Sounds about right to me. :D
Actually, you're right. That's a very poor sentence, and I can't believe it's slipped through my net (and everyone else's) for this long. I'll look to fixing that.First thing I want to mention, and it's probably the only thing that concerns me when it comes to your writing thus far:
Maybe it's just me, but the way you said Manectric twice in that sentence feels...off. If you don't want to change it, you don't have to, but if I may, I'd recommend replacing that second mention of Manectric after that second comma with "the two of them" or something along those lines. Just a suggestion, though.
Hmm . . . brief history/geography lesson, out of character of course. Vila is a member of the Qirfan diplomatic corps. This means she comes from the made-up country of Qirfa, of course. Now, because the regions of the Pokemon world so far have been roughly equal to various areas of Japan, I'm subscribing to that philosophy to a certain extent. As such, Qirfa occupies a large percentage of the space we know as Russia. Because the climate across much of Qirfa is very harsh, there are far fewer Pokemon there. Vila has no prior experience with Pokemon. Her stung pride, however, can be traced back to Qirfa again - because there are few powerful Pokemon lying around - including legendaries and the like - the Qirfans have long been a militaristic people, being one of the few places in the world to have weaponry of any kind. They have a history of conflict and civil war, and have only become stable relatively recentlyAs for everything else, well, I like it. It is rather odd that Vila got confrontational. Like Ren mentioned, he was the Champ, played by the rules, and won. Then again, I have a feeling Vila's much better than she seems, so she might be indignated because she was using a school Pokemon. Of course, I'm likely to be wrong.
kinda like Russia. They are still, however, a proud people, and Vila sees it as something of a disgrace to lose, especially as she has become accustomed to beating the other students easily in the Sunday school. (She doesn't flip out when she loses to Roxanne in practice because she recognises her as her teacher. While she knows Ren is far better than her, she still saw him as a threat rather than another teacher.)
Well, it came to that part in (I think) Chapter Four where Ren was musing about how dreams made no sense. I needed something that sounded way-out and wacky, and a Glameow with an afro sounded pretty weird. I think I had some Afro Samurai on the brain that day, so something with the same syllable pattern seemed to work just fine. I decided I liked it, bringing it in on a whim when Ren fell asleep, and then figured I'd keep it around for a bit.Damn, more of this Afro Glameow? Ain't he/she gonna learn yet?
BTW, did part of the reason for its afro come from its name sounding so nice rolling off the tongue? I keep saying "Afro Glameow", and it sounds so good.
Well, I won't say anything much about that, but either way, they certainly weren't expecting him to come through at that time.Something is definitely off. Perhaps the Dreamlight is able to instinctively induce sleep in its owner if it feels it needs them in the World of Dreams at that moment? The way Ren got drowsy was definitely unusual, hardly natural.
Perhaps that's the reason why everything seemed so chaotic when he ended up falling asleep and why no one came to get him this time?
Hmm, haven't played that, so I couldn't say, but they're kind of generally based off the Heartless from Kingdom Hearts, especially that one breed . . . what were they called? They looked like giant bipedal ant-things made of ink. *quick wiki search* Oh. They're called Shadows. How original, and extremely easy to forget to boot. >_> But yeah, they're part of the inspiration. Kingdom Hearts in general was a big influence, as were Bleach and Yumekui Merry.And hoo, boy, nice chase scene. Damn creepy, this particular Iehkti'na is. Now I'm certain that the status quo seems to be coming back to normal for the appearances of these beasts. This particular breed seems to be of a lower class. It also reminds me of Arakune from BlazBlue.
hints hints errywhurr
OH WHOOPS. Somehow I didn't see that ninja-edit there. Umm . . .And, ah, hehehe, if you have an answer to the question I had last post?
Hmm. You're quite right - each successive yehktira is by no means guaranteed to be stronger or better than their predecessor, but I can kind of wave this off for now - some form of explanation will be unveiled in Chapter, umm . . . Fourteen, I think. (alternatively, you could hop over to the Author's Atlas thread and read it ahead of time >_>) But for now, I'll just say that . . . it didn't matter. Until recently, the strength of the yehktira actually had little to do with anything. I imagine the spirits would have a hard time if they got someone with next to nothing, though. If they did, I guess they'd simply say to them, "Look. Carry on being Champion, but give the Dreamlight back to your predecessor until somebody takes your title from you." That'd be the sensible thing to do, I think.And I do have a question. Not sure if this is the right place, but has there ever been a time in your version of Hoenn where a person with a low yehkti who, through sheer effort, managed to defeat the Champion? If so, what happened? Did they become the new yehktira, or did they just have the title of Champion until the current yehktira won back the title?
Yes, I . . . I think you will. BDNice work. We rollin' now, and I'm gonna enjoy what comes up next!