Originally Posted by Pavell
I'm glad you like it. ^^ Some of the mystery concerning the xatu get explained in a few chapters, and the rest... well. By volume two, maybe. Maybe. xD
I have some issues balancing "humor" with storytelling, I think, and thank you for pointing them out. Don't worry; there isn't going to be much fourth wall breaking in the future. Glad you enjoyed!
Originally Posted by Flaze
Haha, glad you liked too! As for the narration bit--I actually struggle with first person, honestly, because putting myself in the mind of another is fairly difficult, but I thought it would be a fun exercise in style
and all the Young Adult fiction I've been reading lately has been in first person for some reason, which is probably important
. There's a lot of introspection in these first few chapters because I'm cheap and have to set the stage somehow
, but I promise that it'll go away in a couple of chapters, if that helps!
Originally Posted by jjl2357
I've never actually read Clouded Sky, but my beta reader mentioned this to me before. She said that the similarities stop after the murkrow and (I think) the xatu, though, and some social stigma against dark-types, though, so I think it'll be okay?