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    Thanks for the review :D

    When I tried to imagine myself in Oreburgh, the first thing which came to mind was the coal mine and I suddenly realized that the air around there would most likely be polluted which is why I added it. Then I considered the people of Oreburgh stupid for doing something which was harming them, but then I realized just how cold it would get in Snowpoint (especially in the winter) and that sorta went from there.

    As for the test, my original idea was to have him deliver a pokémon to somebody in the mines, or some kind of battle, but then I realized that a trainer's licence would be needed in any job which required more than two pokémon, so I thought of it more like a driver's licence. As for the last question, yeah, it was a little anti-climatic, but I needed a way to mention that law because it might actually become important down the line. Red Herrings are the best fish.

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    Chapter Sixteen: The First Gym

    Chaos stepped out into the main room of the Pokémon Center as he looked around. He was thinking about his father while he continued to walk. Just what type of trainer had he been? This man had recognized whom his father was based solely on his last name. He was suddenly filled with so many questions which he would have loved to ask him. What path did he walk? How many badges did he get? What was his team?


    Chaos jumped back as Dawn and Ramsey jumped out from behind some of the seats they were hiding behind. They both seemed so happy as they ran up to him. Dawn took his hand and helped him up as she smiled at him.

    “It was Ram’s idea to surprise you. We didn’t have enough money to buy anything big, but here.”

    Ramsey took out a box and opened it. Inside of it was a small cupcake with the frosting taking the shape of a pokéball with ‘congratulations’ written on it. He handed it over to Chaos, whom took it with a smile before handing it back to Ramsey.

    “I might have a license now, but it’s not over yet. I’ll take that cupcake after my first gym match.”

    Ramsey smiled at him and began to walk towards the exit. Chaos grinned and began to follow when Dawn pulled on his shoulder and motioned towards another door.

    “Actually, you don’t have a license yet, you still have to go get your picture taken.”

    Chaos blushed at this; he had forgotten to actually get the license he had earned.


    Chaos stood before a massive building with Ramsey and Dawn at his sides. The large building had a strange symbol with no words on the front. It seemed to look like a pokéball, only it seemed to be a dull black. The only evidence that was visible as to this being the gym was a small sign nearby which read ‘Oreburgh Gym, Face the strength of the earth!’.

    Chaos reached towards the door, and suddenly couldn’t move. His hand was trembling as he thought about whether to face this challenge or not. All of the battles he had lost up until now quickly passed through his mind; did he really stand a chance at winning? He turned towards Dawn and Ramsey, doubt clear in his eyes. They each returned his wordless plea with an understanding nod. With confidence renewed, he gripped the door’s handle, ready to face whatever trial awaited him.

    At that moment, the door burst open, tossing the trio onto the ground. The person responsible looked down at his handiwork with a smirk on his face.

    “My bad, you know how I hate waiting. Ramsey told me you were on your way so I decided to wait, but you were taking too long.”

    Chaos smirked at Flash, he couldn’t blame him for being impatient this time, after all, he had waited a whole week for him. Quickly standing up, he greeted him with a high five, both of them knowing what was about to happen.

    “Hurry up and get in here, Roark’s been waiting for you.”

    With a determined nod, Chaos stepped into the gym behind Flash. He was shocked by the inside, as the walls all seemed to be made of stone. It almost felt like he was back in the Oreburgh Gate, except for the large bleachers and various screens in the room. Flash pulled Chaos towards a small computer and motioned towards a slot. Looking at it carefully, Chaos realized he had to insert his license, though the labels really helped speed up the process.

    Once he inserted the blue piece of plastic, his face appeared on all of the screens. Below it, a single line appeared, ‘Christopher Combete Trainer Debut’. Chaos was about to stand from the computer when he noticed a dialogue box appear on the screen.

    ‘Would you like to select a moniker?”

    Chaos grinned as he selected yes and quickly typed in the moniker he wanted, Flash smirking at the choice. With that put in, Flash pulled Chaos’ license out and led him towards a large group of rocks near the center of the room. Once he was near enough, he could clearly see that the rocks were in fact a battle field. The familiar chalk symbols were on the ground, clearly showing the limits to the field, though the rocks did a better job. Looking around, Chaos noticed that the bleachers were nearly empty. He spotted Dawn, Ramsey, Flash, some man wearing sunglasses, and a group of four old men.

    “So, are you ready for our battle?”

    Chaos quickly looked at his opponent, the same man from the gate. He was smiling as he looked at the bleachers with a smirk.

    “Man, our audience is twice as large today! Hope you don’t get nervous.”

    Chaos took a step back. This was twice as many? Ramsey wasn’t kidding when he said people didn’t really care about battles that much anymore. Then he noticed a few numbers coming up on screen, and then realized what they were, odds. From his spot, he couldn’t make out the exact numbers, but a few of the old men started writing down various things and putting money into a hat lying besides them. He was curious as to whom they were each betting on, though in his gut he knew they were likely betting against him.

    Then suddenly one of the men’s eyes opened wide. He pointed at the screen with a smirk and suddenly tossed a few more bills into the hat. The numbers on the screen hadn’t changed, but the only thing which had changed was the words underneath his picture. He knew what it said; it was pretty obvious that it read, ‘Christopher ‘Chaos’ Combete’. Maybe it was just his moniker that impressed him.

    “So, since this is your debut match, I have to explain the rules in case there is anything you did not know. Our match will be three of my pokémon preapproved by the League against up to six of your pokémon. The battle will go on until either one of us has all of their team defeated. The rest of the rules follow regular regulation rules.”

    Chaos let out a nervous laugh, he was hoping the explanation would be a bit clearer than that, but it seemed he’d be left to guess at what the regulation rules were. He remembered some of the basic ones, but couldn’t remember the more complicated rules. He simply pushed the thought out of his mind; there was nothing he could do about it now.

    Roark grinned at him as he pulled out a pokéball and tossed it onto the field. With a bright flash, a large rock was revealed. It simply lay there on the ground, before it started to float up into the air. Two eyes and a mouth quickly became visible as it looked at Chaos. On its side were two arms, both of which looked strong. Chaos took a deep breath and reached for one of his pokéballs and threw it onto the field. Once the bright flash was gone, Cosmic stood on the field. He heard a few sighs and laughs from the bleachers, but training with Ramsey had taught him not to let what the audience said get to him.

    “Force field up! The battle may now commence!” A voice declared from a loudspeaker up above.

    Paying little attention to it, chaos was ready to make this battle end quickly, he knew that his opponent had the numbers advantage against him, so maybe he could get by using overwhelming power.


    Cosmic complied as he let out a blast of powerful electricity heading in every direction, making sure that his opponent would have no way to avoid it. Roark let out a soft chuckle at this, and Chaos quickly realized why. One the electrical attack struck the pokémon, it didn’t even flinch. Nothing seemed to have happened as it stared at Cosmic, obviously awaiting an order.

    “Geo, rollout!”

    The stone pokémon immediately responded by crashing into the ground and rolling towards Cosmic at a rapid speed. Cosmic quickly jumped over it and watched as it crashed into a large rock behind him, reducing it to rubble. Within a few seconds, the pokémon quickly rolled towards Cosmic once again, causing him to dodge time and time again.

    As the battle went on, Chaos grit his teeth trying to figure out what had happened. Last time and electric attack had proven futile was against Splat, and that was because she was part ground type. Did that mean that Geo was part ground type as well? There was only one way to find out.

    “Discharge again!”

    Just as Cosmic jumped over Geo once more, he let out another burst of electricity, only for it to have absolutely no effect. Yes, it was safe to assume that electric moves would be useless. What else could he do? The rest of Cosmic’s attacks relied on physical contact and there was no way he could safely strike Geo now that he was rolling all over the place. He had just started and was already at such a drastic disadvantage.

    Then Cosmic failed to jump over Geo. The blow sent him flying into one of the large boulders on the field. Cosmic slowly stood up as Geo quickly moved towards him once more. Chaos was out of ideas; there was nothing he could do. Cosmic was forced to run out of the way, just barely avoiding Geo. It was obvious that he was tiring out; he just didn’t know how much longer he’d last.

    Then he remembered his last resort. He quickly grabbed his backpack and opened it up, pulling out a book. The librarian at the Trainer School had let him take it with him, claiming that they had multiple copies. This was the same book he had used when fighting Flash, and he could only begin to imagine just what he’d say at this. Flipping through the book, he came to the page mentioning all of the attacks a shinx could do. He read it over quickly, noticing that everything was either an electric attack or required that Cosmic physically attack Geo. Chaos was about to give up, when he noticed a small note.

    ‘There are some which are capable of using other moves, though these attacks are hereditary and cannot be taught; only inherited.’

    Looking at the list, he found the only move which looked promising and looked up to see an exhausted Cosmic just barely avoid being struck once again. This time, instead of rolling towards him again, Geo started to float once again. Both pokémon seemed tired, and the fact that he had stopped spinning meant that it was much more likely for his plan to work.


    Geo quickly flew towards Cosmic, ready to try to finish their battle. Chaos grinned at this, it gave him the chance to use this new move.

    “Ice fang!”

    Cosmic suddenly stopped moving as his eyes widened. This was all the opportunity Geo needed to strike Cosmic into the ground. Chaos frantically tried to see what had happened as the dust cleared. It was likely that Cosmic did not know this move, or maybe he just didn’t understand him? That had happened before, though he had no idea this time. Once the smoke cleared, the first thing he saw was Geo on top of Cosmic. Then his eyes widened as a blue glow came from Cosmic’s mouth. He ferociously bit Geo as ice quickly spread from the spot, covering him. Cosmic then proceeded to crawl out from under the now frozen pokémon, panting from exhaustion.

    “Geo is unable to battle!”

    Various shouts and hollers came from the bleachers as Roark returned Geo to his pokéball. Chaos looked towards the bleachers and noticed some of the old men staring in disbelief while one of them seemed to be raising his fists in victory. This gave Chaos some confidence, it seemed at least one of them had bet on him. Hearing the sound of metal hitting stone, Chaos turned towards the field and saw a large onix staring at him and Cosmic.

    “Force field up! The battle may now begin!”

    Force field up? Did that mean that when one of the pokémon was knocked out the force field went down? He didn’t have time to think about it now; he had to focus on the battle. He grinned as he pointed at the onix as he declared his move.

    “Ice fang, one more time!” Cosmic charged towards his opponent, nervous look in his eyes.

    “Tail whip, Aster!”

    Just as Cosmic neared him, Aster swatted Cosmic away using his tail. Cosmic slid across the floor, barely being able to stand back up.

    “You caught me off guard last time, but I know how to deal with ice fang!”

    Roark looked at Chaos with determined eyes. Looking at him, Chaos remembered what he had seen in the GTS. There had been a battle between an onix and another pokémon, the onix had lost after the foe used what must have been an ice fang. The one the clown had been dressed as, it had to be him! The clown had told him about his style, he was a follower of the body path. That meant that most of his strategies and lessons would come from combat experience, meaning that if he really had dealt with ice fang before, it would prove difficult to win using just that. He was about to declare his next move when Roark gave out his order first.

    “Stealth rock!”

    Aster immediately began to glow as he smashed the ground, sending various now glowing stones into the air. The glow had faded from him, but the stones continued to glow as they floated around Cosmic. Cosmic was shocked, and stopped moving, though the rocks did nothing to him. Chaos, not quite knowing what the move did, decided to flip through the book while watching what happened. A few seconds went by with none of the pokémon moving, and the stones remaining in orbit around Cosmic.

    Then Aster smashed the ground once again, this time doing nothing more than making noise. Cosmic took a step back, and one of the stones began to move forwards, only to stop mid-air. Upon seeing this, Chaos realized what the stones did.

    “Cosmic, don’t move!”

    Cosmic was about to nod, but instead remained absolutely still while Aster began to slither around the field while remaining at a distance. The pressure was building, and it was obvious that it was getting to Cosmic as he began to tremble.

    “Screech!” Aster let out a horrifyingly loud yell aimed towards Cosmic, causing him to begin to shake uncontrollably.

    “Don’t move! Trust me!” Another screech came from Aster, causing Cosmic to become obviously terrified. Chaos was thinking as fast as he could, trying to find a way to get him out of this mess.

    “Just a little longer! Trust m-“

    Another screech cut him off, this one being much closer than the others. Cosmic immediately broke down and began to run, horror in his eyes. As soon as he took three steps, the stones around him all flew into him, crashing into his body all at once. The stones held him in place and floated up into the air a bit higher, before separating and releasing Cosmic from their crushing grasp, letting him fall helpless to the hard stone below. A soft thud was heard moments later.

    Chaos looked at the motionless Cosmic on the floor, fear in his eyes. He couldn’t control himself as he walked onto the field. He could barely hear the loudspeaker declaring the obvious. Step after step, he silently walked past the stones which had harmed his little friend. The stones were no longer floating and lay on the ground, but as soon as he neared them they shot up into the sky. Ignoring them, he continued to walk, despite how they inched closer and closer to him. He scooped Cosmic up in his hands and he held him close to his chest. He was covered in bruises, nothing to major, and he could feel the soft beating of his heart. That filled him with relief as he felt something on his sides. He noticed that the stones had reached him, but they hadn’t slammed into him, was it because of how much slower he had moved?

    He didn’t put much thought into it as he walked out of the field slowly, moving out of the stones’ paths and watched them return to the ground. As he walked, he softly whispered to the unconscious Cosmic, “Why didn’t you listen, you didn’t have to suffer so much…”

    Once he reached his position, he gently placed him on the ground next to him, and tossed Terrum’s pokéball onto the field. After the flash, Terrum stood there staring at Aster, ready to fight.

    “Force field up! The battle may now continue!”

    Before any words could be said, the stones flew back into the air and surrounded Terrum, ready to crush their next victim. Terrum stood there calmly, watching the stones carefully.

    “Terrum, no sudden movements!”

    Terrum, gave no response, which Chaos assumed meant he understood. Aster immediately began to issue his screeches. Terrum simply stood still, completely unaffected as he stared at the stones. Chaos smirked at this, Terrum would likely be able to handle this. After a few seconds of Aster trying to scare Terrum into moving, Chaos finally got an idea.

    “Razor leaf at the stones!”

    Terrum quickly swung his head, sending a leaf at a stone, slicing it in half and letting it fall to the ground. The other stones refused to float idly as they each flew towards Terrum, whom in return used razor leaf to slice them apart. After the last one fell to the ground, Terrum looked towards Aster with a sly look on his face.

    “Smack down!”

    Aster charged Terrum as he raised his tail, ready to crush the smaller pokémon underneath. Chaos simply grinned; this was a good chance to try out one of the moves he hadn’t used yet.


    If he was right, this would severely weaken Aster and give Terrum more juice for the final round. Terrum immediately opened his mouth and began to inhale as hard as he could. Small glowing green orbs seemed to fly off of Aster and into Terrum’s mouth, but it wasn’t just that. Aster began to get slowly pulled towards Terrum, causing him to struggle against the force. Chaos was shocked at the power behind the move, there was no way that this was a simple absorb, could it be one of its more advanced forms? Terrum was always full of surprises.

    Terrum suddenly closed his mouth and smiled as he watched Aster fall to the ground. Aster did not move as the familiar voice declared, “Aster is unable to battle!”

    Roark smirked as he returned Aster to his pokéball and held up another one.

    “Not bad, but I doubt you can take down this guy. Crush, it’s smashing time!”

    He threw it onto the field and the usual flash revealed a familiar face. Standing before him was the same pokémon which had saved him back in the Oreburgh Gate. Chaos gulped as he thought about just what it had done back at the gate. Did he really even stand a chance in this battle? No, he shouldn’t think that way, he should focus on the battle. The voice repeated its usual phrase as the battle began.

    Without a single order, Crush charged Terrum and used its blue head to smash him into the ground. Chaos flipped through the book as he tried to find something on the pokémon, but let out a frustrated yell as he tossed the book aside. It wouldn’t help him this time.

    “What are you doing!? You need that thing!” Chaos turned towards the bleachers and saw Dawn yelling at him.

    “It’s useless, it has nothing on that pokémon!”

    “Of course not! Cranidos have been extinct for thousands of years! The Oreburgh Museum just recently discovered how to revive fossils, but you can use the book to determine the moves its descendants can use and then predict what it can do!”

    “Don’t waste time with the book! Just hit it hard and fast, that worked for me!” Flash was now standing on the bleachers trying to get his attention.

    The two of them began to argue over whether to use the book or not as Chaos watched Terrum trying to avoid Crush’s headbutts. He didn’t have time for this; he had to think of something fast. Then Ramsey jumped up between the two and smacked each one on the head.

    “Don’t listen to them! Show them the meaning of chaos!”

    A smirk spread across his face as he remembered their conversation in the tunnel. Yes, he had to use his instinct now, all he could do was hope that his ideas would work.

    “Razor leaf!” Terrum quickly turned around and sent various leaves flying towards Crush, whom simply jumped out of the way.

    “Flamethrower!” Crush opened his mouth as a blast of fire shot out, burning away all of Terrum’s leaves. As the flame flew forwards, Chaos got an idea.

    “Dig!” Terrum dug down into the ground, narrowly avoiding the flames.

    “Nice try, but there’s a flaw to your plan! Crush, flamethrower into the hole!” Crush ran towards the edge of the hole as he prepared to unleash a torrent of flames into the hole, and Chaos grinned as he did so.

    “Absorb now!” Immediately, the green orbs began to fly off of Crush as Terrum’s attack began to pull him towards the hole. Being forced to struggle against it, Crush shut his mouth and tried to move away from the hole, only for the ground beneath him to break and cause him to fall into the hole.

    “Get out of there and quickly hit the sides with razor leaf!” Within seconds, Terrum jumped out from the hole and upon landing on the ground used his attack, causing the hole to seal up as dirt and stones buried Crush beneath the earth.

    “Looks like your pokémon just got fossilized.” Chaos had a goofy grin on his face as the sudden urge to put on sunglasses shot through his body. Roark responded to this by chuckling as he looked down at the ground.

    “That was an awful joke, but that’s not even the best part. Did you really think you could defeat a rock type by burying it? Zen headbutt.”

    A soft blue glow began to emanate from where the hole had been as the ground began to shake. In a flash of movement, Crush blasted out from the hole, head giving off the glow, and charged Terrum. Before he could do anything, Crush had already struck him with the attack sending him flying into one of the boulders. Just as Terrum stood back up, Crush sent him flying once again with another powerful strike. Chaos stared in awe; was this the attack which had stopped Org before? Blow after blow, Terrum kept standing back up. Chaos tried his best to come up with an idea, but all he could think was that they were going to lose now.

    After slowly standing back up from a slightly more brutal blow, Terrum began to give off a green glow. He glared at Crush whom had stopped moving, waiting to see how to respond to this. As the glow surrounding Terrum began to strengthen, Chaos began to reach towards the book on the floor hoping to find out what was going on. Then a bright green flash filled the room. Once the light had faded, were Terrum once stood, a much larger pokémon was there. It had a similar shell on its back and stood on four legs, but instead of having a small twig on its head; it had a massive tree on its back. It’s body had various spikes extending from it, and it let out a powerful roar which caused everyone, even Crush ,to flinch. Staring at it, Chaos was unsure what to make of the situation, but something inside of him told him it was his chance now. All he had to do was declare an attack.

    “Hit him with everything you’ve got!”

    The large beast roared once more as it began to shake the tree on its back. Various leaves began to fly into the air as they gave off a green glow. The leaves began to fly around Crush, surrounding the pokémon and making sure it could not escape. Once again it roared as the leaves picked up speed and then fell to the ground, revealing an unconscious Crush lying on the ground. It gave off one final roar before it began to glow once again, and after another flash, Terrum stood on the field once again looking like normal.

    The room was silent as what had just happened began to sink in. The silence was broken as a surprised voice declared, “Crush is unable to battle, the winner is Christopher ‘Chaos’ Combete.”

    Chaos simply stared at Terrum for a moment as he tried to figure out what had just happened. He felt something on his leg and looked down to see Cosmic standing again, pointing towards Roark whom was walking towards him. Roark had a confused look in his eyes, but his mouth was in a large smile. He grabbed Chaos’ hand and placed something in it. Once he moved his hand, Chaos could see a small metal object which matched the symbol on the front of the gym. Various people were cheering on the bleachers, especially one very happy old man.

    “Congratulations, you just earned the Coal Badge.”

    Chaos simply stared at the badge and then at Terrum whom was slowly walking back to him. Terrum and Cosmic had both surprised him today, just what other skills were they hiding from him?

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    Based on first impressions, you've managed to capture the beginning of D/P wonderfully. I assume Flash is the Barry counterpart? (if so, you did nicely at establishing him as his own character and not a Barry clone) I also liked Chaos getting tangled in the TV wires (I've done the same thing, but with computer wires)

    Overal, I'm intrigued at what's in store for Chaos on his adventure.
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    Ok, I've been thinking for a while after I read up to this point recently and here's my thoughts of this fic:

    I like the various characters and their development in the story. For example, Dawn acted initially cold towards Chaos in the beginning, but have sort of warmed up to him at this point, similar to the way a tsundere would act. And Chaos is beginning to learn the ropes of Pokémon battles after some (cruel) training in the trainer school, as well as befriending Ramsay, who is, if I might add, a very unique character.
    However, 16 chapters into the story, and Chaos only just got his first badge. The slow pacing is in my opinion your fic's weakness. That said, don't blame the length of the chapters, because I like that they aren't too long.

    Overall, I enjoy reading it and I'm keen to see how things will go for Chaos and co.

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    Thanks for the reviews!

    Getting tangled up with the wires was something that just happened when I was writing it, I just figured that it would help show how he is unable to completely avoid trouble better than me saying it.

    I actually try to plan out my character's personalities and try to have as few as possible having close personalities, I've even come up for reasons as to why they think/act that way, including Ramsey's obsession with croagunk. As for the pacing, yeah, when reading back I notice that I keep the pacing moving a bit slow, but hopefully it'll start to pick up a bit since now virtually all exposition based things are out of the way, though don't expect very sudden bursts of speed.

    Story wise, I think I came up with some interesting plots for up ahead on the journey, I just have to hope that they're interesting enough.

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    Well I was finally able to read this chapter, sorry for the wait.

    I relly like dit actually, normally your battles have the problem that they some times lag around at some parts but this battle was kept interesting and kept me on edge. Not just that but it was Chaos's first win to boot. Though the Ice Fang thing was a little too convinient.

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    Chapter Seventeen: Splitting Paths

    “Aaaaaaaaaand there!”

    Dawn pointed towards the computer monitor. On the screen was Terrum after he had transformed during the gym battle. They were all in the Pokémon Center once again, this time using one of the computers. Dawn had connected her pokétch to the computer and was replaying her recording of the battle.

    “I am positive that Terrum somehow evolved into a torterra at that moment. What I find odd about it is that he skipped grotle and the usual white glow was green.”

    Dawn continued to stare at the screen while deep in thought. Nearby, Ramsey was playing with Terrum, Cosmic, and Splat. Terrum and Cosmic had already been treated and were doing well, after the treatment and a little bit of rest, their bodies had fully healed. Chaos sat next to Dawn as he watched them play. He was eating the cupcake the others had gotten him as he thought about Terrum’s transformation.

    He was familiar with evolution, the process of a pokémon moving onto the next stage in its life once it became strong enough. What Terrum had done raised so many questions in his mind, specifically why he had changed back. He had always thought that evolution was a permanent process from which there was no return, but here was Terrum who had been a torterra for a short while only to become a turtwig once again.

    “This is virtually the same as what happened with Pyrus…”

    Dawn quickly disconnected the cable from the pokétch and connected it to her pokédex. After a few seconds of loading, Pyrus came up on screen. Chaos watched curiously as the video progressed slowly. They seemed to be in a cave, perhaps it was the Oreburgh Gate. Pyrus began to give off a red glow, and then after a bright flash, he had changed into a larger creature. His head seemed to be on fire, and the body was still simian in appearance. He had a long tail, and seemed to have white fur on his body, making him look as if he was wearing a shirt. Pyrus then proceeded to release a large torrent of flames from his mouth. The flames struck an onix square on the face, causing it to fall backwards in pain. Chaos immediately recognized it as Org.

    Chaos pulled out his book and began to flip through the pages. Pyrus and Terrum had both done it, and if Terrum’s transformation was anything to go by, Pyrus should be a chimchar once again. This meant that perhaps it was something that chimchars and turtwigs could do. Once he reached the page, he carefully read a little section about abilities. He could see various abilities, but the one that caught his eye for turtwigs was overgrow. There was a similar entry under chimchar, blaze.

    “Overgrow boosts the power of all grass type moves when in danger, and blaze boosts the power of fire type moves…”

    Dawn sighed at his comment. “It can’t be either one of those. Rowan and I studied those abilities before and nothing like this ever happened. I’m not sure what to make of this, but maybe you should watch Terrum closely and see if he does anything else ‘unique’.”

    Chaos nodded, but then jumped up as he felt a hand on his shoulder. After turning around, he saw a man wearing sunglasses. He seemed to be the same man from back at the gym. The man smirked as he passed his hand through his brown hair.

    “Combete right? Name’s Dee, I work for Dashers and I liked the way you battled. Nobody really imagined you’d take after your old man so much, but I have to admit that I’m pleasantly surprised. I wanted to ask you if you’d be interested in a sponsorship. No real strings attached, you get money and free gear in exchange for you using only our products and battling in a couple tournaments for us.”

    Chaos stared at the man in disbelief. His first victory and he was being offered a sponsorship? Before he could talk, a voice shot through the air.

    “You want him? He barely won his battle! If it’s because of his father’s reputation, my dad has an even bigger one!”

    A red faced Flash was standing at the doorway. He moved towards the man and grabbed onto his blue shirt’s collar. The man simply let out a sigh and calmly responded.

    “I’m not denying your dad’s reputation, it is very impressive; it’s just that you lost how many times against Roark before you won? Combete here won on his first try, the fact that his dad was a big name just adds to the reasons I think he’d be great.”

    Flash sighed as he let go of Dee’s shirt and the red on his face changed from one of anger to one of embarrassment. Chaos looked at his friend for a moment and then turned towards Ramsey. He closed his eyes as he smiled before shaking his head.

    “I’m sorry, but I’m not interested. You said that I’d have to compete in tournaments for you, but I can’t do that. I have to focus on the Pokémon League. Besides, the reason I’m doing the League Challenge is for a friend, not my own interests.”

    Dee sighed as he opened his mouth, only to close it. The way Chaos seemed when he answered, he was so serene yet determined; nothing he could say would change his mind at this point. Dee merely turned around and began to leave when he stopped right before walking out the door.

    “If you change your mind, there will be a tournament in Jubilife to determine who will be sponsored shortly. I hope I can see you there.”

    With that said, he left the group of trainers. Dawn went back to her work and Ramsey to playing with the pokémon. Flash, on the other hand, walked up to Chaos and gave a weak smile.

    “I-I’m sorry for losing my cool back there. I guess I’ve just been a little on edge being so far behind schedule and all.”

    “Behind schedule?”

    “Y-yeah, it’s been spring for a few days now, and I’ve only got one badge. I should be half way towards Eterna by now.”


    “That’s where the next badge is, it’s north of here but….I, uh, have to head back to Twinleaf to see my mom for something.”

    Flash seemed to be sweating a bit, but quickly ran out the door shouting back at the others.

    “I’ll see you guys later! Dawn, don’t kill Chaos if he screws up, remember what I told you!”

    Chaos just stood there staring at the closing door. He slowly turned towards Dawn, confusion in his face.

    "W-what did Flash tell you?"

    Dawn let out a light chuckle as he began to pack her things and headed towards the door.

    "He told me that you always try to do what's best for others instead of yourself. That even if you screw up, it’s because you're too busy thinking about other people." She had her eyes closed as she spoke, a strange smirk slowly spreading across her face as she seemed to blush. Her eyes opened as she left. "Well, I should get going now, Rowan wanted to talk to me about something..."

    Chaos simply stood there staring at the door as it closed. Dawn had acted strange.


    Chaos let out a yelp as he noticed Wazu next to him. He was caught off guard but managed to keep himself from doing anything stupid.

    "He said that she likes you-gunk."

    This time Chaos fell to the ground in shock. Not only had Ramsey appeared out of nowhere, but the words which left his mouth. Why would she like him if she had previously hated his guts? Wait....which type of like was Ramsey talking about? Was it just like, or was it like-like? He was about to ask when Ramsey starting skipping around him.

    "Chris and Dawn, sitting in a tree. K-I-S-something-something gunk."

    Chaos at first began to blush but then stood up and returned his pokémon to their balls and began to walk out.

    "Hurry up and get ready, we're moving onto the next gym now, Flash said we're behind schedule so no time to waste."

    Sure he didn't want to start traveling now, but it was the only way to change the subject. As he walked out of the Pokémon Center, he looked around, not sure where to go to next, but Ramsey shot out the door and began running. Not wanting to be left behind, Chaos bolted after him, doing his best to keep up with the much faster kid.


    "So...where....are....we going?"

    Chaos was doing his best to catch his breath. They had run all the way to the outskirts of Oreburgh and a large hill stood ahead of them. Ramsey smiled as he ran towards it then jumped around until he got towards the top. Having seen how easy it was, Chaos charged up the slope, only to slip on mud and fall back down. He tried multiple times, only to continually fall back down.

    "What are you doing? Jump on to the stones and get up here-gunk."

    Chaos, now covered in mud, looked at the slope and searched for the stones. They were so small and far apart, he knew there was no way for him to make the jumps, he just wasn't agile enough. He took a deep breath and decided to try anyway. He ran as fast as he could then jumped....and missed the stone completely. He landed on his face, crashing into the slope and sliding back down. It was then that various rocks began to roll and fall down the slope, making it even more difficult to climb.

    "Sorry...but is there another way to the next gym?"

    "We could go to Jubilife and head north from there, it’s a lot longer but it should still get us to Eterna."

    Chaos smiled as he stood up and looked at Ramsey.

    "Listen, you're already up there, so you take that path to Eterna. I'll take the longer road and meet up with you later. Don't wait for me, instead keep going. I promise to catch up to you, even if I don't see you for a while, I will see you at the League."

    Ramsey looked at Chaos and smiled.

    "Okay, but you better not make me wait too long or else I'll punch you in the stomach!"

    The two smiled at each other as they both began to walk. They didn't bother waving good bye, they knew they'd see each other again; it was only a matter of time.

    (Author's comments: and with that......END OF PART 1. Next chap will be something special, and also about my plans with this this That's about it for now, pacing will be speeding up, just not as much as I thought I'd need to)
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    The chapter was mostly a transition chapter since it was the end of part 1 but now I am completely interested in what happened with Terrum and Pyrus and how they were able to evolve to their final stage in one jump. So with that in mind how different will Part 2 be compared to Part 1?

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    Well, I know I call them parts but in reality they are just something a bit bigger than an arc. Where part 1 focused on the starting up portion, part 2 is more advanced things and how pokémon(and other beings) use attacks. Things of course get rougher for the heroes and of course those of you who play the game will know that Galactic comes in soon, though I hope you guys like my depiction of them :P

    Also feel free to say this chapter sucked, I wasn't really feeling it and I've sorta been struggling with writer's block as of late

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    Special Episode One: Good Morning

    A little girl was running through the swampy area laughing as she followed a small wooper despite the thick fog. As she joyfully ran, she heard a rustling in some nearby bushes and turned to look. In that moment, she lost track of the wooper, so she sighed and decided to check out the bushes instead.

    She walked slowly and carefully, not wanting to let whatever was in there hear her and then run away. She took careful step, after careful step, until she reached the bushes and slowly parted the leaves. She smiled at what was found, a small nest with a few eggs in it, and one of them had recently hatched as there was a baby skorupi looking up at her. She was about to reach down to pet the small insect-like pokémon, but then remembered what she had been taught. With a small grin, she simply watched the baby walk about inside of the next.

    Then she heard another rustling.

    Thinking that perhaps there was another nest nearby, she turned towards the bushes, only to scream. From out of the bushes a larger version of the skorupi shot out. She had seen pictures of it in her mother's books before, a drapion. It lashed at her with its large claws as it snarled. The girl scrambled to her feet as she began to run away from it, but felt her foot snag on a root. She fell to the ground and grabbed her ankle, it hurt so much. She grimaced as she saw the pokémon's claw begin to glow a dark purple before quickly moving towards her, then everything went black.

    She felt nothing, no pain asides that of her ankle. Curious as to what was happening she opened her eyes and saw a woman standing in front of her. Her white lab coat stained with red and purple as she held on to the drapion's arm. The claw was inside of the woman's side, but the woman hadn't made a noise.

    "It's okay, we won't hurt you....just calm down..."

    The drapion looked into the woman's stern eyes before pulling its claw out from the woman's side and going back into the bushes. The woman then sighed as she turned around and looked at the girl. The young girl was in shock until she recognized the woman and grabbed onto her leg, tears in her eyes.

    "I-I'm sorry for wandering off mom....are you okay? I-I hate that pokémon. W-why did it have to hurt you?"

    A loud smack filled the air as the girl felt the red spot on her cheek.

    "Don't you ever say that again. No pokémon are to be hated, they are to be respected. She only attacked you because she thought you were going to hurt her child....just like how I was scared she would hurt you."

    A smile spread across her face as she checked on her daughter's ankle, sighing when she discovered nothing was broken.

    "So Dawn, want to help me bandage up?"


    beeep beeeep beeeeeeep.......beeep beeeep beeeeeeep.....

    A young girl opened her eyes as she strained to see with the sun's light filling the room. She pulled the pink covers over her head. After ignoring the horrid sound for a few minutes, she gave up and slammed her palm down on top of the small electrode alarm clock. After looking at the time for a second, she sighed and got out of bed. Not wasting any time, she quickly jumped out of bed and began to get dressed.

    She changed into her white sleeveless shirt and placed a black shirt on top of it. After digging through her closet for a few seconds, she pulled out a pink miniskirt and put it on. She looked at herself in the mirror and smiled, until she realized how unruly her long blue hair had become during her sleep. Sighing, she picked up a brush and began to tidy it up, keeping a sharp eye on the time.

    After a few minutes she gave up on ever getting her hair just right and simply grabbed her white hat and used it to hide the messier portions of her hair. Once the hat was in place, she attempted to make the pink pokéball on her hat was perfectly straight, though she found it was impossible to do while concealing her bed head.

    Looking at the time, she quickly put on her long black socks and her pink boots, after which she bolted out the door. Quickly rushing down the stairs, she made sure not to crash into an even younger looking girl at the bottom of the stairs.

    "Calm down, you have plenty of time before Mr. Rowan has to meet with you..." The young girl rubbed the sleep out of her eyes as she looked up at the other girl.

    "Ever heard of being early? It shows how responsible I am, maybe when you figure out how to show how responsible you are dad'll get you your own room!" The older girl quickly rustled up the younger girl's short blue hair.

    "S-stop it Dawn! You don't like it when I mess up your hair!" The girl quickly pushed Dawn's hand back as she glared at her.

    "Fine Sheri, though I better hurry...."

    Dawn immediately dashed into the kitchen and tossed some bread into a toaster while she poured herself a glass of milk. As she shut the refrigerator door she almost dropped her glass when a black haired man wearing a white lab coat appeared behind the door. The man smiled at her and pushed his glasses up as he spoke.

    "It's almost time to decide which assistants will be sent off to update the pokédex, and I have a pretty good feeling that one of them will be you, after all, isn't that what you have spent so many years preparing for?"

    Dawn began to blush at the man's words as she looked out towards the window.

    "Yeah Dad, I really hope I get chosen. After all the hours I put into preparations, I'm sure after the professor sees me in action at the lake, he won't be able to say no!" There was a fire in her eyes as she looked up towards her father, whom in turn simply placed a hand on her head.

    "I'm sure she'd be proud."

    Dawn nodded as she looked at a nearby clock and basically poured her milk down her throat before placing the glass into the sink. She then headed towards the door before a voice stopped her.

    "Don't forget these, and it's still pretty cold out despite it being spring."

    Dawn looked over towards her father whom was holding out her red coat along with her white scarf. She smiled as she put them on, her father had always watched over her for so long ever since that day. Once she was prepared for the cold outside, she noticed that her father was also holding a plate with some toast before she remembered what it was from. She took it from the plate as she walked out and ran towards the nearby beach.

    Sandgem Beach was always so empty during this time, despite the water being warm thanks to various ocean currents from the south. Dawn finished eating all but one of her slices of toast as she neared a few trees and sat down before a stone. Carved into the stone were a few words which had been weathered by time and the elements. She smiled at an old picture at the bottom of the stone. The picture was of that woman in her dream.

    "Morning mom, today's the big day I've been waiting for. I hope I get picked for the journey, you know how long I've been dreaming about this, a chance to meet so many different pokémon and learn from each one. When I finish, I'll make sure to come tell you about it."

    Dawn wiped a single tear which had rolled down her cheek. It had been so long since she had heard her voice, but it still rang so clear within her head, her memory, her heart.

    Remembering the time, she quickly stood up and walked towards the waves.

    "Poseidon! We have to go soon!"

    After a minute of standing there, a piplup swam to shore. He seemed to be tired, and quickly nabbed the toast away from Dawn and gulped it down. He then looked up at Dawn and smiled, before she pulled out a pokéball and shot a red beam, pulling him into the orb. Dawn smiled and quickly began to leave the beach, but not before taking one last look at the grave before running towards the lab.


    An older man walked before a group of scientists. Everyone in the group was wearing a lab coat, everyone except for Dawn. The man took a deep breath as he looked at the group, his stern eyes staring them down. He let moved his hand through his short white hair before he began to speak.

    "You have all been waiting for this day, the day we commence the greatest project we have undertaken thus far. As you are all aware, many years ago I, along with a few youths, traveled Sinnoh and amassed what information we have on the pokémon of this region. It is quite obvious that said information may have become out of date, and therefore useless, in that time. Today I shall select three of you to travel this land and record the information in these pokédexes."

    The man paused as he help up three devices.

    "The journey will no doubt be perilous, so those to be chosen will have to be intelligent, strong, and have the determination to keep going when things get difficult and most importantly, the desire to learn more about pokémon. After weeks of careful consideration, I decided that the ones to work on this special project are Dawn-"


    The man was cut off as Dawn jumped for joy. The instant her feet touched the floor, she was already shoving past the other people until she was at the man's side.

    "You made a wise choice Rowan."

    "I truly hope I did.....Anyway, the other two have yet to be decided. You all have wonderful qualities and are qualified for this project, but you are all needed here. You are all already working diligently on various projects which I believe could prove to be revolutionary. You have all put so much time and effort into your projects, I wish for you to see the fruits of your labor. Later today I shall announce who the other two will be, but for now I will head out into the field to more research on the pokémon of the lake. Please do not take it personally if you are not chosen."

    The various scientists each scattered throughout the lab, each heading towards their own projects, some depressed, but others excited for the things to come. Rowan immediately walked towards a closet and pulled out a long brown overcoat and put it on as he picked up a nearby briefcase. He turned towards Dawn and motioned for her to follow him, which she did with a smile on her face.


    Dawn and Rowan were sitting at the edge of Lake Verity. Dawn was holding a fishing rod and seemed to be intently concentrated on it. The red bobber floating in the water suddenly began to shake slightly before completely submerging. Dawn quickly pulled the rod back as she began to rapidly reel in her catch. Within moments she managed to catch.....a magikarp.

    "Another one, that means the magikarp population here is very strong."

    Rowan nodded as he wrote some notes down on a clipboard before putting it down and smiling at the work they had done. He stood up and patted the back of his pants in order to knock off the dirt from having sat on the ground for so long.

    "Well, it's starting to get late now, I guess we should head back and file away the results. Still, it is a shame that we couldn't catch anything but magikarps today."

    Dawn sighed as she gently put the magikarp back into the water and then followed Rowan whom was already leaving the lake grounds. Once she caught up to him, she smiled at him before making her move.

    "Um...professor, about the other two that would come with me, did you decide on whom yet?"

    Rowan let out a sigh. He had expected as much from her.

    "I...have yet to decide. Nobody else at the lab looks like they would be able to handle the journey both physically and mentally. Some of the more determined ones are too weak physically, while the strong ones already have commitments which I do not think they should ignore."

    "Then....when are you going to decide?"

    "I plan on telling them whom tomorrow afternoon at the latest. I pray to Arceus that I can find the two best suited."

    "I'm sure you'll make a great decision. After all, you picked me!"

    "Yes, but that was the obvious choice." Rowan let out a small chuckle as he spoke, only for that expression of joy to fade away. "Besides, I'm sure Mary would have wanted you to go."

    Rowan smiled at Dawn, how much she looked like her mother had looked those many years ago when she had asked to work at the lab. It was a shame she had begun her work until after they had finished the predecessor to the project Dawn was to undertake. Perhaps if Mary had begun to work for him sooner, she could have gone along and prevented what had happened....

    "Um, where's the briefcase?"

    Rowan was pulled out of his thoughts as he realized Dawn was right, he had likely forgotten the suitcase back at the lake, another piece of evidence that he was aging.

    "I think I forgot it at the lake, if we hurry maybe we can retrieve it and make it back to the lab before it gets too late."

    The two quickly made their way towards the lake, only this time the entrance to the lake grounds wasn't clear and open for them. The entrance was blocked by two green-haired men, each sporting what looked like black and white astronaut uniforms. Most curious of all was a single 'G' on their chests.

    "Excuse me young sirs, but would you be please move so as we may enter the lake grounds?"

    “Sorry, boss’s orders, nobody is allowed in while he carries out his research. He’s afraid the presence of others will affect the results.”

    “This won’t take long, we forgot something important. We have to get it back.” Rowan's voice still full of patience.

    “Sorry, no can do, you’ll just have to wait.”

    “Listen here! We were in the Lake before you goons showed up and now you’re telling us we can’t go back to get something?! Nobody owns this lake, it’s a public area! Would you let us through already!” Dawn interjected before Rowan could respond.

    “Dawn! You know better, we will simply have to wait until they are done before we are able to enter.” Rowan had his eyes closed as he began to chastise her.

    “But professor!”

    “No buts, we just have to wait, we aren’t the only ones who need access to the lake for research.”

    Dawn knew the tone the professor had taken on. Letting out another sigh, she shot a quick glare towards the two men before walking back a few paces. She hadn't noticed how close she had gotten to the two men.

    "Dawn, you have to get better control over your emotions. If you don't, then one day it will get you in trouble."

    Dawn smiled at him. His tone had changed from one of anger, to one of worry. She had to admit, he was right about that. There was a reason most of her research was done aside Rowan, nobody else was willing to put up with her personality.

    The two simply began to walk around the area for a bit, simply waiting for the men to tell them it was alright to enter the lake grounds. Te only things on Rowan's mind were not of getting his briefcase back, for he had nothing of real value in there besides some data he had collected recently, but for whom he was to send on the journey to aid Dawn. Little did he know, things had a habit of working out in unexpected ways, and that when he got the briefcase, he would also find the two perfect candidates for the project....

    (Author's comments n stuff: Well, hope you enjoyed the little special episode. I have a couple of these planned out throughout the series, and I have them in order to show more depth and personality to the characters which you might not otherwise see since the story is told in the limited third person, being limited to whatever and where ever Chaos is. You can consider this chapter filler if you want, and I know that by doing this I probably ruined what pace I had left since I actually moved backwards a bit XD. So, now you have a slightly better idea of how Dawn thinks and stuff, and the next chapter will have us back where we're supposed to be in the timeline. I actually was thinking of saying something else, but I sort of lost my train of thought, oh well XP)

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