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    Default No Region For Old Men (RG/UP collaboration)

    Today, a most unholy of team-ups was created. RaccoonGoon and myself have teamed up to write a collaborative piece of Pokémon fan fiction. Enjoy!

    (An important side note, while the two characters in this fic have a 7 year age difference between them in official canon, we are choosing to ignore that for the sake of readability and fun. Once more, enjoy!)



    And there is Chapter 1! Like, comment, review, whatever! Just give us feedback!
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    No Region For Old Men
    Chapter 2
    By RaccoonGoon




    Chapter 2, brought to you courtesy of RaccoonGoon!

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    Default Re: No Region For Old Men (RG/UP collaboration)

    Hmm. I'm not entirely sure what to say.

    You handled your characters pretty well, but some of the dialogue could've used revising. It seems like you two couldn't decide what kind of dialect to go with when it came to the Rowans. They seemed partly British and partly Old Westerners.

    Speaking of the Old West, this story felt very "Old West", what with the traveling salesman angle and all. But at the same time, you have very recent and modern inventions, like hamburgers, neon lights, refrigerators, and (presumably) Poké Balls.

    But I'm still waiting to see where you're going with this.

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    No Region For Old Men
    Chapter 3
    By Ultra Pidgeot




    There it is. Be sure to comment!!!

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