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    Author: Paul
    Rating: PG
    Overview: Written in episodes, like the TV series.
    Episode: 001

    Notes: The main character's name is Green. He has no relation to Green in PokéSpecial. None of the characters do, but they all have names deriving from the original Kanto games. I used -text- to show what a character is doing and [text] for camera and general movement. Please give comments...I NEVER get comments -.-;;

    Episode 001

    [Camera zooms in on a dark room. Inside a boy sleeps peacefully, snoring softly. His alarm clock ticks the seconds quietly, and soon reaches seven o'clock. Suddenly, alarm clock springs to life and begins TINGing violently. The surprised boy jumps out of bed, skewing the covers. He trips and sprawls on the floor, desperately trying to turn off the earsplitting alarm.]

    Boy: *sigh* -sits down and rests against the cabinet- Too early to wake up...*snore*

    Feminine Voice: GREEN! GREEN, WAKE UP! TIME FOR BREAKFAST!

    [Green springs into action, suddenly remembering what day it is. He grabs a pair of loose jeans and a green T-shirt. After he's done getting dressed he bolts out of his room and down the stairs.]

    Green: COMING MOTHER! Just can't wait until I can get my very first poké- [Green misses a step and goes tumbling down the rest of the staircase, coming to a halt after a bone jarring crash into the wall.] -sweatdrop- Owww...

    Green's Mother: Green...was that you...? Come here! I need to take a look at you now! What did I tell you about running down those stairs?!

    Green: -picks himself up and starts walking gingerly. Finding no apparent injuries, he resumes his brisk pace into the kitchen- I'mfinemom! RightnowI'llbeheadingovertoOak'shouseBYE! -Green bolts out the door, grabbing his toast on the way out-

    Green's Mother: -deep sigh- That boy...

    [Camera refocuses on Green running down the dirt path, making a cloud trail behind him. Oak's Labratory looms up ahead, and soon Green arrives.]

    Green: -Knocks on door softly- Professor? -Knocks door louder- Professor Oaaaaak. -Begins to pound on door- PROFESSOR! I'M HERE!

    Professor Oak: [Audience sees Green staring sulkily at the door] I'm coming, I'm coming! [The door slowly opens to reveal a very tired Prof. Oak] Why Green! I wasn't expecting you for another -checks watch- 3 hours. But, come in, I won't turn a young trainer down. -smiles warmly-

    Green: Why thanks professor!

    [Green begins to walk in, and Oak shuts the door behind them. Camera switches to a frontal view of Oak and Green walking down the front hall.]

    Prof Oak: So, what do you think you want? Bulbasaur? Charmander? Squirtle?

    Green: BULBASAUR! BULBA-BULBA-BULBASAUR! -his eyes turn to hearts as he imagines getting his very own bulbasaur-

    Prof Oak: Heh, well, glad you have a lot of enthusisium! I have the pokéballs stored over here, in the library.

    [Camera swings around and faces forward. Audience is overwhelmed by the multitude of books on rows and rows of shelves. Camera slowly pans over them until it gets to a small pedestal holding three pokéballs.]

    Green: There it is! That's where my bulbasuar is! -runs up to the pedistal and starts examining each and everyone- Which is it Professor?

    Prof Oak: -slowly walks over- If my memory serves me righ, and lately it's been pretty bad truthfully, it should be that one. -points to the one closest to Green-

    Green: -picks up the pokéball reverently- This one?

    Prof Oak: Why don't you open it up and see? -chuckles-

    Green: Go-o! Pokéball!

    [Camera zooms in on the white shape that turns out to be a fine looking bulbasaur.]

    Green: Oh! Bulbasaur! -drops down and immediately starts to hug it intensely-

    [In the background, a knocking is beginning to become apparent. It's getting louder.]

    Prof Oak: Ah! That must be another eager trainer! Green, why don't you bring bulbasaur and come greet them?

    Green: sounds ok to me! -turns to bulbasaur- OK buddy?

    Bulbasuar: -nods affirmatively- Bulba!

    [Camera follows the three as they walk back down the main hall. The knocking has remained polite, but has a definete impatience to it.]

    [The trio gets to the door, and Oak pulls it open. Camera gets blinded by sunlight, fade out. TO BE CONTINUED shows onscreen.]

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    Hmmm.

    Usually, I'd say the script style would be a strike against it, but in this case, it seems a well-written script. More to the point, script is actually somewhat suitable to the lighthearted nature of this fic ; the "heart shaped eyes" would feel far more out of place in a narrative fiction.

    The story, in itself, is not too original to date - a color named trainer getting his starter pokémon does not exactly make for a brilliantly original plot, but again, the light-hearted nature to date helps that ; it will be interesting to see how it develops.
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    The beginning is painfully unoriginal XD But at least I had the trainer get up EARLY instead of late >>;

    It gets deeper as the plot advances. Much more originality to follow. It's meant to be a light hearted romp in Kanto though.

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    Lighthearted is good. It's a nice break from the serious dark stuff, which is all good writers ever seem willing to tackle (yes, I'm guilty of that too). .
    Quote Originally Posted by Mintaka and Hurristat
    He's an evil director / He'll give out infractions / Do something wrong / And he takes direct actions
    Then what'll he do?/ He'll permaban you / You find your name slashed / With a message, 'Adieu'
    Sooooo...watch out!
    "It is said that the federal government, if it was in charge of the Sahara, would run out of sand in five years. Private enterprise, being more efficient, would do it in half the time - and they'd make money off the bridges." - me.
    "My friends, love is better than anger. Hope is better than fear. Optimism is better than despair. So let us be loving, hopeful and optimistic. And we’ll change the world." - Jack Layton's last letter. Rest in peace, Jack.

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    lol If I actually posted my writings, you'd be surprised this came from me XD I'm a hardcore horror writer =P

    >>; Any suggestions for Episode 002?

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    Note: I'll start off each new episode with the last couple of lines from the old one as a recap.

    Episode 002

    [Camera follows the three as they walk back down the main hall. The knocking has remained polite, but has a definete impatience to it.]

    [The trio gets to the door, and Oak pulls it open.]

    Girl: Heya Oak! -turns to Green- And GREEN!

    Green:YELLOW! Glad you could make it! -beams-

    [Camera backs up to include the newcomer, Yellow, into the screen. She has on short jean shorts with a turquiose belly shirt. She's wearing a yellow bandana over her long brown hair.]

    Yellow: Professor...can I get my pokémon now?

    Oak: Of course Yellow! Green's already taken bulbasaur-

    Bulbasaur: BULBA!

    Oak: As you can see, so we have charmander and squirtle left.

    Yellow: That's good, because I want charmander!! -sighs in contentment-

    Oak: OK, let's head over to the library.

    [Camera follows the four walking down the hall. A paras waddled out from the shadows and began to scuttle in front of them, heading for the library.]

    Oak: Paras! You rascal! I've been looking for you. Come here!

    Paras: -turns around and scuttles back to the Prof- Pa-ras!

    Oak: There we go!

    [Paras scuttles up his arm, coming to a rest on his shoulder.]

    Yellow: OMIGOSH! THAT IS THE CUTEST THING I'VE EVER SEEN! Oh Professor, can I pweeeaaaase have it!?!

    Oak: -sweatdrop- Well...I guess if you really want to-

    Yellow: THANK YOU! -dances around hall- I got a PARAS! I got a PARAS!

    [Green and Oak look at each other and sweatdrop.]

    Yellow: Comer here itty-bitty paras! I'm going to name you Shroom! -gently lifts paras off of Oaks shoulder and holds it in her arms-

    Shroom: -clicks its teeth happily- Paras!

    Oak: Have any of you seen Red? He was supposed to be here -checks watch- oh. I guess you two were so early you've got me confused now! He still has two and a half hours! -laughs heartily-

    [The two trainers join in laughing. Yellow sets down Shroom, and it goes over to talk to bulbasaur. Camera lifts up to rejoin the people's interactions.]

    Green: So I can leave now, on my own pokémon journey?!

    Oak: Yes, just say goodbye to your mother -winks-

    Green: Ok! Bye! Thanks again!

    Yellow: Ya! Thanks bunches! I just love my new paras!

    [Green and Yellow collect their respective pokémon and start to head down the hallway towards the door.]

    Oak: Oh! Yellow, can I see you for a moment?

    Yellow: Sure...what do you want professor?

    [Green doesn't stop walking and exits Prof's lab.]

    Oak: That paras was found damaged in the forest, and is a bit skittish! Make sure you handle it with a lot of love.

    Yellow: Don't worry Prof! -grins widely-

    Oak: I can see it's already starting to warm to you, so I won't. Here's its pokéball!

    Yellow: Ok. I think I'd rather just carry it right now. -clips pokéball to her belt- By the way, is it a boy or a girl?

    Oak: It's a girl. I guess you can catch up with Green now...have fun on your trip!

    Yellow: Sure. And thanks again Professor Oak! -starts to run out to catch Green-

    Oak: -yelling out the door- You're welcome!

    [Camera switches to Green coming out of his house, backpack in hand.]

    Green: Now where did Yellow go...?

    Boy: Why ya wanna know?

    [Green jumps. He turns to face Blue.]

    Green: Blue. -scowl- Yellow and I are leaving to start our pokémon journey. Hmph.

    Blue: Let me guess, you chose that overgrown weed bulbasaur, right? -snicker-

    Green: It's not a weed! It could whip that puddle of a pokémon squirtle that you want!

    Blue: Oh ya? Let's see!

    Green: Why don't you go get your squirtle before you start instigating battles! Forget that part? -rolls on the ground laughing-

    Blue: Maybe I WILL! Now! -Runs off to the lab-

    [Green begins to head over to Route 1. As it begins to come into view, we see that it is way overgrown and dark. Green frowns and sweatdrops.]

    Yellow: Hey! Green! Wait up!

    Green: -turns towards Yellow running after him- I was wondering why you'd show up! -smiles-

    Yellow: Sorry I'm late. My mom had to make sure I had everything! Oh, and I need to tell you something...-fidgets-

    [Camera circles the pair, and slowly backs up, getting bulbasaur and Shroom, sitting on the ground, into the shot . Camera fades out on a side profile of the pair facing each other. TO BE CONTINUED shows up onscreen.]

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    This is quite amusing. It is an old storyline, but this is a cute new twist on it.

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    The begining starts out pretty ho-hum, but the storyline does stray from the original Kanto story. ^-^

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