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    Default Generation 2021 (Chapter 35 - Into the Forest Again, 15)

    Meet Rachel Palton, an eleven-year-old girl who embarks on the journey her father had taken twenty years ago. Along with her Buoysel, Suigun, and a travelling companion from Pallet Town named Ken, she travels all around the Kanto region, getting into laughs, trouble, and – of course – an evil organization’s way.

    Table of Contents

    • Part 1. Preamble
      • Chapter 1. Prologue: Before the Beginning
      • Chapter 2. The Beginning [go]
    • Part 2. Setting Out
      • Chapter 3. Preparing for Trouble? [go]
      • Chapter 4. Viridian City [go]
    • Part 3. The Tournament
      • Chapter 5. Into the Forest [go]
      • Chapter 6. The Tournament Continues [go]
      • Chapter 7. Enemies [go]
    • Part 4. The Contest
      • Chapter 8. Lost in Pewter City! [go]
      • Chapter 9. A “Pokémon” Contest [go]
      • Chapter 10. To Appeal During Battle [go]
      • Chapter 11. To Look Good During Battle [go]
      • Chapter 12. Anyone Up For Basketball? [go]
      • Chapter 13. Moments of Truth [go]
    • Part 5. Mountaintop
      • Chapter 14. Route 51 [go]
        • Intermezzo: Mountain Range
      • Chapter 15. Mt. Moon [go]
      • Chapter 16. Down the Mountain [go]
      • Chapter 17. A Friend Indeed [go]
    • Part 6. Central City
      • Chapter 18. Onwards [go]
      • Chapter 19. The Dark Maze [go]
    • Part 7. Team Yin
      • Chapter 20. The Abudction [go]
      • Chapter 21. The Break-In [go]
      • Chapter 22. The Story [go]
      • Chapter 23. The Reunion [go]
    • Part 8. Back for More
      • Chapter 24. Breaking In Again [go]
      • Chapter 25. The Templar [go]
      • Chapter 26. Wrapping – no, Blowing Things Up [go]
    • Part 9. The Aftermath
      • Chapter 27. A Shopping Spree of Terror! [go]
      • Chapter 28. Trouble with the Law? [go]
      • Chapter 29. Roped In [go]
      • Chapter 30. Question Period [go]
      • Chapter 31. Two Dratini [go]
      • Chapter 32. Settling The Score [go]
    • Part 10. To the South!
      • Chapter 33. Light Ships [go]
      • Chapter 34. The Fuchsia Road [go]
      • Chapter 35. Into the Forest Again [go]


    So, without further ado, here's the first chapter! Sit back and enjoy. (Or whatever I'm supposed to say.)

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    Chapter 1 - Prologue: Before the Beginning



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    Aaaaaand... that's a cut! As you can see, my chapters are terribly long. (This one alone was ten pages in Word. 4,483 words, too.) If you want, I can shorten the chapters a bit as I keep posting them. But if I do that, you can expect to see at least one a day as I struggle to catch this up with the official release...

    At last count, there were 24 chapters in total (since I've been working on it for over six months now), so I have quite a lot to spare. If it looks bad now, just wait till you see the next few chapters.

    Before asking about my spelling of "Buoysel", it's how I ended up spelling it normally too, not just in this fic. Because "Buizel" sounds too much like it's supposed to be the Japanese transliteration.

    You won't see me saying "Fushigidane" or "Lizardon" anytime soon, though. (Although I do use the name "Mizugorou" at one point, it's still a Mudkip.)

    If you want to read more before I post it here, head over to my blog. Eventually the whole story will appear here, but I want to graduate the story here too, instead of just posting everything at once like I did at SPPf.

    (18/06/2010) I'm going to start posting them in spoiler tags now, because I don't want my posts to stretch out the pages too much.

    (14/07/2010) For those of you who think this fic is almost over by the deceptive display message, don't hold your breath. I plan for this baby to have 52 chapters.

    (02/10/2010) This fic is starting back up again. In order to finish the story by December, I need to write one chapter every 4 days. Do you think I can do it? ^_^

    (29/10/2010) 'Cause I don't. I haven't even finished Chapter 30 yet.

    (14/01/2011) It's high time I put a table of contents here. But long TOC is looooooong.

    (18/05/2012) Long time between updates is loooooooooooooong. Chapter 35, yay!

    (17/09/2013) I decided to revisit this thread to relive some old memories. While there were some gems, the story in general was pretty rough, and pretty badly written. (Now that I look at it again, three years after I started, my own rating scale would give it not even 35 to 40, while I'd given it 60 a long time ago.) So yeah, unfortunately, it's a wrap for Generation 2021 for me. Now, I might try my hand at rewriting it when I have the time, but there's no guarantee of that.
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    Default Re: Generation 2021

    Yh i was confused by the spelling at first, but the characters are well presented and have good development, keeping the reader engaged.
    I thought i had read something wrong when it said the Buoysel was talking, but i see you addressed that later on so its all good!
    I'll be keeping an eye on this one!

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    Yay, my first reply here ^_^

    Thanks for the review, I'll keep your stuff in mind.

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    Great start! I love your use of words. You are obviously a strong writer. Can't wait for more!

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    Default Second chappie! XD

    Well, since nobody's asked to shorten them, here's another long-ass chapter.

    Remember, if you want to read more before I post them here, head over to my blog!

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    Chapter 2 - The Beginning



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    The obligatory "starting" chapter. This one was kind of strange.

    You can also see that I break the fourth wall in narration a lot (as shown by the sudden appearance of music).

    I'm definitely coming back and editing this.
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    Default Re: Generation 2021

    is it weird we picked the same name for the local pokemon expert? lol
    another good chapter, with some interesting points made!
    Keep it up!

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    Quote Originally Posted by some colour no doubt View Post
    is it weird we picked the same name for the local pokemon expert? lol
    Not at all. Maple is a pretty common name to use for this purpose.

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    And here's Chapter 3! If these are too long, just tell me.

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    Chapter 3 - Preparing for trouble? Make it half. Then quadruple it. Yeah. Whatever.



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    In retrospect, I don't even know why I bothered putting Cassidy and Butch in the story. But that's the way it is now, so I might as well live with it until I have time to go back and edit.
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    Not my cup of tea, but so far good job in general. Keep it up!

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    Since nobody asked, here's the fourth chapter. It's going to be a looooooong series.

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    Chapter 4 - Viridian City



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    You know what I've noticed? I've been inconsistently capitalizing and hyphenating "water-type", "Ground type", and "Ground-type".

    I italicize all Japanese words that are not used as proper nouns or honorifics. You'll find that I use a few of these words (quite sparingly but they're present nonetheless).

    These characters are actually speaking Japanese, but they are contextually translated into English. To explain exactly how this is supposed to work (or not work), might I suggest this comic.
    Last edited by Zekurom; 28th July 2010 at 02:22 PM. Reason: Spoiler tags.

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    I think there was some trouble with spacing when you copied and pasted from word...other than that tho, this is a joy to read. Great characterization and plot, I love Denchu!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Legacy View Post
    I think there was some trouble with spacing when you copied and pasted from word...other than that tho, this is a joy to read. Great characterization and plot, I love Denchu!
    Oh no, the spacing is supposed to be like that. It's just that the lines are a bit too close together, so it looks like a block of text.

    (And you read through all this in 3 minutes? I bow down to you.)
    The word "quadragonal" is the only word with "dragon" in it where "dragon" is not a root word. That makes it awesome.

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    Haha I actually posted before I finished, but yeah...I love it! The missing child cliffhanger is epic! I can't wait until the next chapter.

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    Unfortunately, it's going to stay a cliffhanger until chapter 17. ^_^

    I wait at least 24 hours before posting a new chapter, so you might need to wait awhile.
    The word "quadragonal" is the only word with "dragon" in it where "dragon" is not a root word. That makes it awesome.

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    24 hours is nothing! haha i can wait that long... I think. Sometimes I go like two weeks between updates so 24 hours is great!

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