Waah! Thank you very much!
I think its pretty good
Sounds good, I especially like the first 4 lines
I totally missed you! I checked like every day for a month!
yeah well my sister was throwing one of her temper tantrums so i had to hurry and finish it up... and
sorry about that! i want Moonlight to act like how her dad did. ill try harder next time!
You need more description, like how Moonlight and Leon look like as well as Ash and Misty (they are older than in the anime so it needs some description) It was also short and a bit rushed. Also it reminds me of the first chapter of one of my fics.