5th October 2006, 02:35 AM #1
v Gone D/P :o
(ORIGINAL, PG-13 to R) The Quest for the Legends (version IALCOTN)
Another day, another new revision... :D
Nah, but seriously. It's here again. Quite a bit different from the last version that was posted here, too. Whee?
Since I'm already five chapters into this version, I'll post like one a day until I've caught up.
Oh, by the way, the prologue is technically now the APO (Another Pointless One) version, because I changed it a little, but I'm still calling it the IALCOTN anyway.
Two shiny sapphire-blue eyes open weakly, reflecting the eerily orange clouds high above. A roar of thunder sounds with a bright flash of lightning.
…What is this place?
The eyes blink slowly. Two small paws feel the damp soil and are raised into the owner’s line of vision. Their fine pale pink fur is stained with red.
Another couple of blinks. The pupils move quickly from side to side for a second before the creature shakily rises onto its large hind legs. It examines itself with a puzzled look on its simple face.
Why… where does all this blood…
Slowly, fearfully, the creature looks up.
It sees death.
Humans and Pokémon alike lie sprawled on the ground, some mutilated, some whole, but all dead or dying. Mothers clutch their children in their arms. Abandoned houses burn in the background.
Blood, so much blood…
Next to the creature lies a large, somewhat humanoid Pokémon, its leathery gray skin bruised and its powerful violet tail torn and slashed. The creature looks sadly at the stab wound through the Pokémon’s heart and then up to its limp, catlike head. A blank expression crosses its face as it observes the facial features.
All of a sudden, the creature’s triangular ears perk up as its eyes scan the area carefully. Now ignoring the horror all around, it locks its gaze onto a spot close by. It takes silent, wingless flight, using its thin tail for balance.
The creature comes to a slow halt when it arrives next to the remains of a black pardus-like Pokémon’s head. Wavy markings and spikes on its sides glow with a bright alien green color through the crust of dried blood. Its right eye has been torn apart while the left is missing altogether.
The green glow of the head’s markings gradually fades into a sapphire blue color matching with the pink creature’s now tear-filled eyes.
Is this… is it my work?
The lifeless town knows no answer.
Last edited by Dragonfree; 5th October 2006 at 07:18 PM.
11th October 2006, 03:16 AM #2
Not bad, but I'm having a hard time trying to figure out what pokemon you are talking about.
21st October 2006, 10:52 AM #3
v Gone D/P :o
You're not meant to know. Just make note of this for later.
Now, time for the very-much-unlike-the-prologue first chapter.
Chapter 1: Ultimatum
The gentle breeze swayed the branches outside. The sunny, green streets of Sailance couldn’t possibly have looked more tempting. Well, maybe if there had been a stray Taillow singing in a tree there somewhere. Or a Rattata darting behind that dustbin.
“Mark Greenlet, will you please answer my question?”
The dark-haired boy quickly turned his head away from the window, a blank look on his pale face.
“Er… I’m sorry?”
The woman sighed, scribbling something into her notebook. Probably something negative about his lack of attention in class if he knew her correctly.
She observed him over her half-circle glasses, her mouth forming into a frown. “I asked you to explain what defines recoil attacks.”
Mark looked up at her with a pained expression of disinterest. “I have no clue, okay?”
The teacher sighed again. “You seem to fail to answer even the simplest of questions, Mr. Greenlet.”
“Don’t speak to me like that, or I’ll give you detention.”
Go ahead, Mark thought, rolling his eyes. Do it. See if I care. That threat kinda loses impact after the first five hundred times.
“Now stop drawing your Fearow and start paying some attention.”
“It’s a Lugia,” Mark corrected in a mutter, covering the smudged drawing on his desk protectively with his hand. A warning alarm sounded in his head. Don’t lose yourself again… school is almost over… Mrs. Grodski is just a grumpy old witch with nothing better to do than hating you…
The bell rang at just the right moment. He hurriedly started returning his unopened books to the battered schoolbag that hung on the back of his chair.
“Mr. Greenlet,” the teacher said, “I would like you to remain here.”
Mark sank back into his chair. He silently placed his drawing inside his thick binder and sighed deeply as he packed it down and forced back the zipper on his stuffed bag. Through the glass in the window, he could see that the wind was growing nastier.
“So,” said Mrs. Grodski, closing the door after the last student left, “what do you have to say for yourself, Mr. Greenlet?”
Mark opened his mouth unsurely, not sure if he’d be better off just keeping quiet, but decided to fire away.
“Why do I even need battling class?” he blurted out. “I’m not being let out on a Pokémon journey. There aren’t even any Pokémon around this stupid city.”
“Have you ever considered,” said the woman, narrowing her eyes, “that perhaps failing the class last year played a part in your parents’ decision?”
“They decided it months before the tests!” Mark protested, his face reddening slightly. Mrs. Grodski just loved to bring up his three from the finals last year; it was one of the many reasons he hated her.
“Oh, don’t try to fool yourself,” she said calmly, sitting down at the teacher’s desk. “The tests aren’t the only part. All you’ve done in my class since you first started it is doodling on the back of your papers and being an idiot. Your parents have known that since the first time I talked to them about you.”
“They… they said it was because it was too dangerous,” he said uncertainly, fearing that he might be losing the argument. Outside, the shadow of a cloud drifted past the sun. He was missing the nice weather, all because of one stupid teacher.
“As clearly ignorant as you are, I wouldn’t trust you to go on a Pokémon journey without getting yourself killed either,” she said in a silky voice, a thin smile on her lips.
Mark’s face turned beet red as he clenched his fist. “I get good grades in Pokémon speech,” he countered. “And art.”
“I never approved of Pokémon speech as a school subject,” Mrs. Grodski said. “They weren’t teaching that back when I was at school, and I did fine as a trainer without trying to assign a meaning to all those Pika Pikas.”
Mark folded his arms and leaned back in his chair. He liked Pokémon speech; Mr. Flintlake’s Vulpix was usually a great deal more interesting to talk to than any human person he had met. Apart from his best friend Alex, of course, but he had left on his journey last year.
“As for art,” the teacher continued when Mark didn’t say anything, “drawing will hardly help you on a Pokémon journey, will it?” She gave him another thin smile. Mark just sighed.
“Now, what did your parents tell you last time?” Mrs. Grodski said, leaning forward and looking at him with her stinging blue eyes.
“That I’d have to take class with fifth graders again if I didn’t pass this time,” Mark mumbled.
“Exactly,” she said, examining the blood red nail polish on her long fingernails. “I suggest you start putting some effort into your studying now, and I might actually change my mind about your IQ. You can leave now if you promise me that.”
“I promise,” Mark muttered.
“Good,” Mrs. Grodski said with a poisonous smile. “You may go.”
Mark stood up, slung the schoolbag over his shoulder and left the room without saying a word. Outside, the sky was slowly becoming gray and gloomy, matching his mood.
By the time he reached his house, it was starting to rain.