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    Default The Barefoot, Fighting Genius!

    A project that has been in development for quite some time. It will be the longest of my stories as it is the only one so far that isn't a short story or has a planned sequel.

    This story will focus on Maylene, the Gym Leader of the Veilstone City Gym in the Generation IV games Diamond, Pearl and Platinum. The events will span from before Generation I to the events of Platinum. The story won't be as fast-paced as my other stories, and it is set in it's own Universe. And remember, constructive criticism is always appreciated. Criticism is not always negative.

    Contents
    Prologue
    Debut Arc
    §1: A Father Figure
    §2: Childhood Friends
    §3: Who's That Chick?
    Cianwood Arc
    §4: Where She Belongs
    §5: Start Swimming
    §6: We're Standing Firm!
    §7: Companions
    §8: Control The Storm
    §9: The Gathering
    §10: Teamwork
    Memories Arc
    §11: A Long Time Ago
    §12: Leading Sinnoh
    §13: Stronger
    §14: Reunion
    Mahogany Arc
    §15: The Battles Ahead
    §16: Are We Friends?
    §17: Feel The Heart Beat
    §18: What Power Means
    §19: I’m Not The Reason
    Aura Arc
    §20: Broken, Like Me
    §21: Unneeded Powers
    §22: I Cannot See
    §23: Blind Again
    Gym Leaders Arc
    §24: I Can Breathe Now
    §25: A New Spirit
    §26: For The Memories
    §27: The Warm Welcome
    Knot Arc
    §28: Clash
    §29: A Temporary Hue
    §30: To The Shade
    §31: The Lessons
    Battles Arc
    §32: A True Test
    §33: The Softer Side
    §34: The Night Sun
    §35: Here’s To You
    §36: Not A Solution
    §37: Becoming
    §38: What You’ve Learnt
    §39: Tightrope
    §40: For Now
    Veilstone Arc
    §41: Actuality
    §42: I Wish They’d Stop
    §43: Torturous Aspiration
    §44: A Simpler Time
    §45: How You’ve Changed
    §46: Your Fault
    §47: Discovering Willpower
    §48: Up To You
    §49: My Turn To Win
    §50: Harmony
    Epilogue


    Prologue

    ‘Um… Now, a speech from the guest of honour,’ A young female spoke into a microphone to a room filled with the top trainers of Sinnoh. She had long blonde hair, and was dressed in a complete black outfit. And although she tried to, she couldn’t hide the nervousness in her voice. ‘Um… Let us clap for him.’

    Her face became burning red as she heard her latest statement through the speakers, and a few chuckles were released. But she soon returned to her seat, and gave the stand to a large muscular man wearing only a pair of blue pants, orange shoes, and what seemed like a ripped mask.

    ‘Thank you,’ He said with a hint of accent in his voice. ‘But I think the real guest of honor is you, Cynthia! You’ve been the Champion for less than a month and you’re still handling things amazingly! You’re even younger than me, and stronger!’

    Cynthia blushed again when everyone clapped for her. ‘But to all of Sinnoh,’ The man spoke once more. ‘No human or Pokémon can survive without water, yet water can sometimes cause great suffering,’ Everybody in the room became confused, and looked at each other to see if anyone had understood what the man was trying to say. ‘This is where it gets exciting!’

    Everybody leaned forward, to hear what the man had to say, even though they still could not comprehend his random thoughts. ‘Thank you for accepting me in your ranks!’ He shouted into the microphone, causing everyone to jump out of shock in their seats. ‘I am flattered that you would consider me good enough to become a Sinnoh Gym Leader! Even though I’m from another region, I have seen Sinnoh as where my home really is! I, Crasher Wake, The Torrential Masked Master! I will become a great Gym Leader worthy of the Sinnoh region!’

    The room was silent, and Crasher Wake showed disappointment; he had expected the crowd to cheer as in all of his wrestling matches. ‘Well… Um…’ Cynthia stuttered as she took the microphone back. ‘It’s time to present the guest with his gift…’ She reached into the empty area underneath the microphone stand while Crasher Wake tried to sneak a look.

    After some seconds of rummaging, elbowing Crasher Wake’s knee, bumping her head against the wood of the stand, and a very childish scream, Cynthia produced a Pokémon egg. It was a normal-looking Pokémon egg, the same as all the others obtained from the Day Care. She handed it to Crasher Wake and stuttered her way out of the scene and back into her chair.

    Everyone congratulated Crasher Wake and shook his hand. The trainers formed a line in no specific order, and none of them took more than thirty seconds talking to the new Gym Leader. But he wasn’t prepared for a punch to be delivered to him by a young girl.

    The four-year-old girl had short pink hair and glowing eyes of the same color. She gave a very arrogant grin and slowly prepared to punch again. ‘Excuse my daughter,’ An average-looking man said as he held his daughter from delivering another punch. ‘This is Maylene; she’s quite the troublemaker. I’m the Veilstone Gym Leader. Nice too meet you.’ He offered his free hand to shake, and Crasher Wake accepted it.

    ‘I will beat you! And be Gym Leader!’ The little Maylene said and punched again with her free hand. ‘I am strongest than you!’

    ‘I’m sure you are!’ Crasher Wake laughed and brought his whole body in level with Maylene’s. His eyes met her eyes, and the determination in them almost disturbed Crasher Wake’s balance. ‘I can tell that you’ll be the strongest. Strongest than all of us!’ He reached for his egg and handed it to Maylene. ‘This is yours. An early gift from me to you for becoming a Gym Leader in the future.’
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    Default Re: The Barefoot, Fighting Genius!

    Interesting start, I'm not to interested in Maylene but I'll see if you manage to rise my interest in her. The prologue was great, but kinda short.

    So, will the first chapter be set several years after or will you explain her childhood through the chapters?

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    Default Re: The Barefoot, Fighting Genius!

    The first chapter will be set a few years after the prologue, about 2 to 3 years. But still before Generation I/III. She will still be very young, so this story will follow her from her childhood until she becomes a Gym Leader, and what happens after that.

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    Quick grammar lesson.

    When dialogue is done, there are three possible outcomes following it.

    1. The dialogue is followed by a title that is not a name (a he/she/it/the). If this is the case, the title is lowercase. ("Hi," the boy said. "My name's Ian!")
    2. The dialogue is followed by a title that IS a name (Maylene, for instance). If this is the case, the name is uppercase. ("Hi," Ian said.)
    3. The dialogue is followed by a sentence that can stands on its own. If this is the case, you end the sentence with a period instead of with a comma and capitalize the first letter after the dialogue ends. (Example: "Hi, my name's Ian!" The boy lifted a hand and waved shyly.)


    Anyways...

    Yay! You started this! It's already coming off to an interesting beginning. I like Maylene's fierce personality: fits her quite well. Crasher Wake is also his usual... weirdish self. =p

    I can't wait 'till Chapter 1!


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    Default Re: The Barefoot, Fighting Genius!

    Good stuff so far. Maylene will be strongest than anybody!

    Also, if you must, turn every Gym Leader into a Large Ham.
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    Default Re: The Barefoot, Fighting Genius!

    A bit short even for a prologue, but I liked how you introduced Maylene, I never thought she'll be a firecracker to actually dare to punch Wake.

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    Quote Originally Posted by IanDonyer View Post
    Quick grammar lesson.

    When dialogue is done, there are three possible outcomes following it.

    1. The dialogue is followed by a title that is not a name (a he/she/it/the). If this is the case, the title is lowercase. ("Hi," the boy said. "My name's Ian!")
    2. The dialogue is followed by a title that IS a name (Maylene, for instance). If this is the case, the name is uppercase. ("Hi," Ian said.)
    3. The dialogue is followed by a sentence that can stands on its own. If this is the case, you end the sentence with a period instead of with a comma and capitalize the first letter after the dialogue ends. (Example: "Hi, my name's Ian!" The boy lifted a hand and waved shyly.)


    Anyways...

    Yay! You started this! It's already coming off to an interesting beginning. I like Maylene's fierce personality: fits her quite well. Crasher Wake is also his usual... weirdish self. =p

    I can't wait 'till Chapter 1!
    Isn't that what I was doing...? O.o
    Crasher Wake is not weird, at least not very weird. Maylene is quite "fierce" though. :P

    Quote Originally Posted by El_Noobio View Post
    Good stuff so far. Maylene will be strongest than anybody!

    Also, if you must, turn every Gym Leader into a Large Ham.
    I didn't quite understand the "Large Ham" thing. Seems to me like another way of saying "loud and hyper". :P

    Quote Originally Posted by Flame Getsuga Haze View Post
    A bit short even for a prologue, but I liked how you introduced Maylene, I never thought she'll be a firecracker to actually dare to punch Wake.
    I realize it was short, but it wasn't intended to be long. The first chapter is a longer than my average chapter length though.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kyuuketsuki View Post
    I didn't quite understand the "Large Ham" thing. Seems to me like another way of saying "loud and hyper". :P
    More like 'overacting for the sake of overacting'.

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    “Thank you,” He said with a hint of accent in his voice. “But I think the real guest of honor is you, Cynthia! You’ve been the Champion for less than a month and you’re still handling things amazingly! You’re even younger than me, and stronger!”
    Lowercase H.

    Thank you for accepting me in your ranks!” He shouted into the microphone, causing everyone to jump out of shock in their seats.
    Lowercase H.
    “Excuse my daughter,” An average-looking man said as he held his daughter from delivering another punch.
    Lowercase A.

    Anyways, Crasher Wake IS weird, at least in my mind. =p To each his own though, I suppose.


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    Nice intro! And you got the characterizations spot on too!

    I kind of imagined Maylene as a hyperactive and pugnacious woman and Crasher Wake is always the larger-than-life luchador wrestler.

    Cynthia letting out a girlish scream made me laugh.
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    Oh ok. You learn something new everyday. I just opened a few books of mine to check, so you were right. I will play the card: "English is not my first language". I'll go through Chapter 1 now and fix this mistake. Thanks! :D

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    Nice intro! And you got the characterizations spot on too!

    I kind of imagined Maylene as a hyperactive and pugnacious woman and Crasher Wake is always the larger-than-life luchador wrestler.

    Cynthia letting out a girlish scream made me laugh.
    Amazing compliment! Thanks! :D

    I imagined Cynthia as a teenager in this, which is why I think I went a little too far with her, made her a little too girlish, I guess? Maylene is defiantly hyperactive, but it's only because she's was four in the prologue, and will remain a very young child for quite some time. Crasher Wake as I have written him is exactly as I perceived him in the games, and this will become more apparent in the next chapters.

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    It was another rainy day in Route 212. The water smashed against the mud and caused everything in close proximity to be covered in it; Riolu and Floatzel were no exception.

    The orange Pokémon with the two tails, an inflation device around his body, and fins attached to his hands covered his body with a great mass of water and jumped seemingly an impossible distance for such a Pokémon. His tails began spinning as he descended, causing the water covering him to spin as well, and he launched himself at an unmatched speed before he hit the ground. His tails were spinning more rapidly with every second and increasing his speed, and the water around him left a straight trail behind him that collided with the ground as he went forward.

    The Floatzel smashed against a small blue and black Pokémon. The Riolu had red eyes, long arms compared to his size, swift black feet and a singly blue tail. The small Pokémon tried to hold Floatzel from connecting with his body, but his attempts failed. As soon as Floatzel’s Aqua Jet connected, the water exploded forwards and covered Riolu. Floatzel’s head pushed Riolu back a few paces and eventually flew him away towards his trainer, who jumped forward to catch her Pokémon.

    A slightly older Maylene with a band-aid on her nose held her Pokémon in her arms and rubbed his bruised belly. ‘We didn’t lose,’ she said after Riolu looked at her with obvious concern in his eyes. ‘There’s no win or loss in training.’ Riolu smiled and she smiled back. Her head rose up to see her opponent.

    Floatzel was looking with a different kind of concern in his eyes when his trainer, Crasher Wake, approached him and petted him. ‘We didn’t go too hard on you guys, did we?’ He said. Crasher Wake had lived enough time in Sinnoh for his accent to become faint, but it was still clear at some points.

    ‘We’re as strong as before!’ Maylene said excitedly. ‘We will even become strongest than this!’

    Crasher Wake laughed and returned Floatzel to his Poké Ball, while Maylene carried Riolu in her arms. She followed her mentor through the rain as he talked. ‘You’re old enough now to know the difference between Strongest and Stronger!’ He laughed. ‘About time to say it the correct way, eh?’

    ‘Strongest is my catch phrase!’ Maylene shouted over the rain, even though it wasn’t necessary.

    ‘It’s a word, not a phrase,’ he laughed again, only harder this time, which also seemed unnecessary. ‘You’re a real fighter!’

    Maylene grinned and let out an excited ‘Yeah!’ that Riolu helped her with as they both raised their right fists. By then, the group had reached Pastoria City, a city full of trees and fresh grass due to the close proximity it had with the rain. Crasher Wake opened the door of his Gym for Maylene and they walked to his room at the far end of the Gym. Crasher Wake had to press a few buttons to reach the Gym Leader spot, and a few secret buttons to open a door in the wall behind him that led to his room.

    Maylene sat on one chair and let go of Riolu, who sat down on the floor quietly awaiting food. Crasher Wake noticed him and grabbed a small bag of berries; he handed it to Riolu. ‘Don’t eat too fast,’ he laughed again. ‘And don’t finish it. Keep some for your trip back to Veilstone City.’

    He then grabbed his own chair and dragged it to sit in front of Maylene, who was rubbing mud off of her bare feet. ‘How are your parents?’

    Maylene kept rubbing at her feet as she answered. ‘They’re fighting again,’ she sighed. ‘I don’t know why. They always go to their room and fight and think I can’t hear them. But I do and I sometimes hear ‘Money’ and they get too loud and I go outside and train and…’ She paused to catch her breath before continuing again. ‘And then I go outside and train and then come here when and train with you. Dad knows I come here to you sometimes, but mom always worry about me being alone outside. Do you have food?’

    Crasher Wake got up and grabbed a microwaveable berry pie from his fridge. He stuck it in the microwave after removing the wrapping and setting it on a plate. ‘Just remember that you can always come here whenever you want to,’ he said. ‘You know that, right?’

    ‘I got mud on the floor,’ Maylene said even though the mud was visible ever since they had entered the Gym and she was just stating the obvious. ‘Do you clean?’

    ‘I just clean this room with Floatzel, but the rest of the Gym I just flood to clean!’ He laughed again and produced a fresh-looking pie from the microwave. The smell of berries overwhelmed the room and Riolu almost abandoned his food for this new meal. The purple pie appeared to shine as Crasher Wake carried it underneath the white lights of the room. He handed it to Maylene who almost jumped into it. ‘Your hands are muddy!’

    She let out a sigh of frustration and got up to wash them. Crasher Wake dragged a table and set it between their chairs, put the pie on top of it, produced some utensils from a nearby drawer, and pushed it all to Maylene as she returned to her seat.

    The utensils proved useless as Maylene dug into the pie with her hands and shoved large quantities into her mouth. Crasher Wake laughed while Riolu looked on in regret; Maylene destroyed a perfect pie! The Pokémon returned to his own food before the back of his head received what seemed like a ball of pie that pushed his forward and onto the floor. Maylene laughed as Riolu got up and threw some berries back, and soon enough the pair had ended up with one quarter of the pie on the floor, half the berries smashed against the walls, and the remaining divided between their stomachs.

    Crasher Wake was worried at first when he saw Maylene eating berries as they were usually only eaten by humans, but throughout his time with her, he learned that she was no ordinary girl. There was no female in all of Sinnoh that was even slightly similar to her, not in the entire world either.

    ‘Are you ready to go back home?’ Crasher Wake said. ‘I want to visit Veilstone again, so I’ll come with you.’

    ‘We can train on our way back!’ Maylene jumped up in excitement and Riolu copied. ‘Come on! Let’s go! Run run run run run!’

    Maylene punched the door open and jumped head first in to the waters of the Gym while Riolu jumped from one platform to the other. She eventually reemerged from the water and walked out of the door. She shook her entire body and splashed water all over Riolu. Crasher Wake appeared through the door behind them and grabbed them both. He put Maylene on his left shoulder while Riolu sat on his right. ‘We’re not training! We’re running! Are you ready?!’ He shouted.

    ‘Yes!’ Maylene shouted in happiness as Crasher Wake ran forward through the city aiming to reach Veilstone City quicker than ever. The wind caused Maylene’s pink hair to fly behind her in the same manner as Riolu’s ears.

    For a few moments, Maylene forgot about her worries. She forgot about her parents, about becoming the strongest, about taking her father’s position as a Gym Leader, about one day defeating Crasher Wake, and every other bit of information that ever crossed her mind throughout her life. Her entire concentration was on the wind. At that moment, she became carefree again, just like the time where she received Riolu as an egg from Crasher Wake.

    She didn’t know what the future held for her nor cared. It was all about her having fun with her life. She wrapped her arms around Crasher Wake’s neck as he began to pick up more speed. The receptionist at the Hotel Grand Lake shouted at them as they ran past; Crasher Wake had apparently knocked a few items and people down, which made Maylene give out her childish laughter. They ran through Route 214 and stopped as soon as they reached Veilstone City.

    Crasher Wake panted heavily as he put the pair down. ‘I shouldn’t be this tired!’ He said and stood up straight. ‘I am strong!’

    ‘But I am Strongest!’ Maylene grinned and punched Crasher Wake, and he acted as if she threw him back a few paces. ‘Let’s go! Mom has dinner for sure!’ She grinned again and ran towards the Gym. Riolu ran after her and Crasher Wake followed. She burst through the door of the Gym, jumped over a few obstacles, evaded a few punches, and finally reached the Gym Leader spot, where she began to hit a few secret buttons.

    ‘Why did they try to punch you?’ Crasher Wake asked and looked at the other Trainers in the Gym. ‘Do you want me to punish them?’

    ‘I told them to do that!’ Maylene laughed. ‘I told them to help me become the Strongest! They said yes, and now I have to not get hit by them!’

    ‘What if one of them actually hits you?’

    ‘Then I hit back!’ Maylene grinned and punched Crasher Wake, something she got used to doing. ‘Just like you let me punch you to train! I let them punch me to train!’

    ‘Maylene, is that you?’ A delicate female voice came from the other side of the door and it slowly opened up to reveal her mother. ‘Crasher Wake, what a nice surprise. Please, do come in.’ She held the door open for the pair, and picked Riolu up as if he was am infant.

    ‘What’s for dinner, mom?’

    ‘Honey, I can smell the berry pie. You also have stains; so don’t deny it, you already ate’

    Maylene and Crasher Wake exchanged laughs. ‘I’ll go catch up with your father!’ He said and walked away to her parents’ room, while Maylene followed her mother to the kitchen, where she was cooking, as far as Maylene was concerned, food.

    ‘How was your training today, Maylene?’ She said as she stirred something that was cooking on the oven.

    ‘Very good,’ Maylene smiled. ‘I’m sure I’ll become the next Gym Leader! You will give me food, right?’

    ‘I’m sure you will,’ she said. ‘You’re a very strong young lady, you can become the next Gym Leader. But honey, why don’t you aim higher? I’m sure you’re strong enough to become the Champion. Cynthia is young, and she managed to do it. You can do it as well. You can defeat her.’

    ‘Cynthia is a cool person,’ Maylene responded. ‘I liked watching her battle. I really like her hair.’ Maylene’s mother almost burs into laughter at the last statement, as Maylene was never the type of girl who took an interest in these issues, and hearing it just seemed odd. ‘I can defeat her,’ Maylene continued. ‘But I don’t want to! I want to make daddy proud by taking his position!’

    Maylene held her fists up and crossed her arms to shape an X in front of her chest. ‘I will also become an Aura Master!’ She shouted and stretched her arms out, as if she was firing some sort of an aura attack. She then stood normally again and smiled at her mother. ‘You are giving me food, right?’

    ‘Sure thing, honey,’ her mother laughed and walked towards her. ‘I will feed you until you become the Strongest and even after you become all grown up.’ She flicked at Maylene’s forehead and smiled. ‘Because even when you grow up and become the Strongest, you will still be my child.’
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    Great chapter, as expected. Of course, the Aura Master sign rather disturbs me, since it reminds me of Pink Floyd's 'The Wall', a movie and album by said band, where the main character makes the arm position and movement the insignia of his hate group, The Hammers. Just a personal qualm, though. Also, there's a few mispellings. Crasher Wake and Maylene's interactions are very heartwarming as well.

    Good job, Kyuu!
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    Quote Originally Posted by El_Noobio View Post
    Great chapter, as expected. Of course, the Aura Master sign rather disturbs me, since it reminds me of Pink Floyd's The Wall, where the main character makes the arm position the insignia of his hate group, The Hammers. Just a personal qualm, though. Also, there's a few mispellings. Crasher Wake and Maylene's interactions are very heartwarming as well.

    Good job, Kyuu!
    Never listened to Pink Floyd (they're a band, I think), but aura won't play an important part, so don't worry. Glad to see that you've liked how they interacted. As I imagined it (and stated in the title of the chapter), he is like a father to her. Thanks for commenting!

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    ^^
    And, seeing as her father is a gambling addict, the closest thing she ever will have to a father. Also, I don't mind the accidental reference. Pink Floyd's a good band, a stoner favorite, actually.

    NOTE: I'm drug free, but was introduced to many a good band by my stoner friends in high school.

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