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    Default It Goes On And On... (Chapter 2 is up)

    Hello all. This is my Sinnoh fic. I call it that because it's my only one that takes place in Sinnoh. My favorite thing I've done with the fic is had multiple protagonists. It gives so much more insight. Anyways, this is the closest you're going to get with me writing a fic that is "normal."

    It's Mature for language and suggested substance abuse. That is all.

    It Goes On And On...

    Chapter One: Something Bad Is Happening

    “Tell me, does this make you feel anything?”

    “No.”

    “Well how about now?”

    “Still no.”

    “Now?”

    “Yes.”

    “Really?

    “No.”

    “Oh come on!” Barry protested, “Don’t be a jerk about this!”

    “I’m not being a jerk, Barry. You know I’m not…like you. You can stop trying to woo me or whatever you would call it.” Lucas said, as the sound of a surreal sitar played on Lucas’s radio. The boys had set up “camp” in Lucas’s bedroom for the night, reading old Pokemon comic books and keeping themselves occupied.

    “Fine. Be that way.” Barry sulked, which Lucas couldn’t help but laugh at him. Lucas then took out…It. It was in a clear plastic bag, and It was pure.

    “OHMYGOD, LUCAS!” Barry almost screamed like a little girl.

    “Would you keep it down? I finally get my mom calm after four days of her being…you know, sick, and I swear, if you wake her up.”

    “Where did you get that?” Barry hyperventilated, falling off of Lucas’s bed, onto the ground, almost landing on Lucas.

    “Does it really matter where I got it? I just figured that we could just try it or something…”

    “But it’s not safe! You know what happened to Red.” Barry protested, reverting back to the persona of a 10 year old, a frequent happening.

    “How could I forget what happened to Red? Couldn’t find a tabloid that didn’t feature him.” Lucas knew what Barry was talking about, Red overdosing, disappearing off the face of the earth…

    Barry snatched It from Lucas’s hand and ran out of Lucas’s room and down the hall, Lucas right behind him.

    “I won’t let you do It!” Barry squealed, staggering into Lucas’s bathroom, dangling it above the toilet. Lucas froze at the doorframe. He knew Barry would do it, he would flush it, he didn’t have any problem with being a downer. Being a loser, Lucas thought.

    “Barry,” Lucas said hushed, “Be reasonable about this. “

    “What is there to be reasonable about? This is wrong, Lucas! I mean, I’m all for doing risky stuff, but It is excessive.”

    “Barry, just trust me on this.” Lucas protested.

    “Lucas, you could die.”

    “Barry, give it back.” Lucas said without trying to sound desperate.

    “But-“

    Lucas planted a kiss on Barry’s lips. Barry’s eyes got wide and surprised, but then relaxed. Lucas placed his hand on Barry’s, taking the bag from him gracefully. Barry’s tense muscles became relaxed, his eyes tearing up. Lucas now released, backing away slowly.

    “Now I’m going to go try this. And if you’re in, you’re in. And if you’re out, well that’s just too bad.”

    Barry followed Lucas to his room.

    ……………………

    “I’m 19 and male, I play bowling and racquetball. I have an allergy to Oran and Rawst Berries. I went to training school in Jubilife, I screwed this one girl named Jen at a beach house during spring break in Sunnyshore. I run this gym that no one cares for. And my pokémon think I’m always depressed.”

    Roark put down the pen and studied what he had written. This was his life, sure, it was cliché. He wished he had a new one, almost everyday. Was this all he was going to amount to, a professional pokémon trainer? He might as well take out his tricycle and go back to grade school. In his eyes, pokémon training was for children, and those who never stopped being children. His dad, his grandfather (may he rest in peace), and all those who came before him had had some special bond with pokémon or something. They were all successful and rich and famous, and therefore, happy too.

    Roark was poor, unsuccessful, and getting older. He wrote down, “Sometimes I feel my life is ending.” He took one more look, then shut his journal.

    The phone rings.

    “Roark, gym leader of the Oreburg Gym, located in Oreburg in Sinnoh. What seems to be the-“

    “Mr. Roark, sir! This is Bob, your pokémon assistant, sir!” Bob boomed into the phone, causing a splitting headache for Roark.

    “Yes, Yes Bob, I know who you are.” Roark said annoyed.

    “Sir, there is something wrong in the mines, sir!”

    “What do you mean?”

    “Many workers are hurt, sir!”

    “Oh my-, just, Bob what is the problem-“

    “Well we were-“

    Boom.

    “Bob…Bob…?”

    Silence.

    ……………….

    “People might think I’m very manly, I make a big stink when I must but you know what, fuck them. I’ll stay very professional, never that nonchalant. If I’m a bitch, well, I am what I am. Just call me champ, don’t call me lady. I don’t like to talk when I’m losing the game.”

    Gardenia put down her pencil closed her journal. She guessed it was a good idea after all to start doing this journal thing.

    “Oh well, time to call Cynthia. Maybe she can finally come home today.”
    Last edited by Cabaret; 11th March 2013 at 07:48 PM.

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    Well that kiss scene between Barry and Lucas took me by surprise xD. Though I had already expecting it judging from the lines of dialogue.

    Overall I think the chapter too short I meant not a lot happened and I still think you should use more description towards the surrounded; actually I felt you didn't focus on describing the emotions a lot in this chapter either.

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    Yeah that kiss scene kind of shocked me.

    But like Stellar Haze said, you should've made it a longer chapter. Not a lot happened.

    Other than that, I'd like to see where this goes.

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    Default Re: It Goes On And On...

    I...well this is awkward. I took a break and came back to this and decided to have a full plan on what this fic was going to be. A little bit of mystery, a little romance, action, humor etc. Plus the story's been planned out. I sincerely hope you like the finished product of Chapter 2.

    It Goes On And On- Chapter 2- Something VERY Bad Is Happening



    Well, that's Chapter 2 for ya. Hope you like it. Love to hear what you think, too.
    Last edited by Cabaret; 14th March 2013 at 12:29 PM.

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