Got to agree with the last sentence.
A clerical error. To start off:
Some stuff like that. I think you may also have been missing a comma or two, but that's OK.way to win a battle.”
This is OK, but I'd advise you to watch out for long references like that. It's very near the mark of sidetracked, so just keep an eye out.“Twineedle, let’s see what that does.” Leaf mumbled. The wind had begun to pick up, and Leaf’s long hair began to billow in the breeze: combined with the long dress she was wearing, Kris couldn’t help but think of an action movie heroine that was about to kill her next target. And Beedrill’s new move represented this: he touched his two stingers together and dived forwards like a bullet. They turned lime green, looking just as poisonous as the last attack.
Chapter was good. Leaf is clearly destroying Kris, and it's about time she got that lesson in humility. You're doing quite well, to be honest. Really, well done!