to the point that the ending left me annoyed. Now I have to wait to find out what happens D: Excellent use of a cliff hanger :P

    Not to mention the atmosphere you gave Fin towards the end, he honestly scares me more than the Black Knights now xD

    I am also looking forwards to seeing the plot thicken even more as time goes on.

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    Nice, a field trip to Unova.

    This was an interisting chapter. (Unconscious Chigon XD)

    I think those knights are from Knight Academie. The question is... why? Why did the take Skyla? And Fin was acting very weird. Even if it would be becouse she was prety or a gym leader that was not how he usually reacts. Maby he knew her from when he was younger...

    Whoo, it's a Pigeot. It's my favourite bird. It was about time Reggie gets better pokemon so he is equal with his friends. Lets get an Infernape!

    I'm interrested to read more of this story. I'm finally seeing some sort of plot here.

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    Well there's a whole different level when it comes to Fin's character xD he's a lot more serious than he lets on as for his relationship with Skyla...well that's a little different to what most people think.

    And yeah originally the fight against Schwarz was going to be with Alagon but I decided that it was about time for Pidgeotto to evolve.

    Anyway I hope you guys keep reading and that I can keep posting too xD

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    This was a really good chapter.

    At first I was just like "Field trip to Unova... I don't know..."
    But It turned out really good!

    What Stacy said on the Airplane made me laugh.

    AND OH. MY. GOSH.
    BAD ASS FIN WAS EPIC!
    Like when he was just like "...die..." I got goosebumps! It was awesome
    I really like how your adding more depth into your characters personalities, It makes them more real!

    And your getting a lot better with battle description.

    There was a few grammatical errors but nothing major.
    Really well done!
    And looking forward to the next.


    OH and I like how you added a villainous group that wasn't team Plasma!
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    Well it couldn't be Team Plasma since this fic takes place years after the events of BW, that's something that will be mentioned in the next chapter so stay tuned!

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    Once again, I find myself enjoying reading your fic. Things are definently getting more interesting with the Black Knights appearing (I'm going to mark the next bit in spoilers in case someone hasn't read your previous fic),
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    Well that's not something I can answered truthfully but...we'll see.

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    Default Re: Pokemon Academy Year II: Second Year Rhapsody

    Love reading this as much as Dragons Roar, gets better and better each time :D

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    Default Re: Pokemon Academy Year II: Second Year Rhapsody

    Definitely a great chapter.

    I always liked the medieval themes so having actual knights instead of wannabe knights from Team Plasma was good. I'm wondering why Fin worries so much about Skyla? Do they know each other or what? Heh, looking forward to the next chapter. :D

    Oh, and Skyla will definitely have to give some to either Reggie or Fin. You know what I mean. :P

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    I don't think it'll be appropriate xD but it can be implied however something that I can safely say is that she leans more towards Fin.

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    Nice, finally Pidgeotto finally evolved. Hey, is Reggie going to be the strongest out of the gang? I mean, in the end, at least.

    Anway, I liked the fighting scenes, those were probably the best part of the entire chapter. Not to mention that Fin is secretly psycotic. Yeesh...

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    Default Re: Pokemon Academy Year II: Second Year Rhapsody

    Well being trained in a family that specializes in dragons and being a strong trainer in general can have a pretty big impact on a guy xD

    Reggie being the strongest?....no I don't think so I guess I don't really want Reggie to be the strongest to begin with it would just make everything else predictable.

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    Yay! more fight scenes! and Fin still has the killer instinct, With an appearance from Garchomp! and as for Reggie, I have a feeling Pidgeot's speed will be a factor reaching Skyla and Chigon.
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