I've only read the first 3 chapters so far, so I'm going to review those for now.
The first chapter started off very nicely, where you introduced the various characters and set the plot in motion, with a little foreshadowing at the beginning, and the fact that wild Pokémon across the Johto region have become more violent. Personally, I would’ve liked a little more details of the characters, what they were wearing and what they looked like etc., it helps readers visualize what they’re reading, even though most readers likely have played the games and have an idea what they look like.
Again, the details of the various characters like clothing or appearance are somewhat lacking to me, as well as the environments, but I did like how you described Silver during the battle as being almost demonic.
Totodile’s personality here is also refreshing since they are usually portrayed as happy-go-lucky characters (at least in my experience) who also pack a bite. I’m keen to see more of Silver, as he’s definitely one of more unique characters in the games and I’m interested to see how you’re going to portray him in the future.
In this chapter, you gave more description of Earl and the monk Kris battled, even if it was just a little, which is very good, since I now can visualize how they look like (I gotta admit, imagining Earl in a tutu is a hilarious thought). I have to admit, it feels a bit weird that you skipped over the battles with wild Pokémon that resulted in captures, but I suppose you have your reasons.
Speaking of Pokémon, I liked the different personalities of Kris’ Pokémon, especially Walter the Geodude, and their way of talking. We also got to see some more of Teddy’s personalities when he became jealous of the Hoppip, and I like that.
You have also set the rules of the nuzlocke in the fic quite nicely, with wild Pokémon becoming more aggressive and uncatchable when just one have been caught in an area. No doubt we’re going to see that at some point.
Kris’ ability to understand Pokémon talking got a lot of opportunities in itself, and I’m keen to see how it’s connected to her. I was surprised that Teddy wasn’t the only Pokémon she could understand, but other Pokémon as well as we learned in the second chapter.
I’m going to keep read your fic to see how the story goes, also because I’ve never read a Nuzlocke fic before. Who knows, maybe I’ll add some more reviews in the future.