I promised you a review, and I'm trying not to break promises or deals these days. :3
As you know, I've enjoyed reading it, building a story for Jiri with what you had and your creative licence. I'm still drawing myself back to how you pulled off what made Jiri start Collecting in the first place, and tying it to a lot of things that're already beginning to shape him. I like those kinds of intertwined threads a lot.
Just one piece I think is missing a bit; it's near the end of chapter 7: "For the time, that was good enough for me. I later found out, but that is neither here nor there for the continuation of my tale."
=X It's not a very complete sentence, if you know what I mean. I wanna know what that thought was leading to!