First off, a huge big mega sorry for taking so long to get these results to you. I was simply too busy to get anything done. This is the first half of the results and the second will be coming soon. If are there any comments or questions, please do not hesitate to contact me.
Champion Game by Misheard Whisper:
Overall, this had the best plot among the nominees. It was intriguing and grabbed your interest. The magnitude of the plot is huge, which contributes to its appeal. Although the plot can sometimes confuse you, having to read some parts a few times to properly digest it, you do a great job at spoon-feeding it on a relaxed basis; otherwise this plot would’ve surely failed. An overall outstanding plot with many twists and turns along the way, yet maintaining the elusive balance between the fast-paced and the slow-paced, with little chapters to buffer you along the way, though these chapter could’ve contributed to the plot more.
Impressive characterization; your characters overall are above average in terms of quality, from the main and supporting characters to the small, none-recurring characters. A lot of these characters have originality and a certain degree of depth that adds to the appeal. These diverse, numerous and interesting characters turn an otherwise uneventful chapter into a fun one.
Your setting is also good, but does fail at some points. Since your story is set in the fantasy genre, the setting was graded accordingly. As such, the setting in the fantasy genre relies on two things overall, span and depth.
In terms of depth, your story excels. You have done a good job adding the lore that adds the depth necessary for the setting. In addition to explaining how this history impacted the people of the Dream
World (evidenced when they lost the battle).
However, in terms of span, your story lacks. You don’t feel like this is a completely different world or realm. There are no major locations besides the city and the plot doesn’t make an attempt to venture beyond that. Even when Ren left the city and visited the nightmares, it felt restrained. This makes the Dream World feel like a confined room rather than an entire world.
Nevertheless, I felt that the story did an overall good enough job to merit the score I gave it.
Outstanding technicalities, your writing style is very good and fun yet easy to read. Typos, grammar and spelling mistakes are incredibly rare, (32 chapters and barely any mistakes). Great job.
Summary: This story, in my opinion, is the best out of the nominees. The plot is very interesting and strong, the characters are mostly above average in terms of quality and the writer does a superb job of drawing you into the sequence of events, describing the characters emotions and crafting his own personal world. This story really stands out from the others.
Ren from Champion Game:
At first glance, Ren doesn’t seem that deep, but as you read on more and more, you realize that Ren actually is a deep character. As soon as the story starts off, you find Ren lost and completely in the dark about his role as the champion, then the story portrays his struggles with his responsibilities as the champion and as the Yekhtera. His reaction to these tasks is entertaining to read about.
Contribution to the plot: 10/10
Well, to be honest, anything less than this is not enough. Basically, the whole story revolves around keeping Ren alive. Every time he shuts his eyes, he’s teleported to world where he has to fend off monster every night, lest they follow him to his world and destroy it. And at the same time, he needs to stay at the world to refresh the bonds between the two worlds or they’ll both fall apart. Above that all, you have the fact that both sides of the war want to keep Ren alive and make peace between them.
…Beat that Chosen –One-rehashes…
Entertainment Value: 8/10
Ren is mostly entertaining. Being the champion of Hoenn, is nice to see his ability at combat and strategy come into play, and it’s also fun read about his misadventures when doing interviews or other celebrity stuff. Overall, he’s entertaining enough.
Although he’s different, he does remain bland sometimes. Were it not that fact that Ren was the main character with all the perks he has, he could easily be lost in the background. He doesn’t have any particular traits that would jump out at you, such as appearance, way of speech or personality.
Summary: An intriguing character, to say the least. While he doesn’t display that much of originality among other characteristics, he still manages to stand out. Ren shows a lot of depth as he struggles with his newfound responsibilities as a champion and trying to maintain balance (and stay alive) in the Dream World. He isn’t incredibly original, but still manages to stand out.